Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Magé

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Magé

• Nominated by: Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 10:27, July 5, 2020 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: A followup from her aide.

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Support

1. UberSoldat93 (talk) 16:06, July 6, 2020 (UTC)
2. OtterSurf (talk) 11:35, July 10, 2020 (UTC)
3. Imperators II^(Talk) 12:12, October 2, 2020 (UTC)
4. Ayrehead02 (talk) 19:21, 17 November 2020 (UTC)
5. MasterFred(talk) 19:52, 18 December 2020 (UTC)

Object

UberSoldat

• Avoid the repetition of "better known as" in the first paragraph.
  • Fixed. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 09:55, July 6, 2020 (UTC)
• Does the story refer to the Thunderstrike as a CR90?
  • Sourced to BTC. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 09:55, July 6, 2020 (UTC)
    • Now you've sourced the name of the vessel too. UberSoldat93 (talk) 10:39, July 6, 2020 (UTC)
      • Ah yeh it's name is mentioned later in the story nevermind. Moved ref. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 10:47, July 6, 2020 (UTC)
• Does the story also specify who the character was speaking to over the comlink?
  • "The comlink she had been shouting into slid from her now-limp hand." Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 09:55, July 6, 2020 (UTC)
• Please revise the second paragraph. There are too many sentences that can be reworded to flow better (For example, "Howl had Brand push Magé out of her chair before he looted her desk of the governor's Nabooian whiskey." This sounds like it was Brand's desk rather than the governor's). UberSoldat93 (talk) 09:39, July 6, 2020 (UTC)
  • switched the synonym around. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 09:55, July 6, 2020 (UTC)
• "Howl, although, was already aware of this fact, and gradually dissuaded Brand from collecting the bounty" "Gradually" implies this took place over a long period of time. Is this the case, or did it happen at that moment?
  • The whole story, besides the moments with Magé and the flashbacks, is the conversation. Unsure how long it takes in terms of IU time, though, so I've removed gradually. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 11:35, July 6, 2020 (UTC)
• "...jutting at her unconscious body while she snorted." Did you mean to say "snored"? UberSoldat93 (talk) 11:19, July 6, 2020 (UTC)
  • Story says snorted but it implies snoring anyways. Changed. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 11:35, July 6, 2020 (UTC)
    • Must've been a typo. UberSoldat93 (talk) 11:38, July 6, 2020 (UTC)
• "When identifying the Thunderstrike, she was able to deduce that Twilight Company was present at the planet." I feel this information isn't really necessary for the P&T. UberSoldat93 (talk) 14:03, July 6, 2020 (UTC)
  • Removed. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 15:36, July 6, 2020 (UTC)

Otter gonna ott

• "It's" in the P+T should be spelled "its." OtterSurf (talk) 08:55, July 10, 2020 (UTC)
  • Done. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 09:27, July 10, 2020 (UTC)

Imp

• Just checking: is "Hope" in the lead quote capitalized in the source?
  • It is.
• Does the source capitalize "Imperial Headquarters" like that? There should be consistency with respect to this between Bio and P&T.
  • It doesn't, fixed.
• The fact that Brand specifically intended to kill Howl (as opposed to the generic "collect the bounty on him", which could also refer to him remaining alive) is intro-exclusive. Imperators II^(Talk) 18:39, October 1, 2020 (UTC)
  • Fixed. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 11:58, October 2, 2020 (UTC)

Ayrehead

• I think rather than "In that time", which is a bit vague, you could say something like "During his exchange with Brand," or something similar. Ayrehead02 (talk) 16:39, 17 November 2020 (UTC)
  • Changed. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 17:03, 17 November 2020 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 19:52, 18 December 2020 (UTC)