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Magé's aide
- Nominated by: Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 07:46, May 23, 2020 (UTC)
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Fan26 (Talk) 15:34, May 23, 2020 (UTC)- UberSoldat93
(talk) 20:01, May 23, 2020 (UTC) - QuiGonJinn
(Talk) 09:56, May 27, 2020 (UTC) - —spookywillowwtalk 18:20, May 28, 2020 (UTC)
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The first sentence is a little awkward, I suggest switching up the order so it mentions Mage first,identify them as "the governor of...", and then finish by saying they had an aide during the Imp era.Fan26 (Talk) 13:45, May 23, 2020 (UTC)- Sorted. Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 14:03, May 23, 2020 (UTC)
The article says the aide was guarding the office and was incapacitated by a dart, along with Mage. Could you expand on where Mage came from/what they were doing? As it is now Mage only identified as being present after being knocked unconscious along with the aide, who was a sentence earlier indicated to be alone outside the office.Fan26 (Talk) 14:15, May 23, 2020 (UTC)- How does this look? Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 14:24, May 23, 2020 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 18:22, May 31, 2020 (UTC)