Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Felinx

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Felinx

• Nominated by: Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 21:29, July 1, 2020 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Another CA pushed over the word limit by Shadow Fall.

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

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Support

1. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 21:44, September 8, 2020 (UTC)
2. Supreme Emperor (talk) 22:04, September 8, 2020 (UTC)
3. Imperators II^(Talk) 06:29, September 9, 2020 (UTC)
4. UberSoldat93 (talk) 06:34, September 9, 2020 (UTC)
5. Zed42 (talk) 08:48, September 9, 2020 (UTC)

Object

TK

• I have a couple of issues with the intro:
  • First of all, it's oddly split. I understand how you'd want to put it chronologically, but right now you have a sentence about Quell, two sentences about BTC, followed by a sentence about Quell again. You could probably split this into two more detailed paragraphs, starting with BTC and felinx description and moving on to Quell.
    • I don't think this would be applicable, the intro is almost half the size of the history and splitting it would make two rather thin paragraphs that aren't squashed by an infobox. As for continuity, I'm pretty sure you're meant to keep it chronological. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 11:38, July 2, 2020 (UTC)
      • Works for me, you have the source material but I thought I'd check. TK-462 (talk) 19:24, July 5, 2020 (UTC)
  • Regarding the final intro sentence: "Around 5 ABY, Quell told the IT-O Interrogation Unit IT-O about her felinx and how the pet had died." Do you have any details to this, maybe why she was in that situation, why she mentioned it, and a bit of specificity when it comes to the death? I know most of that is covered in other areas, but due to the way the intro is written right now, it seems a little random, it would be better if it was connected a little better to the rest of the introduction.
    • Some context has been added. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 11:38, July 2, 2020 (UTC)
  • Could you try to clean up the first sentence in a way that doesn't make it sound like felinx ownership is only limited to the Imperial area? Maybe something about them being known to be owned in the Imperial era.
    • How does that look? Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 11:38, July 2, 2020 (UTC)
      • Other than trying to getting it to flow into the next intro sentence, looks solid. TK-462 (talk) 19:24, July 5, 2020 (UTC)
• You could use some sectioning in the biography, the timeline definitely allows that. This would also allow for a quote between Quell and IT-O.
  • There's two 6-line paragraphs and a 4-line paragraph, splitting that into sub-sections would be unwise in my opinion. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 11:38, July 2, 2020 (UTC)
    • Assuming there's no more information to add, that's fine by me. TK-462 (talk) 19:24, July 5, 2020 (UTC)
• Finally, I don't think that the nature of this article really calls for a MAJOR spoiler warning. TK-462 (talk) 00:34, July 2, 2020 (UTC)
  • "while the pair were stranded on a planetoid in the Cerberon system.," which I've added for one of the above sentences, is a plot spoiler. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 11:38, July 2, 2020 (UTC)
    • I don't have the source material, so I trust your judgment here. TK-462 (talk) 19:24, July 5, 2020 (UTC)

Fan

• Species is linked to twice in the first paragraph of the "History" section.
• "which Quell refused to attend" Putting the cat down isn't really an event that can be described as being "attended" IMO. I'd say it's fine to say she didn't go to it here, without outright copying the quote. Fan26 (Talk) 13:33, July 8, 2020 (UTC)
  • Both addressed. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 14:01, July 8, 2020 (UTC)
• "By the Imperial Era, felinx species were kept as pets. Yrica Quell... and her family owned a female member of this species" Okay, I think this can be reworded a bit. Change it so it says that "members of the" felinx species were kept as pets, and that they owned a "female felnix" rather than a "female member of..." Fan26 (Talk) 14:45, July 9, 2020 (UTC)
  • Done. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 15:11, July 9, 2020 (UTC)
• I think Death should be pipelinked through "put down" rather than culling.
  • Done.
• I feel like the second part of the first paragraph in "History", about Chalis' culling, belongs in the second paragraph as it relates to Corbo, instead of being coupled with Quell's backstory.Fan26 (Talk) 21:24, July 12, 2020 (UTC)
  • It would make the second one too bulky and the first very skinny, so I don't think it'd be beneficial. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 21:31, July 12, 2020 (UTC)
    • I've altered it a little so it flows better. Fan26 (Talk) 13:37, July 22, 2020 (UTC)
      • Checks out, thanks. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 18:53, July 22, 2020 (UTC)

Toprawa

• I have some issues with ref 4 that I feel I can only properly resolve by speaking with you directly. Please attempt to get in contact with me on IRC or Discord at your earliest convenience. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 21:13, September 8, 2020 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 08:50, September 9, 2020 (UTC)