Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Sajar (second nomination)

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Sajar

  • Nominated by: Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 04:32, 5 June 2021 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Another former Featured Article; ecks's objections from the review have been satisfied.
  • WookieeProject (optional): WP:TOR

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Support

  1. JediMasterMacaroniAdmiral Ackbar RH(Talk) 17:31, 13 June 2021 (UTC)
  2. OtterSurf (talk) 11:35, 24 June 2021 (UTC)
  3. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 07:53, 27 July 2021 (UTC)
  4. DwartiiDelver (talk) 20:14, 8 August 2021 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Imperators II(Talk) 23:22, 22 December 2021 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote MasterFredCommerce Guild(talk) 08:11, 14 January 2022 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 17:47, 16 January 2022 (UTC)

Object

Macaroni
  • You're in Category:TOR dates usages without act argument, whatever that means.
    • Done.
  • Can 3653 BBY actually be sourced to ref 1?
    • Resourced.
  • Could use an equipment section to discuss his lightsaber and clothing, which is currently being done in skills and abilities.
    • Ehhhh.... done, but frankly it looks rather terrible separate from the P&T.
  • Spaces should be replaced by underscores in filenames (e.g. [[File:Luke_Skywalker.jpg]] instead of [[File:Luke Skywalker.jpg]]).
    • Done.
  • The first P+T paragraph can probably be split into two, it's quite large.
    • Done.
  • Some context for Nar Shaddaa in the Bts would be nice. JediMasterMacaroniAdmiral Ackbar RH(Talk) 19:46, 10 June 2021 (UTC)
CC-8
  • Could use an image in the second bio section.
  • I think we should avoid using the word "this" outside of the Bts. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 09:43, 11 July 2021 (UTC)
Imp
  • Since Blood of the Empire Act 3 doesn't feature Sajar, ref 4 should specify what exactly establishes that he was a Dark Councilor following the comic's events.
    • Hmmm, actually, there's no good way to word it, so I've removed it entirely - basically, we know that he served on the Council sometime *after* 3678 BBY, because the Children were first created then, but honestly that's not enough to necessitate a mention, as he could've served any time in the next 25 years before the war ended.
  • Is there any way to further split up the "Incident on Quesh" section? As it is right now, with the right rail module enabled it takes up an entire one-and-a-half screen on my machine. Imperators II(Talk) 11:26, 15 November 2021 (UTC)
    • Ehhh... I could put one before the gamemechanics but that looks.... rough to me and rather short. Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 20:13, 16 November 2021 (UTC)
      • Trust me, in this age of internet reading and short attention spans, it's better to have a passage slightly on the short side than one that stretches for more than an entire screen. Imperators II(Talk) 20:15, 16 November 2021 (UTC)
        • grumble: done. Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 20:21, 16 November 2021 (UTC)
  • Is there any appropriate image for the "Wrath and forgiveness" section?
    • Nothing on hand, and that's a little too close to the big Sajar image in P&T for my comfort. Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:40, 7 December 2021 (UTC)
      • I see. Conversely, note also that the "Equipment" section is borderline too short to support the image of the lightsaber, which you don't really describe in that much detail in the article anyway—might consider cutting the image. Imperators II(Talk) 10:50, 11 December 2021 (UTC)
  • You've got two consecutive identical refs in the second paragraph of "Early life". Imperators II(Talk) 09:48, 4 December 2021 (UTC)
  • The last thing from me, I believe: "Gundo's scouts captured several Imperial scouts" — can you reword this to avoid the somewhat-awkward repetition? And also, it's not immediately clear whether the "scouts" here refers to Gundo's scouts or the Imperial ones: "but the scouts angered the Padawan". Imperators II(Talk) 10:50, 11 December 2021 (UTC)
UberSoldat
  • I think the birth refs in the infobox should be combined into a note so that the reader knows why that specific year is mentioned.
  • For some of those quotes, is Sajar speaking to anyone? The attribution would benefit from that information.
    • Imp has informed me that there's not really a precedent for doing this all the time, so striking this one. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 10:31, 30 December 2021 (UTC)
  • Currently there's no context for Quesh.
    • I know you won't like this, but does the ref support Quesh being a planet? UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 17:48, 7 January 2022 (UTC)
  • In the Adrenal Research Base image caption, can you add a bit more so that it's connected to Sajar?
  • Is the Eighty-sixth Infantry also referred to as the "86th"? Numbers shouldn't be used if not used by any source. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 09:13, 30 December 2021 (UTC)
    • All done. Believe that 86 was a leftover from the prior naming of that article. Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 17:18, 7 January 2022 (UTC)
Fred strikes back
  • In the second paragraph of the intro, you have two sentences that start with "However." Could you vary the wording a bit? MasterFredCommerce Guild(talk) 07:38, 6 January 2022 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 17:47, 16 January 2022 (UTC)