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Sikurdian privateers
- Nominated by: Erebus Chronus (Talk) 19:38, 9 April 2021 (UTC)
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Nice to see something from the old Marvel comics make a return OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 20:03, 14 April 2021 (UTC)- Erebus got himself a fresh new signature. JediMasterMacaroni
(Talk) 23:12, 14 April 2021 (UTC) - UberSoldat93
(talk) 10:28, 17 April 2021 (UTC) - Great job! --Vitus InfinitusTalk 19:47, 18 April 2021 (UTC)
- Imperators II(Talk) 09:02, 19 April 2021 (UTC)
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UberSoldat
Please introduce Sikurdian into the body.UberSoldat93 (talk) 19:44, 9 April 2021 (UTC)
- Completely forgot to add that. Thanks for catching that. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 20:16, 9 April 2021 (UTC)
- Now the sentence implies the entirety of the CIS naval forces were Sikurdians. UberSoldat93 (talk) 20:17, 9 April 2021 (UTC)
- Still have trouble with that. Does that read better? Erebus Chronus (Talk) 20:21, 9 April 2021 (UTC)
- Now the sentence implies the entirety of the CIS naval forces were Sikurdians. UberSoldat93
- Completely forgot to add that. Thanks for catching that. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 20:16, 9 April 2021 (UTC)
OOM
A little context for Murkhana would helpCategory:Corporate Alliance and Category:Privateering can be addedOOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 06:32, 12 April 2021 (UTC)- Both done. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 13:38, 12 April 2021 (UTC)
- "Fantail-class destroyers on the Corporate Alliance headquarters of the planet Murkhana" I'm a little confused by this line. Are you trying to say that the Fantails were on Murkhana, which was the headquarters of the Corporate Alliance, or that the Fantails were at the Alliance headquarters on the planet Murkhana? OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 16:13, 12 April 2021 (UTC)
- The book describes them as "on" I believe. However, I'm currently away from my computer so I can't check the book to be sure until tomorrow. If it doesn't make sense, I can rewrite it to say they were above instead since it doesn't make sense to me either. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 16:19, 12 April 2021 (UTC)
- I think it's best to check the source for clarification before rewriting it, but there's no need to rush OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 16:28, 12 April 2021 (UTC)
- Alright, now that I was able to check Rise of the Separatists, the book does not specify whether it was on or above. "Fantail-class destroyers defend the Corporate Alliance headquarters of Murkhana with support from Sikurdian privateers." So I'm assuming I can just go ahead and say "the privateers supported Fantail-class destroyers in defending the planet Murkhana, the headquarters of the Corporate Alliance." Erebus Chronus (Talk) 21:08, 13 April 2021 (UTC)
- Yes, judging by context that's most probably the intention. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 07:26, 14 April 2021 (UTC)
- Done. Feel free to make a copy-edit if necessary. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 17:36, 14 April 2021 (UTC)
- Yes, judging by context that's most probably the intention. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 07:26, 14 April 2021 (UTC)
- Alright, now that I was able to check Rise of the Separatists, the book does not specify whether it was on or above. "Fantail-class destroyers defend the Corporate Alliance headquarters of Murkhana with support from Sikurdian privateers." So I'm assuming I can just go ahead and say "the privateers supported Fantail-class destroyers in defending the planet Murkhana, the headquarters of the Corporate Alliance." Erebus Chronus (Talk) 21:08, 13 April 2021 (UTC)
- I think it's best to check the source for clarification before rewriting it, but there's no need to rush OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 16:28, 12 April 2021 (UTC)
- The book describes them as "on" I believe. However, I'm currently away from my computer so I can't check the book to be sure until tomorrow. If it doesn't make sense, I can rewrite it to say they were above instead since it doesn't make sense to me either. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 16:19, 12 April 2021 (UTC)
- "Fantail-class destroyers on the Corporate Alliance headquarters of the planet Murkhana" I'm a little confused by this line. Are you trying to say that the Fantails were on Murkhana, which was the headquarters of the Corporate Alliance, or that the Fantails were at the Alliance headquarters on the planet Murkhana? OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 16:13, 12 April 2021 (UTC)
- Both done. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 13:38, 12 April 2021 (UTC)
For readers with no knowledge of the prequels, I think the article would benefit from mentioning that the Corporate Alliance joined the CISOOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 17:39, 14 April 2021 (UTC)- Is that a good spot for the info? Erebus Chronus (Talk) 17:46, 14 April 2021 (UTC)
- That's fine, but I moved it up because I think the sentences flow better in this instance.
- Is that a good spot for the info? Erebus Chronus (Talk) 17:46, 14 April 2021 (UTC)
Last thing: is it "the Sikurdian privateers" or simply "Sikurdian privateers." There's inconsistency between the body and the BTSOOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 19:01, 14 April 2021 (UTC)- The latter. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 19:23, 14 April 2021 (UTC)
Imp
Recreated this for your BTS pleasure.Imperators II(Talk) 09:34, 18 April 2021 (UTC)- Done. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 16:35, 18 April 2021 (UTC)
- I specifically noted in the Legends article that the group was also referred to as the "Sikurdian privateers" and think that it's definitely worth mentioning in this article's BTS that the Legends name was directly lifted. Imperators II(Talk) 22:19, 18 April 2021 (UTC)
- Is that what you had in mind? Erebus Chronus (Talk) 22:32, 18 April 2021 (UTC)
- I specifically noted in the Legends article that the group was also referred to as the "Sikurdian privateers" and think that it's definitely worth mentioning in this article's BTS that the Legends name was directly lifted. Imperators II(Talk) 22:19, 18 April 2021 (UTC)
- Done. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 16:35, 18 April 2021 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 09:02, 19 April 2021 (UTC)