- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a Good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Xonr
- Nominated by: UberSoldat93 (talk) 12:37, December 26, 2019 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Let's try this again.
(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)
Support
- Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 13:18, December 26, 2019 (UTC)
- Nice work. Zed42 (talk) 19:32, December 31, 2019 (UTC)
Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 04:57, January 3, 2020 (UTC)- Tommy
Macaroni 20:18, January 10, 2020 (UTC) 
How many Greedos were there in all? Imperators II(Talk) 21:15, January 10, 2020 (UTC)
Object
Spooky
Could you implement {{Imagecat}} after creating the redlink category for it?Coruscant and BG-RT's Tavern and Spirits need context.The timeline of Imperial Era is mentioned in the intro - but I think it'd suit to also work that into the Biography to get some better timing on his meeting with Valance.He'd been wearing brown gloves, which could be noted.—spookywillowwtalk 00:18, December 31, 2019 (UTC)- Everything has been addressed. I only added the region for Coruscant because I personally believe adding more information about the planet itself would be redundant since that can be found on the planet's page itself, but feel free to leave your thoughts below. UberSoldat93 (talk) 07:24, December 31, 2019 (UTC)
- That's fine - it only needed to be noted as a planet. But, that Coruscant is a planet can't be referenced to the comic, and needs a separate ref note.—spookywillowwtalk 13:25, December 31, 2019 (UTC)
- I've already added a ref for Ultimate Star Wars so I guess that's covered. UberSoldat93 (talk) 13:38, December 31, 2019 (UTC)
- Altered slightly; I'd just meant the placement of what USW referenced.—spookywillowwtalk 20:05, December 31, 2019 (UTC)
- I've already added a ref for Ultimate Star Wars so I guess that's covered. UberSoldat93 (talk) 13:38, December 31, 2019 (UTC)
- That's fine - it only needed to be noted as a planet. But, that Coruscant is a planet can't be referenced to the comic, and needs a separate ref note.—spookywillowwtalk 13:25, December 31, 2019 (UTC)
- Everything has been addressed. I only added the region for Coruscant because I personally believe adding more information about the planet itself would be redundant since that can be found on the planet's page itself, but feel free to leave your thoughts below. UberSoldat93 (talk) 07:24, December 31, 2019 (UTC)
Zed
I'm not sure that mentioning Silvasu Fi in the intro is necessary. In fact, I'm not sure if the mention in the Personality and traits section is needed either. You can just say that he was a member of a species that possessed horns, or something that combines the two statements.There's still a few uses of "their" remaining. I know rewording the text to remove the need for possessive pronouns is inconvenient, but it should be possible.A quote can be added to the Equipment section, namely the exchange between the weapons droid and Xonr at BG-RT's regarding his weapons.Due to a recent CT proposal, the formatting of comic titles needs to be changed.The Marvel citation can use the {{Marvel}} template, as seen on the page for Target Vader 1.Zed42 (talk) 00:52, December 31, 2019 (UTC)- Addressed everything as much as possible. I noticed that he carried another blaster with him, which he gave to the droid. There are still a two instances of "their" remaining, which I don't think can be removed without causing grammatical issues. UberSoldat93 (talk) 07:24, December 31, 2019 (UTC)
- I attempted to reword to remove the other uses of "their." Zed42 (talk) 07:51, December 31, 2019 (UTC)
- Looks good now, thanks. UberSoldat93 (talk) 08:09, December 31, 2019 (UTC)
- I attempted to reword to remove the other uses of "their." Zed42 (talk) 07:51, December 31, 2019 (UTC)
- Addressed everything as much as possible. I noticed that he carried another blaster with him, which he gave to the droid. There are still a two instances of "their" remaining, which I don't think can be removed without causing grammatical issues. UberSoldat93 (talk) 07:24, December 31, 2019 (UTC)
Detailing Xonr's cybernetics is more appropriate for the Personality and traits section. I've removed the specific mentions of the cybernetic body parts from the Biography to avoid repetition.Zed42 (talk) 07:51, December 31, 2019 (UTC)- Done. UberSoldat93 (talk) 08:09, December 31, 2019 (UTC)
The date of "by 3 ABY" should also be mentioned somewhere in the Biography, since right now it's exclusive to the infobox.Zed42 (talk) 19:07, December 31, 2019 (UTC)- Added, required some rewording. UberSoldat93 (talk) 19:23, December 31, 2019 (UTC)
Toprawa
For starters, I'd like to see the intro given the briefest of expansions. Maybe even one more solid sentence. Two sentences just seems and looks a little skimpy.Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 03:32, January 3, 2020 (UTC)- Nevermind, I took care of this. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 04:56, January 3, 2020 (UTC)
- I've taken the liberty of resolving what would be the remainder of my objections myself, mostly on a lark but also to demonstrate a few things to you for future nominations I hope you will undertake. Firstly, there were a few fairly significant details left out of the article, such as Xonr downing Valance's drink for him and also the fact that Valance didn't just kill him, he blew his head off. I also expanded the Equipment section significantly, which is typical for such articles like this. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 04:56, January 3, 2020 (UTC)
- Thanks. UberSoldat93 (talk) 05:56, January 3, 2020 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 21:15, January 10, 2020 (UTC)