Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Unidentified warehouse (Nakadia)

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Unidentified warehouse (Nakadia)

  • Nominated by: TK-462 (talk) 08:42, May 1, 2020 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: A CAN that got too big. They grow up so fast, don't they?

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Support

  1. Remaining objections sorted via IRC. Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 20:05, May 10, 2020 (UTC)

Objections

Ben
  • It would be better to describe Operation Ringbreaker by its true purpose, attacking numerous soft targets going up to Kuat Drive Yards.
  • Nakadia needs context. If BTC doesn't specify it as a planet there will be other sources to say so.
  • You only need to put warehouse in bold as it's a conjectural article.
  • You need to add the audio book to the appearances.
  • You should specify that Namir wasn't an alien.
  • "One of the targets outlined was Nakadia, which produced chemical weapons for the Imperial war effort." You talk about Nakadia as if it's a separate location. It would be better to present Nakadia and its purposes in the first sentence of the history and Operation Ringbreaker in the next one when specifying Nakadia was among the targets.
    • Ok, the problem now is that the first sentence is centred entirely around Nakadia itself. The way you need to present this is like "The warehouse was built on the hills of[Nakadia with the relevant context]." Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 09:29, May 1, 2020 (UTC)
  • You should specify that the bioweapons came from Coyerti.
  • You should also expand the intro to include the use of the weapons against the Sixty-First and the subsequent destruction of the warehouse. Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 08:51, May 1, 2020 (UTC)
    • Fixed all of the above. TK-462 (talk) 08:42, May 1, 2020 (UTC)
  • There's a quote about the stockpiling of bioweapons you can use from Namir and Chalis's conversation after the destruction of the warehouse. I think there'll be others about the bioweapons etc in that section as well which you can add as long as they at least imply the storing of the weapons. Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 09:29, May 1, 2020 (UTC)
  • Ok there's a few things that need sorting with the intro:
    • Nakadia needs context. I believe BTC says it's an agricultural world as well, something to take in mind.
    • Try not to use Nakadia in the same sentence either, you should use a synonym like "planet" or "world" etc.
    • You should write the first sentence as a summary of the description, then get to the Sixty-First attacking and the subsequent things that took place.
      • This has not been addressed. Furthermore, the Alliance and Twilight Company are introduced in separate sentences, they should be introduced together. I always introduce it as "The Rebel Alliance's Sixty-First Mobile Infantry, better known as…." Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 08:14, May 4, 2020 (UTC)
        • Fixed. TK-462 (talk) 14:54, May 4, 2020 (UTC)
          • "You should write the first sentence as a summary of the description" You missed a spot :P Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 16:07, May 4, 2020 (UTC)
            • I'm sorry, but first sentence of what? The description, intro, or history? TK-462 (talk) 17:01, May 4, 2020 (UTC)
              • The intro, as I've stated at the primary bullet point above ^. Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 17:06, May 4, 2020 (UTC)
                • I think that should fix it? I'm second guessing myself now, because I apparantly can't read or something. TK-462 (talk) 17:14, May 4, 2020 (UTC)
                  • It's fine, I've made stupid mistakes before too. This is what I meant, discounting the other minor fixes I've done. Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 17:22, May 4, 2020 (UTC)
    • If you're using "Twilight Company" in the history, the same can be done for the intro with the "also known as Twilight Company" etc. Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 15:46, May 1, 2020 (UTC)
UberSoldat
  • There's a lot of underlinking in the History section. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 14:11, May 1, 2020 (UTC)
    • I believe should fix it. TK-462 (talk) 14:40, May 1, 2020 (UTC)
  • Double reference in second History paragraph. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 08:40, May 5, 2020 (UTC)
  • Is there no info for a physical description of the warehouse itself? UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 08:43, May 5, 2020 (UTC)
    • There is not, other than that it ended up burned to the ground. TK-462 (talk) 14:04, May 5, 2020 (UTC)
  • Minor objection: Date can be added to the intro. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 18:01, May 13, 2020 (UTC)
  • A warehouse is a structure, and therefore {{Structure}} needs to be used here. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 15:17, May 15, 2020 (UTC)

Comments

  • Just a heads up it's best to wait for the CAN to be failed first and then nominate this. Also you're not supposed to copy and paste signed objections or comments as it counts as falsifying signatures, just to let you know. It's all fine now, an EC will sort the CAN when they have time. Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 08:56, May 1, 2020 (UTC)
    • Ah, shoot. Thanks for the heads up, I got ahead of myself. TK-462 (talk) 08:58, May 1, 2020 (UTC)
  • Another note, when linking Kuat Drive Yards, leave Kuat out as you're not supposed to split links like that. Something that came up in my Davan nomination. I've fixed it now anyway. Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 15:46, May 1, 2020 (UTC)

Vote to remove nomination (AC only)

  1. ACvote Unaddressed objection from Shayanomer over 10 days old. Tommy-Macaroni 15:22, May 25, 2020 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Imperators II(Talk) 15:23, May 25, 2020 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Ayrehead02 (talk) 15:51, May 25, 2020 (UTC)