Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Laan Tik

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Laan Tik

• Nominated by: LucaRoR (talk) 17:47, 28 June 2021 (UTC)
• Nomination comments:

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

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Support

1. Last couple of things handled over Discord. Well done. Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 11:29, 2 July 2021 (UTC)
2. Good job, I would love to see more Canon comic-related GAs. DFaceG (talk) 08:07, 11 July 2021 (UTC)
3. Imperators II^(Talk) 09:08, 1 August 2021 (UTC)
4. Nice work on the objections. Hope to see more from you. UberSoldat93 (talk) 09:54, 2 August 2021 (UTC)
5. MasterFred(talk) 03:48, 3 August 2021 (UTC)

Object

CC-8

• Welcome to the GAN. Intro says he was born in 22 BBY lol. The date there should be shifted to say the battle took place in 22 BBY
  • Still says he was born then. Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 09:40, 29 June 2021 (UTC)
    • Saying born prior to 22 BBY is unnecessary I think, just erase that part from the intro. Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 12:12, 29 June 2021 (UTC)
      • Removed LucaRoR (talk) 12:43, 29 June 2021 (UTC)
• 22 BBY needs to be mentioned in the body
  • Needs to be linked. Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 09:40, 29 June 2021 (UTC)
    • Fixed LucaRoR (talk) 09:54, 29 June 2021 (UTC)
• Grand Army of the Republic is infobox exlclusive.
  • Everything in the intro needs to be in the body too. Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 09:40, 29 June 2021 (UTC)
    • Fixed LucaRoR (talk) 09:54, 29 June 2021 (UTC)
• The first mention of the Republic should come when you introduce the Clone Wars, and it should be really clear there that Tik fought with the Republic forces.
  • Fixed LucaRoR (talk) 09:56, 29 June 2021 (UTC)
• In encyclopedic writing we mostly refer to characters just by their surname after introducing their full name.
  • I've done it, obviously I couldn't do that for quotes LucaRoR (talk) 09:56, 29 June 2021 (UTC)
    • Mostly done, there's just a few still in the legacy section.
      • Fixed LucaRoR (talk) 12:43, 29 June 2021 (UTC)
• Skin and eye color are infobox exclusive, you can mention those in the P&T and make sure to pipelink ColorCommander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 02:49, 29 June 2021 (UTC)
  • Done. LucaRoR (talk) 05:15, 29 June 2021 (UTC)
• The death section should detail that he was using force push against B1 series battle droids.
  • Done. LucaRoR (talk) 12:42, 29 June 2021 (UTC)
    • Need to link Force Push there, make sure you remove the spot where it's linked later too.
      • Fixed LucaRoR (talk) 10:37, 1 July 2021 (UTC) Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 03:36, 30 June 2021 (UTC)
• Needs some context for Hardcase, just specifying that he's a clone trooper will do.
  • Done. LucaRoR (talk) 12:42, 29 June 2021 (UTC)
• At the end of the first sentence of the Legacy section you should specify that Binks was the highest ranking Republic member of the forces on Mimban
  • Done. LucaRoR (talk) 12:42, 29 June 2021 (UTC)
• Same surname thing goes for Jar Jar Binks too. Should use his full name in that image caption as well.
  • Fixed. LucaRoR (talk) 12:42, 29 June 2021 (UTC)
• You've got a few instances of duplicate linking, something to watch out for. There's a tool you can add in preferences to highlight them.
  • I've removed one, I can't see the others. LucaRoR (talk) 12:42, 29 June 2021 (UTC)
    • Death and color are other ones.
      • Fixed LucaRoR (talk) 08:09, 1 July 2021 (UTC) Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 03:36, 30 June 2021 (UTC)
• A quote about the lightsaber in its usage after his death would be good for the equipment section. Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 12:12, 29 June 2021 (UTC)
  • Added LucaRoR (talk) 12:42, 29 June 2021 (UTC)
• In the intro you need an "and" in the listing of the Republic Mimban forces.
  • Added LucaRoR (talk) 08:09, 1 July 2021 (UTC)
• The colon in the intro doesn't work, should be a full stop.
  • Fixed LucaRoR (talk) 08:09, 1 July 2021 (UTC)
• 22 BBY would be better off mentioned immediately after mentioning the battle in the intro.
  • Added LucaRoR (talk) 08:09, 1 July 2021 (UTC)
    • So now you can remove the second mention of it in the intro.
      • Fixed LucaRoR (talk) 10:44, 1 July 2021 (UTC) Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 10:05, 1 July 2021 (UTC)
• Your 22 BBY reference in the infobox should go after Mimban, if you look at most other status articles you'll notice we combine birth and death date references so that only one is needed in that infobox field.
  • I don't understand what you mean, the place and the date of death need two different references.LucaRoR (talk) 09:37, 1 July 2021 (UTC)
    • The death reference adequately explains that it happened on Mimban.
      • Ok, done LucaRoR (talk) 10:44, 1 July 2021 (UTC) Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 10:05, 1 July 2021 (UTC)
• Your reference note for the death needs links to all the topics mentioned, a full stop, and it should mention Tik by name. Also needs a better start, something like "Star Wars: Galactic Atlas states that…"
  • Fixed (I think) LucaRoR (talk) 08:09, 1 July 2021 (UTC)
    • You got most of it, I've added the few you missed. Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 10:05, 1 July 2021 (UTC)
• The first paragraph in Death has too much sourced to the date reference.
  • Fixed LucaRoR (talk) 20:15, 30 June 2021 (UTC)
• We avoid using the word "this" and contractions in article bodies, you've got one example of the former and two of the latter.
  • Fixed LucaRoR (talk) 09:44, 1 July 2021 (UTC)
• Laan Tik's lightsaber shouldn't be fully written out since it's a conjectural name, should just be pipelinked to lightsaber.
  • Fixed (I didn't fully understand what you mean, but I think that I've fixed it) LucaRoR (talk) 20:13, 30 June 2021 (UTC)
    • You got the wording okay, just not the linking, I've updated it. Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 10:05, 1 July 2021 (UTC)
• Per the Manual of Style the pronouns "they," "them," and "their" should not be used for individuals of unspecified gender. Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 03:36, 30 June 2021 (UTC)
  • It was hard, but I think I've fixed it. LucaRoR (talk) 20:13, 30 June 2021 (UTC)
• The reference note should specify that Rookiees is the episode mentioned, something like "as Rookiees, the episode in which the Battle of Mimban is established to occur concurrently, takes between…
  • Done (I don't know if it is me, but the reference is written in a strange way, it's quite hard to understand it)LucaRoR (talk) 10:44, 1 July 2021 (UTC)
    • Writing long reference notes can be tricky. I've updated it in a copy edit. Note that episode and short story titles should always have quotation marks around them. Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 11:10, 2 July 2021 (UTC)
• Should also mention the source Tik's death was portrayed in, I think just mentioning the title and not the full comic would be okay but may be wrong.
  • Done LucaRoR (talk) 10:44, 1 July 2021 (UTC) Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 10:05, 1 July 2021 (UTC)

UberSoldat

• I've sourced the comic publication date and added the publisher for you. Now you need to include the writer and illustrator of the comic in the section. UberSoldat93 (talk) 06:15, 29 June 2021 (UTC)
  • Done. LucaRoR (talk) 07:00, 29 June 2021 (UTC)
    • Does the comic identify the penciler and colorist separately? UberSoldat93 (talk) 09:44, 29 June 2021 (UTC)
      • Handled via Discord. UberSoldat93 (talk) 09:55, 29 June 2021 (UTC)
• Please provide context for the shield generator, since you introduce it out of nowhere.
  • Done (If I need to add more information, tell me. I think it is clear now). LucaRoR (talk) 07:59, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
• Information has to be presented in a chronological order. What did Binks do after Tik's death? Mention that Binks acquired the lightsaber first before talking about him saving Rex.
  • Done LucaRoR (talk) 07:59, 8 July 2021 (UTC) UberSoldat93 (talk) 14:58, 6 July 2021 (UTC)
• You namedrop Rex in the body a lot, can we get some variation instead? UberSoldat93 (talk) 09:31, 13 July 2021 (UTC)
  • I've removed some of them writing the clone or the captain where possible. I didn't write CT-7567 to keep the consistency. LucaRoR (talk) 10:46, 13 July 2021 (UTC)
• Looking at the images, I can see that Tik has something wrapped around his arms, This can be documented in Equipment, along with anything else you may notice. UberSoldat93 (talk) 07:42, 2 August 2021 (UTC)
  • I've added "bandages" because this is what they look like to me… I couldn't see anything else. LucaRoR ^(Talk) 09:32, 2 August 2021 (UTC)

Ramsay Sanders

• Unless "501 Plus One" specifically states that it takes place in 22 BBY, you would need a separate reference that establishes that. Ramsay Sanders (talk) 15:17, 29 June 2021 (UTC)
  • Done LucaRoR (talk) 15:54, 29 June 2021 (UTC)
    • Sourcing it to Star Wars: Galactic Atlas would only work if Galactic Atlas actually places the story in that year. See the "501 Plus One" page for an example that places the story in 22 BBY. Ramsay Sanders (talk) 17:12, 29 June 2021 (UTC)
      • Fixed LucaRoR (talk) 17:21, 29 June 2021 (UTC)

Macaroni

• I'm unsure why it's necessary to mention that he's Force-sensitive in the Biography section; that can be saved for Powers and abilities. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 17:49, 6 July 2021 (UTC)
  • Fixed LucaRoR (talk) 12:38, 7 July 2021 (UTC)
• You should explicitly mention that he was male in the intro and body.
  • It has never been said, this is why I never said he or she. LucaRoR (talk) 07:59, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
    • Sorry, that one's on me.
• The way your Powers and abilities section is currently written kind of implies that he could wield a lightsaber because he was Force-sensitive, which I don't think is accurate.
  • Done LucaRoR (talk) 07:59, 8 July 2021 (UTC) JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 20:18, 7 July 2021 (UTC)

OOM

• Missing {{Mediacat}}. Per WP:LG, Mediacat should go right under Appearances, and if it gets in the way of the item(s) there, then it should be moved down to Sources. If there is no Sources section or the template gets in the way of the item(s) there, it should added right under Notes and references (as I did here) OOM 224 ^{༼༽talk༼༽} 16:42, 18 July 2021 (UTC)
  • Done LucaRoR (Talk) 18:48, 18 July 2021 (UTC)
    • On default view (collapsed article width), Mediacat interferes with (first appearance) so it should be placed under Notes and references instead OOM 224 ^{༼༽talk༼༽} 19:34, 18 July 2021 (UTC)
      • Done LucaRoR (Talk) 06:42, 19 July 2021 (UTC)

Imp

• I'd prefer it if you would establish in the body that the subject was a member of a subspecies of the Nikto species. Otherwise, the subject's species is technically infobox-exclusive. Imperators II^(Talk) 11:37, 30 July 2021 (UTC)
  • Is this what you were looking for? LucaRoR ^(Talk) 13:17, 30 July 2021 (UTC)
    • It's not really necessary in the intro, and it doesn't quite work that way grammatically in the body. I'd suggest something along the lines of "Laan Tik was a member of the Kajain'sa'Nikto subspecies of the Nikto species who rose...". I also assume that the comic doesn't actually contain that info about it being a subspecies of the Nikto, so you'd have to source just that bit to another source that does. Imperators II^(Talk) 16:21, 30 July 2021 (UTC)
      • Fixed (I think) LucaRoR ^(Talk) 17:08, 30 July 2021 (UTC)
        • You should find a source that explicitly refers to the Kajain'sa'Nikto as a subspecies of the Nikto. The Databank entry for the red Nikto does not exactly make that clear. Imperators II^(Talk) 18:45, 30 July 2021 (UTC)
          • Star Wars: Alien Archive can be used as a source for this. Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:14, 31 July 2021 (UTC)
            • Great, fixed. LucaRoR ^(Talk) 13:50, 31 July 2021 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 03:48, 3 August 2021 (UTC)