Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Voxx Cluster

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Voxx Cluster

  • Nominated by: Imperators II(Talk) 08:25, 3 December 2022 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:
  • Date Archived: 12:01, 13 March 2023 (UTC)
  • Final word count: 1045 words (152 introduction, 784 body, 109 behind the scenes)
  • Word count at nomination time: 1045 words (152 introduction, 784 body, 109 behind the scenes)
  • WookieeProject (optional): WP:Resistance, WP:AST

(3 Inqs/4 Users/7 Total)

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Support

Inqvote UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 13:36, 16 January 2023 (UTC) (Vote struck, reason: Per policy: Blocked user -- OOM 224 (he/him) 21:25, 1 February 2023 (UTC))
  1. Let's goooo.NBDani TeamFireballLogo-Collider(they/them)Yeager's Repairs 16:15, 21 January 2023 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote —spookywillowwtalk 22:29, 3 February 2023 (UTC)
  3. So much for Kaz being Resistance's first FA lol (not that I mind) - Thannus (DFaceG) (he/him) (talk) 22:57, 3 February 2023 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote OOM 224 (he/him) 09:58, 4 February 2023 (UTC)
  5. Tucking this away as a fun location; nice work. Minnabird Naboo (talk) 19:00, 6 February 2023 (UTC)
  6. InqvoteMaster FredceriqueCommerce Guild(talk) (he/him) 10:57, 13 March 2023 (UTC)
  7. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 11:58, 13 March 2023 (UTC)

Object

Minna
  • The clause "risking with having to enter servitude to the Hutt if he lost" is a little unclear. Does he make a wager? Is that just the price of losing? (I'm also not sure the "risking with" construction is grammatically correct). Minnabird Naboo (talk) 01:43, 1 February 2023 (UTC)
    • Does that work better, do you think?
      • Much clearer, thanks! Minnabird Naboo (talk) 18:13, 6 February 2023 (UTC)
  • The phrases "enticing and dangerous" and "proving ground for [...] pilots" are taken directly from the Databank entry; I would consider rephrasing them in keeping with WP:C. Minnabird Naboo (talk) 01:43, 1 February 2023 (UTC)
    • I've changed the first, but do you have any suggestions for the second? Imperators II(Talk) 14:49, 2 February 2023 (UTC)
      • "the perilous nature of the track made it attractive to new pilots, who could prove their mettle against the hazards of the asteroid field"? Minnabird Naboo (talk) 18:13, 6 February 2023 (UTC)
        • Uh, no, sorry, that's just too good. Thanks! I've tried to incorporate that. Imperators II(Talk) 18:32, 6 February 2023 (UTC)
          • I like the addition of the odds, good point. Minnabird Naboo (talk) 19:00, 6 February 2023 (UTC)
Spookly
  • Was wondering if there was a way to swap some words around to have it so "in order to" isn't doubly in the two paragraphs of the "Voxx Vortex 5000" section—both have two instances of it back to back per paragraph. If it proves too hard to swap things around, not a big issue.—spookywillowwtalk 22:17, 3 February 2023 (UTC)
    • Let me know if simply swapping half of those to "to" works to lessen the repetitiveness! Imperators II(Talk) 22:20, 3 February 2023 (UTC)

Comments

  • Not an objection but just mentioning that I'll replace the image in the infobox with a higher quality version later today if no one beats me to it. - Thannus (DFaceG) (he/him) (talk) 22:58, 3 February 2023 (UTC)
    • Scratch that, image history indicates the image is already cropped from the higher quality version. - Thannus (DFaceG) (he/him) (talk) 23:00, 3 February 2023 (UTC)

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 12:01, 13 March 2023 (UTC)