Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Venka

The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.

Venka

• Nominated by: Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:31, 12 June 2009 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: "We have a priority signal from the Star Destroyer Avenger. 1189 words by my count.

(6 Inqs/2 Users/8 Total/INQCON 6)

Support

1. Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 10:35, 12 June 2009 (UTC)
2. I remember this guy :P JangFett ^Talk 15:50, 12 June 2009 (UTC)
3. — Fiolli ^{{Alpheridies University ComNet}} 03:47, 13 June 2009 (UTC)
4. Grand Moff Tranner ^(Comlink) 13:11, 13 June 2009 (UTC)
5. Grunny ^(Talk) 06:22, 17 June 2009 (UTC)
6. CC7567 ^(talk) 06:24, 17 June 2009 (UTC)
7. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 17:55, 17 June 2009 (UTC)
8. Queue it. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 04:08, 21 June 2009 (UTC)

Object

1. From the desk of Atarumaster88
   • "many of the Empire's finest" This strikes me as being POVish.
     • Yeah, it's not. Read the source.
       • I have made a small wording alteration that addresses this to my satisfaction without compromising the structure and layout of your prose. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 04:08, 21 June 2009 (UTC)
   • "Nevertheless, he vowed to carry out his responsibilities the best he could" Unclear antecedent.
     • Once again, read the source. There's nothing wrong with this.
       • I just wanted to clarify whether "he" was Venka or Piett. I made an edit changing it to Venka. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 04:08, 21 June 2009 (UTC)
   • "a tense atmosphere gripped the Executor's bridge" Flowery prose and really could be combined with the next sentence.
     • I don't feel inclined to make any edit here just to appease someone's, to be very honest with you, poorly subjective opinion of what is "flowery" prose. There's nothing wrong with this. Again, read the source.
   • "realizing how lucky he was " Unclear antecedent.
     • Again, I work with what I'm given. Read the source.
   • "true abilities. But, faced with the Hoth campaign as a test of his own command abilities," Can you find another word besides abilities here?
     • Again, read the source. It's meant to be an unspoken competition of sorts between each of their command abilities, hence the qualifying word "own." Try reading the sentence again and placing an emphasis on "own." There's nothing wrong with this.
       • All I wanted here was some diction variety. I've made an edit that changes this.
   • Appearances/sources list should clarify, using templates such as "Indirect appearance", which appearances Venka was actually named in. Based on your BTS, there seems to be a number of sources that need this.
     • Thought I'd point out there's no "Indirect appearance" template, and we don't generally make distinctions between named and non-named appearances. -- AdmirableAckbar ^(Talk) 18:46, 17 June 2009 (UTC)
       • Extremely per Acky. I can't even begin to understand what you're on here about. There's nothing wrong with the Appearances list. He appears in the items that are listed. We don't need to specify whether someone is named or not.
   • Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 18:16, 17 June 2009 (UTC)
     • Another stellar review from Ataru. There's a difference between making quality objections in the instance that something is truly problematic and just making objections for the sake of making objections. I fail to see a single thing that needs changing in any of your subjective points here. Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:36, 17 June 2009 (UTC)
       • Before there's any response to this, let's just remember that this is a community page and morale is perhaps flagging a little, so as an observer, I'd recommend hashing out any tensions away from here rather than airing dirty linen in public. -- —Harrar ^{(Cut the comm chatter)} 23:59, 17 June 2009 (UTC)

Comments

• Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 04:14, 21 June 2009 (UTC)