Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Unidentified Tusken Raider youngling

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Unidentified Tusken Raider youngling

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Support

  1. Inqvote Commander Code-8 Hello There! 09:07, 28 March 2022 (UTC)
  2. — Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 14:41, 3 April 2022 (UTC)
  3. - Thannus (DFaceG) (he/him) (talk) 09:47, 14 November 2022 (UTC)
  4. BloodOfIrizi Sabine Starbird (talk) 20:51, 15 November 2022 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote OOM 224 23:20, 2 January 2023 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Here's my copy-edit. Here's to more group noms! JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 03:08, 19 January 2023 (UTC)
  7. Castofstars (talk) 03:14, 19 January 2023 (UTC)
  8. Dentface (talk) 03:19, 19 January 2023 (UTC)

Object

CC-8
  • The first intro sentence should mention Tatooine and avoid stating that the character is a youngling twice
  • Missing some links, Youngling, Standard day, Sleep, Attack on the Kintan Striders
  • "When Fett attempted to escape, a Rodian prisoner tied up beside Fett alerted the tribe, and the child ran at the escaped captive with his stick." This sentence starts out saying Fett is escaping while the last part suggests that he's already out
  • Could you mention Tatooine's suns when talking about the sunlight in the body.
  • 9 ABY as part of the date range is infobox exclusive Commander Code-8 Hello There! 10:35, 21 March 2022 (UTC)
  • Last thing, "Child of the Sand" has four paragraphs so it can be divided in two Commander Code-8 Hello There! 05:44, 24 March 2022 (UTC)
    • Preem and I discussed this on the voice channel, the way the continuity works makes it hard to give it two sections without having to split it into a ratio of 1 to 3 paragraphs. 4 sections does not break any rules anyways (to my knowledge), it's just generally avoided. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 01:12, 25 March 2022 (UTC)
Macaroni
  • Straight off the bat, that intro is way too long. It should be three paragraphs maximum for an article of this size.
  • The date note saying that a source implied something is a no-no. Is he or is he not explicitly dead?
  • Species comes before gender.
  • Do none of the other refs other than the Tatooine DB support Tatooine being a planet?
  • The fact that the melon contains milk is only mentioned in a file caption.
  • I don't believe that an extra ref for the sand ape name is necessary.
  • Is Trainspotting a real word? I'm not seeing it on dictionary websites.
    • Split it, if that helps. It had originally been worded the same way as the film title "Trainspotting," the reference I had been going for, albeit it was a stretch I know. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 02:17, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Is the "Trainspotting" quote missing a word or what he says in the episode?
  • I don't really see a need to name the suns.
    • I don't think it's excessive, but I have no strong feelings about trimming it, so it's been trimmed. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 02:17, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
  • I believe that Jabba the Hutt and Other Bounty Hunters and Criminals uses ASW4, not ABY, so elaboration is needed. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 23:02, 11 May 2022 (UTC)
DFaceG
  • In which source is the sand beast referred to as an ape/sand ape? - DFaceG (talk) 22:13, 22 October 2022 (UTC)
    • Originally its databank, but that appears to have been changed since the nomination began.
  • Please review my copy-edit. - DFaceG (talk) 22:13, 22 October 2022 (UTC)
Ziara
OOM
  • "the child's small stick" in the intro is the first and only time the youngling's stick is mentioned in that section, so this detail seems a bit out-of-the-blue. However, the gaderffii stick was introduced in an earlier line, so the stick was a gaderffii than it'd probably be a good idea to repeat "gaderffii stick" here instead. I also don't think it's necessary to specify that it was small. OOM 224 21:22, 17 November 2022 (UTC)
    • Made it more consistent in the article. I disagree on "small," though. The child's stick is clearly not the normal gaderffii you find on Tuskens, due to its size and basic craft, and I think the article should reflect that. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 09:52, 18 November 2022 (UTC)
      • Alrighty, that's fair. OOM 224 19:11, 20 November 2022 (UTC)

Comments

  • Just stating for the record that the junior novelization releases soon, so this article will almost definitely need an update as novelizations tend to include new info. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 07:19, 23 December 2022 (UTC)
    • I've seen the novel is out. I will be purchasing it in about a week, feel free to make checking an objection in the meantime. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 11:55, 3 January 2023 (UTC)

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 03:44, 19 January 2023 (UTC)