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Unidentified Republic soldier (Falang Minor)
- Nominated by: Imperators II(Talk) 12:25, 15 February 2021 (UTC)
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- Cool stuff, feels like a World War Z character. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 03:39, 12 April 2021 (UTC)
A very interesting read. Excellent work in prosifying the info. UberSoldat93 
(talk) 08:30, 7 June 2021 (UTC)- OtterSurf (talk) 10:13, 28 June 2021 (UTC)
- Quite interesting to read indeed. JediMasterMacaroni
(Talk) 20:27, 11 July 2021 (UTC) 
MasterFred(talk) 22:42, 15 August 2021 (UTC)- Liverpool92 14:36, 31 August 2021 (UTC)
- 1358 (Talk) 20:59, 19 September 2021 (UTC)
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Nice job overall. One thing I noticed is that the PT section recounts many of the individual's thoughts without really relating them to his personality—thoughts themselves aren't a personality, but they can be expressions of a personality. I'm particularly referring to the third paragraph (being aware of something =/= trait) and the very last PT sentence (he's convinced that the Republic will do something, but what does that say about his personality? Is it an expression of trust in the government?). Most of the PT is well-written indeed, but the parts that I highlighted particularly stand out.1358 (Talk) 11:56, 23 August 2021 (UTC)- Sorry for the delay on this. I've got to admit, this was a rather tricky issue to fix. I'm somewhat loathe to try and infer more than is explicitly established in the source, so I've tried to come up with what seems like the least speculative solution for that conviction about the Republic bit. As to the third paragraph, that one made me realize there can sometimes be a gray area between what's suitable for P&T and what better fits under Skills and abilities, or even Bio. Accordingly, I've opted to move some of it elsewhere. The rest of it I still think fits best under "Personality and traits", although I've somewhat reworked the paragraph. Hope that works. Imperators II(Talk) 17:27, 6 September 2021 (UTC)
- Nice job on the changes, that's precisely what I was referring to and the article now does a better job describing his personality rather than actions and thoughts. One more thing: "That familiarity allowed him to instantly realize the foreign nature of the Tionese warships that had arrived to destroy the local settlements, and the boy's knowledge of the Tionese War allowed him to recognize the Tionjack warships upon sight" This sentence basically says the same thing twice, that he recognized the (foreign) Tionese warships. Is it possible to condense this a bit? 1358 (Talk) 13:53, 15 September 2021 (UTC)
- I definitely intended to convey two separate things there, though. I've made a slight tweak, does that carry the difference across any better? Imperators II(Talk) 19:43, 16 September 2021 (UTC)
- Nice job on the changes, that's precisely what I was referring to and the article now does a better job describing his personality rather than actions and thoughts. One more thing: "That familiarity allowed him to instantly realize the foreign nature of the Tionese warships that had arrived to destroy the local settlements, and the boy's knowledge of the Tionese War allowed him to recognize the Tionjack warships upon sight" This sentence basically says the same thing twice, that he recognized the (foreign) Tionese warships. Is it possible to condense this a bit? 1358 (Talk) 13:53, 15 September 2021 (UTC)
- Sorry for the delay on this. I've got to admit, this was a rather tricky issue to fix. I'm somewhat loathe to try and infer more than is explicitly established in the source, so I've tried to come up with what seems like the least speculative solution for that conviction about the Republic bit. As to the third paragraph, that one made me realize there can sometimes be a gray area between what's suitable for P&T and what better fits under Skills and abilities, or even Bio. Accordingly, I've opted to move some of it elsewhere. The rest of it I still think fits best under "Personality and traits", although I've somewhat reworked the paragraph. Hope that works. Imperators II(Talk) 17:27, 6 September 2021 (UTC)
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Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 20:59, 19 September 2021 (UTC)