Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Kkkt

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Kkkt

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Support

  1. Carrying over my vote from the GAN. UberSoldat93 (talk) 12:09, March 23, 2020 (UTC)
  2. --Vitus InfinitusTalk 15:37, March 23, 2020 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 20:57, April 11, 2020 (UTC)
  4. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 09:46, May 3, 2020 (UTC)
  5. Mr Star Wars Amino Republic (talk) 17:36, May 20, 2020 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Imperators II(Talk) 07:43, July 3, 2020 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote Tommy-Macaroni 19:50, September 20, 2020 (UTC)

Object

Imp
  • Please fully link your reference notes. Imperators II(Talk) 18:03, May 31, 2020 (UTC)
  • Since the construction of Fortress Vader and the events of Dark Lord of the Sith 19 could have theoretically taken place on the last day of 12 BBY and 14 BBY, respectively, you should treat the derived date in both ref notes as an approximate one, therefore "around 12 BBY" and "around 14 BBY." this applies to both the infobox and the body. Imperators II(Talk) 18:03, May 31, 2020 (UTC)
  • "Since the later events of the Fortress Vader story arc of the Star Wars: Darth Vader: Dark Lord of the Sith comic-book series, which comprises issues 23–25" — does "which comprises" refer to the "later events" or the story arc? 'Cause the story arcs is issues 19-25, per the arc's article. Imperators II(Talk) 15:53, July 2, 2020 (UTC)
  • "The events of issue 20 take place immediately following issue 19 as well as issue 21 immediately following the events of issue 20" — seeing how all you're going for is an approximate date, I'm sure you can simplify this sentence by a thousandfold by saying something to the effect of "21 is set shortly after 19". Imperators II(Talk) 15:53, July 2, 2020 (UTC)
  • A bit of rewording is needed to avoid awkward repetition. Biography: "constructing a structure". Intro: "construction of his fortress. Constructed" Imperators II(Talk) 15:53, July 2, 2020 (UTC)
  • "Vader denied the order" — I don't think you can deny an order. Either he denied the request, or cancelled the order. Imperators II(Talk) 15:53, July 2, 2020 (UTC)
    • Rewritten the sentence, I made a mistake by including Captain Junus when the voice at the start of issue 24 isn't specified. Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 21:26, July 2, 2020 (UTC)
  • Please link to Galactic Empire and Force-sensitive in the body. Imperators II(Talk) 15:53, July 2, 2020 (UTC)
  • Intro-exclusive, or perhaps just awkward wording: "During the battle, Kkkt identified Vader". Imperators II(Talk) 15:53, July 2, 2020 (UTC)
  • "Vader then began construction for his fortress. Constructed to tune in to the dark side energies present on the planet and open a portal through the Force, the fortress failed its purpose several times, devastating Mustafar's landscape, which led Kkkt to unite the other nearby Mustafarian clans against the stronghold." — The clauses in here sound a bit off. Can you combine the first sentence with the first subordinate clause of the second sentence, and perhaps combine the second and third subordinate clauses? Imperators II(Talk) 15:53, July 2, 2020 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 19:50, September 20, 2020 (UTC)