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Hurst Romodi
- Nominated by: Green Tentacle (Talk) 22:04, January 17, 2013 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Essential Guide to Warfare goodness. Credit to Purpilia for several chunks which barely changed during the rewrite.
(4 Inqs/2 Users/6 Total)
Support
- Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 04:53, January 21, 2013 (UTC)
IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 23:16, January 23, 2013 (UTC)- I once cited Romodi as an EU-exclusive concept that pre-dated A New Hope. Although the bald guy retcon is cool, I'm sad to lose that claim. Ah, well. We'll always have the Fire Rings of Fornax. Menkooroo (talk) 02:44, February 12, 2013 (UTC)
- Nice work.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 19:30, February 15, 2013 (UTC)
- Cade Calrayn
21:23, March 6, 2013 (UTC) - Sir Cavalier of One(Squadron channel) 23:20, March 17, 2013 (UTC)
Object
Hanzo
I think you should mention in his biography (possibly also the intro, though I think based on everything else summarized you can also choose not to) the info about him at that conference.- I left it out because he just sits there and doesn't say or do anything (the novel version of events being overruled by the film). Stuck something in the biography now. Green Tentacle (Talk) 22:01, January 20, 2013 (UTC)
- That's all from me. Great work, I'm glad somebody decided to work on this article. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 02:05, January 18, 2013 (UTC)
Floyd has one thing
You should mention somewhere that Ando is the Aqualish homeworld to connect it to the "conflict involving the Aqualish" in the first body section.IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 00:32, January 22, 2013 (UTC)- Added. Green Tentacle (Talk) 21:27, January 23, 2013 (UTC)
Hurst so good
I think he'll need an ANH adaptation check. The photocomic and the Manga both seem likely to include the "bald guy." I have most of 'em on an external hard drive, so let me know if you need any checked.- I don't have any adaptations. Could you check them please. Green Tentacle (Talk) 14:23, February 11, 2013 (UTC)
- Turns out the Photocomic leaves out the conference room scene. The Manga definitely depicts everyone at the table, so I've added it. Both the Marvel comic and the Dark Horse Special Edition comic depict the scene, but neither shows the entire table roster, and they both put Motti and Tagge at random places around the table and surround them with a bunch of generic-looking officers. Neither of them clearly show the "bald guy," so I think they're better off left out. Menkooroo (talk) 16:32, February 11, 2013 (UTC)
- I don't have any adaptations. Could you check them please. Green Tentacle (Talk) 14:23, February 11, 2013 (UTC)
Death Star could use a smidge of context in the intro.- Added. Green Tentacle (Talk) 14:23, February 11, 2013 (UTC)
In the sentence "...defeating Separatist forces in the Kanz, Tragan Cluster, Ciutric, Nijune, Sprizen, and Quelii sectors." I think this sentence only works if there's a "Tragan Cluster sector." If not, could you rearrange it to place the lone cluster outside of the group of sectors?- That's how they're listed in The Essential Guide to Warfare. I don't want to change the order in case they're chronological. Since the Tragan Cluster is also known as the Tragan sector I've just removed the word "Cluster." Green Tentacle (Talk) 14:23, February 11, 2013 (UTC)
"News of the victories at Vinsoth and Vardoss proceeded Romodi back to the Core Worlds" --- just want to confirm; should that not be "preceded" ?- Not clear. Reworded. Green Tentacle (Talk) 14:23, February 11, 2013 (UTC)
Is there any more you can say about the Battle of Kelrodo-Ai based on the info in the Insider short story? Even if Romodi's role in it can't be pinpointed, surely there's some background and details on the battle that could be given, such as the enemy taking refuge in the citadel.- Hadn't read that before. It doesn't mention the army's involvement, but I've included a bit of background from it. Green Tentacle (Talk) 21:26, February 11, 2013 (UTC)
Any chance of making the Death Star meeting image bigger? It seems way too small, especially given how little of it Romodi takes up. There's definitely room to enlarge it; thoughts?- Resized to 250px. Green Tentacle (Talk) 14:23, February 11, 2013 (UTC)
Coruscant is called Imperial Center once and Coruscant once without any equating of the two --- can you equate them, else use one name throughout?- Imperial Center now used for both. Green Tentacle (Talk) 14:23, February 11, 2013 (UTC)
Could the BTS indicate that the movie scene canonically trumps the novel scene? Currently, it describes the two without commenting on how the discrepancy is resolved.- Certainly. Any idea how we should source that? Green Tentacle (Talk) 14:23, February 11, 2013 (UTC)
- I think ref 1 from here would do the trick, but utilizing the swblog template. Like... this: What'd I say again? Select posts by me regarding continuity on Keeper of the Holocron — Leland Chee's StarWars.com Blog (original site is defunct) Menkooroo (talk) 16:32, February 11, 2013 (UTC)
- How's that? Green Tentacle (Talk) 21:26, February 11, 2013 (UTC)
- I think ref 1 from here would do the trick, but utilizing the swblog template. Like... this:
- Certainly. Any idea how we should source that? Green Tentacle (Talk) 14:23, February 11, 2013 (UTC)
All of the pre-Warfare (Picture only) Sources should get a (Retcon) tag. And just to confirm, is Behind the Magic more than a (Picture only)?- Done. BTM mentions him by name in the scene by scene section. Green Tentacle (Talk) 14:23, February 11, 2013 (UTC)
- Great job. Linking was good but could still be improved; check out here for what I mean. Menkooroo (talk) 05:16, February 11, 2013 (UTC)
Cadeth
Context on Imperial Center.- Added. Green Tentacle (Talk) 21:19, March 6, 2013 (UTC)
"gain full control of dozens of worlds" - any way you could be more specific about said worlds, such as "worlds in the region" or something?- Done. Green Tentacle (Talk) 21:19, March 6, 2013 (UTC)
"achieved widespread coverage throughout the Empire" - two things here. One, I'm not sure achieved is the right word, maybe received would be better. Also, I'd personally specify that it was press coverage, but that's up to you.- Changed the first bit. It's not just press since they were making films about it too so I've gone with media. Green Tentacle (Talk) 21:19, March 6, 2013 (UTC)
Context on Floating Fortress?- Added. Green Tentacle (Talk) 21:19, March 6, 2013 (UTC)
I'm guessing there's no quotes? Shame.- Other than the non-canon one in BTS, no. Green Tentacle (Talk) 21:19, March 6, 2013 (UTC)
I think you might want to reverse the placement of Tarkin and Romodi in this sentence: "Following his withdrawal from the Senate, Grand Moff Tarkin offered Romodi a position as his adjutant." As it currently stands, it's like Tarkin was the one who retired.- Reworded. Green Tentacle (Talk) 21:19, March 6, 2013 (UTC)
No mention of the manga?- Never actually seen it. All I know is Menkooroo said it shows everybody sat at the table. If that's all I don't think it's worth mentioning. Green Tentacle (Talk) 21:19, March 6, 2013 (UTC)
- Good work. Cade Calrayn 05:16, March 6, 2013 (UTC)
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Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 23:20, March 17, 2013 (UTC)