Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Battle for Alaris Prime

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Battle for Alaris Prime

  • Nominated by: Commander Code-8 Hello There! 09:56, 7 May 2021 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: I can't tell if this campaign is meant to have a pro or anti-colonialism stance.
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Support

  1. Good work, almost done with this whole colonial war. JediMasterMacaroniAdmiral Ackbar RH(Talk) 04:43, 20 June 2021 (UTC)
  2. Might need to call in the Colonial Marines for this one. OtterSurf (talk) 10:18, 28 June 2021 (UTC)
  3. Nice job. DwartiiDelver (talk) 14:35, 4 July 2021 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 13:22, 13 July 2021 (UTC)
  5. Liverpool92Ackbar HS 04:27, 12 September 2021 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Imperators II(Talk) 10:41, 1 November 2021 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote MasterFredCommerce Guild(talk) 07:13, 2 November 2021 (UTC)

Object

Battle of Macaroni
  • I hate to break it to you, but it seems that the full release dates for GB and the Prima guide are needed since they came out on different days of the same year, per WP:LG#Publication dates. JediMasterMacaroniAdmiral Ackbar RH(Talk) 00:02, 18 June 2021 (UTC)
    • Got a whole new citation template for it (and many thanks to the users who fixed it when I didn't know what I was doing). I'll get some feedback on the date referencing first before implementing it in every article I've ever written. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 19:04, 19 June 2021 (UTC)
Dwartii
  • At least some of the images could be slightly enlarged, particularly the one under "Trade Federation offensives" and the bts image.
  • Does GB have subtitles for Qui-Gon's (and other characters') lines, or is it just audio? If the latter, "defences" in the Prelude quote should be spelled "defenses," though if there are subtitles and that's how they spell it the quote can remain as is.
  • Incomplete sentence in the bts: "In it, the player controls the Wookiees and must destroy the Trade Federation fortress to achieve victory, using their."
  • "The Trade Federation forces may create additional forces" From the bts. Since "forces" is used again just a few words later, could the first part of the sentence just say "The Trade Federation" and omit the "forces" from that? Or would that somehow change the meaning (with regard to the gameplay). DwartiiDelver (talk) 19:20, 3 July 2021 (UTC)
UberSoldat
  • "The first strike of the battle was made when a force of battle droids, including five beetle droids and a droideka attacked. They were sent by the droid commander SRAM-13 to attack the Wookiee sentry posts that were built to warn them of the Trade Federation's movements." This sentence reads a little weird to me. I would start by saying they were sent by SRAM followed by their attack on a Wookiee sentry post. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 08:54, 13 July 2021 (UTC)
Down the RTS rabbit-hole again
  • Please specify to whom is QGJ speaking in the Prelude, The Battle, and Aftermath quotes. Imperators II(Talk) 08:02, 4 October 2021 (UTC)
  • "Jedi concentration" should definitely link to some article. Imperators II(Talk) 11:33, 16 October 2021 (UTC)
    • Created
  • "Audio from Jinn in the game files suggests that the player would originally have access to Jedi in the battle, but the player would be unable to create any more unlike in a standard game format. Jinn states that Jedi law prevents too many Jedi from being assigned on a single mission to justify the restriction." — could you clarify this bit? Does Jinn's dialogue imply that at some point in the game's development the player had access to more Jedi during this tutorial battle?
    • Yes that's what I mean, how's that
  • Any chance it's possible to clarify in in-universe terms what does "convert enemy buildings to the Wookiee side" mean?
    • I've had a go, it's pretty hard to explain without being a blatant RTS mechanic
  • "The Wookiees built additional military buildings in their base, including factories to build mechs and heavy weapons" — can you reword this so that the word root "build" isn't used three times in the same sentence?
    • Done
  • There's also some repetition in the intro: two uses of "target-" in the third sentence and two consecutive instances of "build up" in second and third sentence of the intro's second paragraph.
    • Done
  • Wow, so Jinn was initially advising the Wookies from off-world? That's certainly intro-exclusive. Imperators II(Talk) 12:45, 22 October 2021 (UTC)
    • Reworded cause the game doesn't quite specify whether he was in orbit or on Alaris Prime the whole time. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 10:56, 27 October 2021 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 07:13, 2 November 2021 (UTC)