Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Synth-smoke

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Synth-smoke

• Nominated by: Sanathestarr (talk) 19:53, 31 January 2024 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: doing a sweep of the article from the beginning to SAN everything (except the big stuff like Dantooine, Great Leveler, etc)
• Date Archived: 01:20, 11 February 2024 (UTC)
• Final word count: 143 words (0 introduction, 97 body, 46 behind the scenes)
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Support

1. - Thannus (DFaceG) (he/him) (talk) 18:08, 1 February 2024 (UTC)
2. Panther436 (talk) 23:31, 8 February 2024 (UTC)
3. copy-edit —spookywilloww^talk 01:18, 11 February 2024 (UTC)
4. Lewisr (talk) 01:18, 11 February 2024 (UTC)

Object

DFaceG

• The article states that Marda mentioned synth-smoke in her message; if it's mentioned in dialogue it should be quoted on the article. - Thannus (DFaceG) (he/him) (talk) 20:06, 31 January 2024 (UTC)
  • "A Closed Fist Has No Claws" is framed as recordings she made for her descendants, so there's no dialogue mentioning synth-smoke. (see Irisophant or Espri for CAs from the story) Sanathestarr (talk) 22:08, 31 January 2024 (UTC)

Lew

• "Synth-smoke's presence in the air created a haze that appeared brown under the public house's neon lights" this should be mentioned a bit further up then at the end of the paragraph Lewisr (talk) 07:03, 3 February 2024 (UTC)
  • Swapped the last two sentences, does that work? Sanathestarr (talk) 11:04, 3 February 2024 (UTC)
    • Did a slight little tweak, does that work for you? Lewisr (talk) 21:52, 3 February 2024 (UTC)
      • Yeah sure I'm okay with that Sanathestarr (talk) 17:47, 4 February 2024 (UTC)
• Gas needs to be linked/pipelinked in the body somewhere Lewisr (talk) 07:03, 3 February 2024 (UTC)
  • Done Sanathestarr (talk) 11:04, 3 February 2024 (UTC)

Panther

• I'm thinking that it would be better if Marda being the founder of the Nihil was cited to a piece of media instead of the interview. TEoD, the THR Character Encyclopedia, and EotS 1 all say it I believe (though the latter doesn't use her name).
  • Sorry to interject, this exact thing was just brought up on the Faer ship. As per Tessa's specific wording that Marda's group aren't exactly the Nihil yet, and just they are what becomes the Nihil, and after discussing with another EC we thought it would be better to change the context these Closed Fist articles had been using for Marda to match with what Tessa says (which I then relayed to Sana who agreed with changing). Unfortunately, the interview is actually the only place that really fully clarifies what the status of Marda's group is in this story, hence why we said citing in these instances would be okay Lewisr (talk) 01:40, 5 February 2024 (UTC)
    • Alrighty makes sense Panther436 (talk) 02:59, 5 February 2024 (UTC)
• Because the second sentence is about where the smoke was and not just its characteristics, it would probably be better for that info to be included after the date, since we don't know that it was always there or naturally appearing there. Panther436 (talk) 01:29, 5 February 2024 (UTC)
  • Done Sanathestarr (talk) 14:30, 5 February 2024 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 01:18, 11 February 2024 (UTC)