Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Narthax

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Narthax

(3 ECs/3 Users/6 Total)

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Support

  1. VergenceScatter (talk) 20:08, 16 January 2021 (UTC)
  2. ECvote Fan26 (Talk) 23:42, 16 January 2021 (UTC)
  3. ECvote UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 17:08, 23 January 2021 (UTC)
  4. Immi Thrax (talk) 02:34, 14 February 2021 (UTC)
  5. Editoronthewiki (talk) 04:37, 18 February 2021 (UTC)
  6. ECvote Imperators II(Talk) 17:59, 27 February 2021 (UTC)

Object

UberSoldat
  • Please introduce a paragraph break in the body.
    • Done.
  • The Official Starships & Vehicles Collection issue can use {{StarshipsVehiclesCite}}. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 20:02, 22 January 2021 (UTC)
    • Need to verify if their picture appears in associated entry, or just cover. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 23:29, 22 January 2021 (UTC)
      • And fixed. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 16:14, 23 January 2021 (UTC)
        • Body is now at 177 words, meaning it requires sectioning. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 16:18, 23 January 2021 (UTC)
          • IU information added in error because of a misunderstanding of a different image. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 16:49, 23 January 2021 (UTC)
Immi Thrax
  • This sentences uses passive voice (the Battle happened to result in an Imperial victory), rather that actively stating that the Empire was victorious (through their own actions): "The Battle of Hoth would lead to a victory for the Empire, with the Alliance forced to evacuate the planet."
  • Clunky wording here, and the point possibly belongs only in BTS: "At a certain point around that time, Narthax stood in front of another snowtrooper, Sergeant Major Bursk." IU-wise, standing in front of someone doesn't seem notable for purposes of an encyclopedia; rather, it seems to be trying to offer an IU explanation out of positioning in a photograph. Immi Thrax (talk) 01:49, 14 February 2021 (UTC)
    • Both fixed. Completely cut the play-by-play Bursk part. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 02:01, 14 February 2021 (UTC)
OOM
  • The second sentence cannot be sourced to ref 3 since the card does not mention the GCW.
  • The same card does not state that Ukio was a planet.
  • {{Mediacat}} needed.
  • The article could use a category for members of Blizzard Force. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 12:37, 14 February 2021 (UTC)
    • All addressed. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 19:16, 14 February 2021 (UTC)
      • Note that with the link when I created the Blizzard Force members category, I intentionally did a link to the canon article, since both continuities have articles for members of Blizzard Force. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 19:17, 14 February 2021 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • The BTS image needs to be properly sourced, which the original uploader unfortunately did not do. "Star Wars: Episode V The Empire Strikes Back deleted scene" is not a source. This user found this image on some website, which is what needs to go into that file page's source field. You need to either find that URL or find another version of this image to replace it with. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:30, 14 February 2021 (UTC)
    • Though now that I think of it, isn't this image, or one very similar, included in the 2011 Blu-ray set? If so, that's the high-quality version that the article needs to be using here. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:38, 14 February 2021 (UTC)
Imp
  • Narthax's name needs to be referenced to a source that actually mentions Narthax. Imperators II(Talk) 07:53, 15 February 2021 (UTC)
  • You've got two consecutive identical references. Imperators II(Talk) 17:25, 15 February 2021 (UTC)
  • Can what's currently sourced to ref 7 not be sourced to The New Essential Chronology instead? That way, the number of references could be somewhat reduced.
  • It'd make more sense if you moved the sentence about the short story's canonicity to where you actually mention the story, instead of at the very end of the BTS. Imperators II(Talk) 13:26, 27 February 2021 (UTC)
    • Both addressed. Also of note I deleted the commanding officer pipelink because sergeants aren't officers. Likewise, commander would also not be applicable in that situation, so my initial assessment of no link there is correct. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 16:23, 27 February 2021 (UTC)

Comments

  • Note I include the Visual Dictionary in behind the scenes as, even though Behind the Magic is the first source for Narthax—provided we can't confirm the set photos are linked to One Step Ahead—the Visual Dictionary is the first to bring him into canon. Also FWIW it's a full mention because it's the photo accompanying the snowtrooper entry. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 22:59, 12 January 2021 (UTC)

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 17:59, 27 February 2021 (UTC)