Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Kowakian crumb cake

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Kowakian crumb cake

• Nominated by: JediMasterMacaroni(Conversation) 21:39, 25 December 2020 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: For Wookieepedia:WookieeProject Galaxy's Edge

(1 ECs/7 Users/8 Total)

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Support

1. Nice work. TK-462 (talk) 01:14, 26 December 2020 (UTC)
2. Yum! DwartiiDelver (talk) 17:26, 26 December 2020 (UTC)
3. ImpacticForce (Talk) 00:50, 27 December 2020 (UTC)
4. Nice work on both versions of the page! ~ TheTrooperGuy (talk) 03:46, 27 December 2020 (UTC)
5. Cade999 (talk) 19:09, 4 January 2021 (UTC)
6. Good job on both of them! ~ D MCCG (talk) 23:08, 4 January 2021 (UTC)
7. UberSoldat93 (talk) 12:45, 10 January 2021 (UTC)
8. Very good. Very good indeed. Liverpool92 (talk) 22:00, 14 January 2021 (UTC)

Object

TK

• Context for Batuu.
• The first sentence can be combined with the first couple sentences that describe the cake. TK-462 (talk) 23:17, 25 December 2020 (UTC)
  • Context added. I've combined the first two sentences, three would have been excessive in my opinion. JediMasterMacaroni(Conversation) 23:28, 25 December 2020 (UTC)
    • Looks great. I meant one or the other (which you did), but my wording was indeed a bit confusing :P TK-462 (talk) 23:30, 25 December 2020 (UTC)

Trooper

• The fourth sentence is a bit confusing, and makes it seem like the cake is being destroyed rather than the castle. ~ TheTrooperGuy (talk) 03:38, 27 December 2020 (UTC)
  • Reworded. JediMasterMacaroni(Conversation) 03:42, 27 December 2020 (UTC)
    • Looks good. ~ TheTrooperGuy (talk) 03:46, 27 December 2020 (UTC)

UberSoldat

• "Tuggs also wrote that the cake did a fine job of luring customers to Tuggs' Grub,..." Please substitute this with something more formal.
• Context for Episode II. UberSoldat93 (talk) 13:48, 7 January 2021 (UTC)
  • Both addressed. JediMasterMacaroni(Conversation) 02:22, 10 January 2021 (UTC)
• Reviewing note: When citing multiple sources simultaneously, references should be in numerical order. UberSoldat93 (talk) 12:45, 10 January 2021 (UTC)

Imp

• I get that the BTS image is really useful there, being super helpful for better illustrating the textual content, but the section barely can accommodate it layout-wise. It looks to me, however, that the second paragraph of the BTS could be split into two smaller paragraphs, in which case the image would be better-supported. Please give it a try.
• I believe you should briefly note in the image caption that it was also used to illustrate the Sic-Six cake. Imperators II^(Talk) 23:34, 13 January 2021 (UTC)
  • I've split the paragraph and modified the caption. JediMasterMacaroni(Conversation) 23:44, 13 January 2021 (UTC)
    • If you take a closer look at the caption now, it says that the Legends continuity depicts the cake in canon. Imperators II^(Talk) 09:22, 14 January 2021 (UTC)
• The first sentence of the second BTS paragraph should be sourced to "Dining at Dex's", not AOTC.
  • "Dining at Dex's" doesn't mention AOTC in any capacity, therefore you can't source the fact that the cake appeared in the film to that medium. Imperators II^(Talk) 21:40, 14 January 2021 (UTC)
    • Sorry, I misread that part. I've sources the first sentence to the hyperspace article.
• Please split the article's body into smaller paragraphs.
• "Tuggs also wrote that the cake did a satisfactory job of luring customers to Tuggs' Grub, his restaurant on Batuu,[1] a planet in the Outer Rim.[4]" — it's problematic to me that this sentence says Tuggs wrote something, before the document in which he wrote it is first mentioned. Could you move that sentence to after that mention? Imperators II^(Talk) 09:22, 14 January 2021 (UTC)
  • I've changed the caption to use two complete sentences. The AOTC reference has been removed to source the entirety of the second BTS paragraph to Dining at Dex's. The article body has been split and the sentence regarding Tuggs's writing has been moved. JediMasterMacaroni(Conversation) 18:54, 14 January 2021 (UTC)
• Please provide a bit of context for Takodana Castle.
• To me, the lead quote implies that Tuggs used the cake for attracting monkey-lizards on several occasions, which should be noted in the article. Imperators II^(Talk) 10:36, 15 January 2021 (UTC)
  • Agreed on the second point. Both addressed. JediMasterMacaroni(Conversation) 17:13, 15 January 2021 (UTC)
• Good work. Now let's see some sectioning since the body is over 165. Imperators II^(Talk) 18:24, 15 January 2021 (UTC)

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