Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Damask Holdings

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Damask Holdings

  • Nominated by: Samonic Thrawns Chimaera (Talk) 20:29, 18 March 2022 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: I really, really enjoyed reading about Damask Holdings in Darth Plagueis. Therefore, I'm glad some portion of it is canon.
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Support

  1. ECvote Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 08:12, 28 March 2022 (UTC)
  2. I trust Luca and Fan's objections to be addressed. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 04:58, 6 April 2022 (UTC)
  3. ThrawnChiss7 (talk) 20:29, 8 April 2022 (UTC)
  4. ECvote Copy-edit. Context should always be supplied at a subject's first mention. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 09:02, 15 April 2022 (UTC)
  5. ECvote LucaRoR Sigil of House Serenno (Talk) 09:33, 16 April 2022 (UTC)
  6. ECvote Fan26 (Talk) 15:03, 17 April 2022 (UTC)
  7. ECvote Imperators II(Talk) 08:52, 18 April 2022 (UTC)

Object

Fan
  • Naboo and Mustafar should be placed in the Mid and Outer Rims respectively.
  • "the plasma refinery complex as part of Naboo–Damask Holdings joint venture to expand plasma refining on Naboo,[2] a small pastoral world" This sentence needs some cleaning up. The article refers to the complex as "the plasma refinery complex", as if expecting the reader to know what it is despite no information on it before. It should also be clarified that Damask Holdings was in a joint venture with the Naboo people. Fan26 (Talk) 16:22, 24 March 2022 (UTC)
    • Both addressed.— Samonic Thrawns Chimaera (Talk) 10:43, 26 March 2022 (UTC)
      • " that was in a joint venture with the Naboo people." I'd like this moved to after the description of the power plant's construction, to clarify that it was a joint venture between Damask Holdings and the Naboo Fan26 (Talk) 13:59, 28 March 2022 (UTC)
        • Done! — Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 07:58, 4 April 2022 (UTC)
          • I've done a copy-edit, just want to make sure you're chill with it. Also, the intro sentence will need to be broken up now Fan26 (Talk) 19:06, 11 April 2022 (UTC)
            • :thumbsup: — Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 16:35, 16 April 2022 (UTC)
Manoof
  • I think it's pertinent in the BTS to note that Damask Holdings was a front used by Darth Plagueis. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 03:12, 27 March 2022 (UTC)
  • You should combine the joint venture with the Naboo with the refinery itself, rather than having the Mustafar in the middle, which makes it unclear if the Naboo were in a joint venture in that venture as well Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 03:12, 27 March 2022 (UTC)
UberSoldat
  • Would like to see a Damask disambiguation page; there are multiple subjects with that name. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 11:53, 28 March 2022 (UTC)
    • That'll be fun! Thank you, I'm on it.— Samonic Thrawns Chimaera (Talk) 13:15, 28 March 2022 (UTC)
      • Done :) Thank you! (I'm still implementing otheruses/youmay in the other articles, though)— Samonic Thrawns Chimaera (Talk) 14:33, 28 March 2022 (UTC)
        • The title should be at "Damask" since there are no articles competing for that namespace. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 03:05, 29 March 2022 (UTC)
Luca
  • I'm not really a fan of using two separate sources for the context for Naboo. I think you should just keep "a planet in the Mid Rim Territories."
  • The Encyclopedia entry for Mustafar does not mention the Damask Holdings. Hence, that note cannot be used to reference the statement.
  • The {{Otheruses}} and {{Youmay}} are redundant to each other. The latter should be removed. LucaRoR Sigil of House Serenno (Talk) 16:35, 29 March 2022 (UTC)
    • I see the Youmay was added back after I had already removed it, so I've gone ahead and removed it again. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 03:42, 30 March 2022 (UTC)
      • All done. (The entry issue was accidental, it was supposed to mention the location of Mustafar, which apparently was mentioned in BMF...)— Samonic Thrawns Chimaera (Talk) 07:58, 30 March 2022 (UTC)
  • Context for Theed, please. LucaRoR Sigil of House Serenno (Talk) 04:53, 6 April 2022 (UTC)
    • Done! Thank you.— Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 07:27, 6 April 2022 (UTC)
Imp
  • Since we apparently know the date of construction for the plasma refinery complex (by 32 BBY at the very latest), I'd like you to work that into the article as the date by which Damask Holdings must have been established. Imperators II(Talk) 07:49, 17 April 2022 (UTC)
    • Done.— Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 14:55, 17 April 2022 (UTC)

Comments

  • Mentions in Nexus of power and Build the Millennium Falcon 17 are below:
    • Nexus of power: (Context about the plasma refinery complex) ...Damask Holdings joint venture to expand plasma refining on Naboo. A massive, triple-domed complex that blends in...
    • Build the Millennium Falcon 17: (Mustafar information and history) ...Many rival organizations have exploited Mustafar's mineral wealth. Damask Holdings established a base on the planet before the Clone Wars... Samonic Thrawns Chimaera (Talk) 10:08, 21 March 2022 (UTC)

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 08:52, 18 April 2022 (UTC)