- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a comprehensive article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Alaris
- Nominated by: Commander Code-8 Hello There! 11:41, December 5, 2018 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: My first planet nom. This is where the fun begins
(3 ECs/2 Users/5 Total)
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QuiGonJinn 
(Talk) 22:32, December 8, 2018 (UTC)
Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 07:37, December 9, 2018 (UTC)- Zed42 (talk) 07:53, December 9, 2018 (UTC)
Imperators II(Talk) 18:19, December 10, 2018 (UTC)- Ayrehead02 (talk) 09:45, December 13, 2018 (UTC)
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Anil
I think the first sentence of the article is a little crowded with all those "in the" prepositions. Please see if you can reword it.- How's that?
I know we don't mention grid coordinates in the body of Legends articles per Forum:CT:Utilizing Atlas grid coordinates, but it would be nice to mention it in the Behind the scenes section, so that it is not infobox-exclusive. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 15:29, December 5, 2018 (UTC)
- Alright then
Also, per Forum:CT:Infobox image size for mobile skin, the infobox image shall be at least 400px in width if you are able to adjust the crop a little wider out. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 18:14, December 5, 2018 (UTC)
- I've uploaded a wider version that includes the moons and takes up the whole infobox, I think that's the best I can do within reason. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 08:59, December 6, 2018 (UTC)
QGJ
This article makes it sound as if the Wookiees were the first to discover Alaris Prime, but it had once been a site of a battle during the New Sith Wars.- I gave it a short acknowledgement, hope it's not too clunky
Please provide the timeframe for the Wookiees' rediscovery and colonization of Alaris Prime.- Done.
Attichitcuk lacks any context in the Bts.QuiGonJinn(Talk) 17:32, December 5, 2018 (UTC)
- Changed that description. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 08:59, December 6, 2018 (UTC)
Zed
Shouldn't its moon be named in the "Moons" section of the infobox?- Sure
A minor thing, but the semicolon after "one of its small moons" would probably look better as a comma.- The one time I thought I'd used it right.
"The planet had eight moons and had the sixth orbital position around the star Kashyyyk." To remove the repetition of "had", maybe replace the second occurrence with something like "held" or "was in".Zed42 (talk) 09:24, December 6, 2018 (UTC)- All changed. Welcome to the CAN page. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 02:13, December 7, 2018 (UTC)
Imp
Same thing with the Slice as with the Alaris Expanse.Imperators II(Talk) 18:02, December 6, 2018 (UTC)- Very well.
{{Imagecat}}, please.Imperators II(Talk) 18:02, December 6, 2018 (UTC)- Done.
Is "the outer arm" used by the source? "Arm" is usually used when discussing galaxies, not systems.Imperators II(Talk) 18:02, December 6, 2018 (UTC)- Sure does, even with the capitalisation
- Sources are weird. Imperators II(Talk) 11:04, December 7, 2018 (UTC)
- Sure does, even with the capitalisation
Date for the NSW battle, please.Imperators II(Talk) 18:02, December 6, 2018 (UTC)NSW isn't the earliest known infobit about Alaris Prime, either. TOR Scavenging Crew Skill mission "Hunting Party" mentions two Trandoshan clans holding a hunting competition on Alaris Prime.Imperators II(Talk) 18:02, December 6, 2018 (UTC)- I thought this one over and decided that having both those references are honestly unnecessary in regards to this article, so I've removed them and just said that Alaris was uncolonized, which I think gets the point across
- I think you should now specify which uncolonized, resource-rich world exactly are you talking about there, Alaris or Alaris Prime. Imperators II(Talk) 11:04, December 7, 2018 (UTC)
- Done. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 00:47, December 10, 2018 (UTC)
- I think you should now specify which uncolonized, resource-rich world exactly are you talking about there, Alaris or Alaris Prime. Imperators II(Talk) 11:04, December 7, 2018 (UTC)
- I thought this one over and decided that having both those references are honestly unnecessary in regards to this article, so I've removed them and just said that Alaris was uncolonized, which I think gets the point across
Geonosis and the Outer Rim Worlds, p.75 mentions "middle-period Krorral" style of architecture (eventually integrated in Kamino's cities such as Tipoca City) being used in "the Gkrur clan compounds on Kashyyyk and the Alaris colonies."Imperators II(Talk) 18:02, December 6, 2018 (UTC)- Thanks for finding that. Should have known to search through the what links here page. Added in.
- Before writing up astro articles, I usually check at least this trio of places: Special:WhatLinksHere, Special:PrefixIndex, and finally good old Search. Imperators II(Talk) 11:04, December 7, 2018 (UTC)
- Thanks for finding that. Should have known to search through the what links here page. Added in.
This is interesting. Star Wars: Force and Destiny Core Rulebook, p.359 reads: "A moon of the gas giant Alaris, Alaris Prime was terraformed over the millennia by Wookiee colonists to resemble Kashyyyk." (The book is set during the Empire years of the Great Jedi Purge, before the Galactic Civil War has begun in earnest.)Imperators II(Talk) 18:02, December 6, 2018 (UTC)- It sure is. Added it to the sources, though I won't integrate it in since it only refers to one moon, so it can be included on Alaris Prime's article when I write it up, unlike the previous references
- Hey, I'm looking forward to that. Imperators II(Talk) 11:04, December 7, 2018 (UTC)
- It sure is. Added it to the sources, though I won't integrate it in since it only refers to one moon, so it can be included on Alaris Prime's article when I write it up, unlike the previous references
You're currently using the date ref to source more than just the dates.Imperators II(Talk) 18:02, December 6, 2018 (UTC)- Had removed the mistaken part anyway. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 02:13, December 7, 2018 (UTC)
Well, now stating that the moon was "discovered" in the last few decades of the Republic like that kind of conflicts with what I quoted from the Force and Destiny Core Rulebook above.Imperators II(Talk) 04:30, December 10, 2018 (UTC)- I should have been explicit with this earlier, but the sources are absolutely conflicting. From GB's databank: The Wookiees have many legends about how the immense wroshyr tree, native to Kashyyyk, migrated across the vacuum of space to Alaris, but no definite theory has emerged. Alaris Prime was discovered independently by Wookiee explorers. The part about the wroshyr trees is also mentioned in The Fact File and Complete Encyclopedia. Unlike the issues that came up with Alaris Prime's mentions in Old Republic era media, which can be reconciled with the assumption that the moon was forgotten for a near millennium, I think this one is doomed to be a canon issue acknowledged in Alaris Prime's Bts. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 14:18, December 10, 2018 (UTC)
- Let's battle it out on that nomination, then. :P Imperators II(Talk) 18:19, December 10, 2018 (UTC)
- I should have been explicit with this earlier, but the sources are absolutely conflicting. From GB's databank: The Wookiees have many legends about how the immense wroshyr tree, native to Kashyyyk, migrated across the vacuum of space to Alaris, but no definite theory has emerged. Alaris Prime was discovered independently by Wookiee explorers. The part about the wroshyr trees is also mentioned in The Fact File and Complete Encyclopedia. Unlike the issues that came up with Alaris Prime's mentions in Old Republic era media, which can be reconciled with the assumption that the moon was forgotten for a near millennium, I think this one is doomed to be a canon issue acknowledged in Alaris Prime's Bts. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 14:18, December 10, 2018 (UTC)