Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Z9

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Z9

• Nominated by: Cevan (talk) 01:11, November 30, 2016 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Decided to knock this guy out before I really get cracking on Gubacher.

(3 ACs/5 Users/8 Total)

Support

1. Shayn Mikel (talk) 04:10, November 30, 2016 (UTC) The article is about as comprehensive as it gets for a single-episode background character.
2. Great work! Nivlacanator^(talk) 05:41, December 1, 2016 (UTC)
3. Imperators II^(Talk) 17:59, December 29, 2016 (UTC)
4. MasterFred^(Whatever) 01:44, May 1, 2017 (UTC)
5. Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 15:56, May 1, 2017 (UTC)
6. ProfessorTofty (talk) 18:20, May 22, 2017 (UTC)
7. 1358 ^(Talk) 22:13, July 5, 2017 (UTC)
8. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 16:25, July 24, 2017 (UTC)

Object

Nivlacanator

• I would identify D-Suad. Something like this: "efforts of D-Squad, a Republic squad of spy droids". Nivlacanator^(talk) 05:52, November 30, 2016 (UTC)
  • Done. Cevan (talk) 13:40, November 30, 2016 (UTC)
• At the word "boarded", I would suggest making it a link to "Escape from Abafar."
  • Done. Cevan (talk) 13:40, November 30, 2016 (UTC)
• A word better than pelted might be better—battered, bombarded.
  • Dpne. Cevan (talk) 13:40, November 30, 2016 (UTC)
• Z9 should also be affiliated with the Republic Military, so that should be added to the infobox, etc.
  • Done. In case anyone should ask, the "military" in "Republic military" is lowercase because, despite the page it links to being uppercase, whoever made that page was in error and it has yet to be uppercase in canon. Cevan (talk) 13:40, November 30, 2016 (UTC)

Imperators II

• You have some infobox-exclusive information. Imperators II^(Talk) 20:48, December 20, 2016 (UTC)
  • I believe that should do it. Cevan (talk) 01:46, December 24, 2016 (UTC)

Fred strikes back

• Is the droid's top ever referred to as a "dome"? If not, I wouldn't refer to it as such. It's not really the correct shape for a dome. MasterFred^(Whatever) 21:53, April 26, 2017 (UTC)
  • I've gone ahead and changed "dome" to "head," as it seems per Star Wars Builders: Droids they're referred to as "heads." Cevan (talk) 21:48, April 29, 2017 (UTC)

The CP

• Hey Cevan, a couple things. Shouldn't the antenna and the computer probe-arm be spelled out in both the infobox and Characteristic sections?
  • Sorry, I'm not sure I understand what you mean. Cevan (talk) 20:54, April 30, 2017 (UTC)
    • So, those two things are tools that he uses, right? I think they should be added to the article. :) Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 22:08, April 30, 2017 (UTC)
      • Ah, gotcha! I've gone ahead and added them in. Cevan (talk) 22:47, April 30, 2017 (UTC)
• Also the word "approach" is used twice in the last part of the characteristics. Please try to switch it up a bit.
  • Done. Cevan (talk) 20:54, April 30, 2017 (UTC)
• Nice job otherwise. Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 20:06, April 30, 2017 (UTC)
  • Thanks! Cevan (talk) 20:54, April 30, 2017 (UTC)

Ecks Dee

• Some preliminary objections before I look at the prose itself. The references for the droid's height are inadequate as is. Z9 is not mentioned in any of the Databank entries, so you'll need to include a note about how you reached the conclusion. Essentially the exact same objection as Toprawa's objection in the nomination above yours.
  • Fixed. Cevan (talk) 00:19, May 12, 2017 (UTC)
• I'd like to see the intro slightly expanded.
  • Done. Cevan (talk) 00:19, May 12, 2017 (UTC)
• As with your Unidentified false Jedi nomination, check your image caption punctuations.
  • Fixed. Cevan (talk) 00:19, May 12, 2017 (UTC)
• Ditto, this goes for the IMDb reference. It requires a backup link, which the template supports.
  • Already done. Cevan (talk) 00:19, May 12, 2017 (UTC)
• IIRC there's a category for droids by programmed gender. 1358 ^(Talk) 17:05, May 11, 2017 (UTC)
  • Not sure how I missed that—added. Cevan (talk) 00:19, May 12, 2017 (UTC)
• "Z9 was aboard the space station Valor along with Tarkin shortly before the Republic strategy conference on board the station was set to begin." Two -boards in the same sentence. Please vary your usage; personally I'd swap the first one with "present on".
  • Done. Cevan (talk) 19:02, June 12, 2017 (UTC)
• The last sentence of the intro reads awkwardly, and I think the reason is the "while". Quoting the style guide of The Economist, "while" is best reserved for time-related usage. Please try to reword the sentence for better flow.
  • How's that? Cevan (talk) 19:02, June 12, 2017 (UTC)
    • Still sounding a bit choppy. My recommendation would be something like "The Separatist plan to ram the Valor with the cruiser was foiled after a Republic squad managed to detonate the incoming ship, saving Valor and…"
      • How about now? Cevan (talk) 15:40, June 30, 2017 (UTC)
• Piggybacking my first objection, there's too many "aboards/on boards" in the body. Please vary.
  • Better? Cevan (talk) 19:02, June 12, 2017 (UTC)
• Emdashes should be kept to a minimum as they break the flow of the text. You have two emdash clauses in the same paragraph in the bio.
  • Removed one of the emdashes. Cevan (talk) 19:02, June 12, 2017 (UTC)
• To say someone "possesses" programming doesn't really sound proper. 1358 ^(Talk) 21:24, June 5, 2017 (UTC)
  • Changed to "had." Cevan (talk) 19:02, June 12, 2017 (UTC)

Toprawa

• Similar to my objection on your other nomination, the information regarding Industrial Automaton as Z9's manufacturer, and anything else from that source, requires a manual reference note, as Z9 is not mentioned within. You'll notice particularly the problem with sourcing such an explicit assertion as "Z9 was equipped with a repair arm" to a book that doesn't even mention the droid.
  • I've gone ahead and removed both bits of information sourced to that book. Cevan (talk) 13:13, July 22, 2017 (UTC)
    • I agree with removing the repair arm bit, since we don't actually see that, but if that source states that R5 units are manufactured by IA, I think that's something you should keep in the article, since it's basic to every droid of that line. It's like giving the homeworld of Kamino for every clone. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 17:56, July 23, 2017 (UTC)
      • It only states that R5-D4 is manufactured by IA. I'm sure Z9 was manufactured by them as well, but since the source does not say anything about all R5s being IA products I suppose it would be best to just leave that bit out, at least until we have more definitive confirmation? Cevan (talk) 16:19, July 24, 2017 (UTC)
        • Yes, that's sound. If the information pertains only to R5-D4, it's best not to extrapolate and apply it to the entire R5 line without more explicit confirmation. If you're up to it, I'd suggest amending the R5 article as well to reflect this. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 16:25, July 24, 2017 (UTC)
• For the TCW episode's air date, please refer to the Star Wars: The Clone Wars: Episode Guide as a primary source that contains this information, as opposed to the unreliable IMDb. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 00:01, July 19, 2017 (UTC)
  • Done. Cevan (talk) 13:13, July 22, 2017 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 16:26, July 24, 2017 (UTC)