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Yeet

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Support

  1. A nostalgic meme. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 13:13, 26 March 2022 (UTC)
  2. Yeet — Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 08:53, 6 April 2022 (UTC)
  3. ACvote UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 17:17, 7 July 2022 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote YEET. Supreme Emperor Holocomm 16:22, 26 July 2022 (UTC)
  5. ACvote JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 20:10, 28 July 2022 (UTC)

Object

Fan
  • Make sure the capitalization of Strike is consistent.
  • You don't need to have referencing in the intro, but you're missing refs in the first paragraph of the body.
  • Can the article be dated?
  • There's enough room for an image of a related subject. Fan26 (Talk) 02:11, 22 March 2022 (UTC)
YEEEET
  • "Kara Xoo was the Tempest Runner of Kara Xoo's Tempest." Besides the fact its stating the obvious, it's not got any mention of Yeet. I would be better to just say "Yeet's tempest" or something like that. Also it's the only mention of the title Tempest Runner in the whole article.
  • Context required for Avon Starros and children, Poisoned Barb, Dalna in the intro and Hynestia in the bio.
  • Got a source for that date?
  • "first appeared" is only used if there's multiple appearances (aside from the audiobooks), so "first" is not needed here.
  • "Sometime during 230 BBY, after arriving on the planet Dalna, the temporary stronghold of Kara Xoo's Tempest, Squib, a strike in the Tempest, entered the cargo hold of the Poisoned Barb, the flagship of Kara Xoo, the leader of the tempest, and pointed a blaster at the children inside, who had been kidnapped from their respective planets, ordering them to follow Yeet off the ship." Riiiight lets dissect this one. There's context for everything, that's good. Buuut, you've made so many clauses for it that it's just convoluted. So what I'm thinking is you move Kara Xoo's introduction up to that of the tempest and introduce them both together like "the tempest led by the Quarren Kara Xoo". With the children, you introduce them as "the" children as if we already know about. I'd say introduce them as something like "a group of kidnapped children" or "a group of children who had been…". And finally, you could just say "the strike Squib" to get rid of the extra clause. You contextualise stuff with clauses quite a lot so I, personally, would recommend trying to avoid (if there's a way to, of course) that just to keep the sentences less convoluted with parts. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 19:36, 24 March 2022 (UTC)
    • aaaaand done. thanks for the tips BloodOfIrizi (talk) 22:50, 24 March 2022 (UTC)
  • So Yeet's birth is dated to by the one time they appear. Does the book actually mention their birth? Otherwise the birthdate field shouldn't be filled. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 01:21, 25 March 2022 (UTC)
  • Most of Yeet's physical description is infobox exclusive. They can be mentioned down in a Personality and traits section.
  • Are their any quotes aimed at Yeet in the book? If so, they can go in the article. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 01:24, 25 March 2022 (UTC)
Spooky
  • I think there's quotes from the novel that could be added to the sections that don't have one. The one about tragically losing recruits in particular might suit the P+T nicely.
  • The novel describes her hair as ropey, which can be included.
    • added in p+t
  • The fact that Yeet had lost recruits prior to the Starros incident should be introduced in the article prior to the 230 BBY events, since she would've had to have lost them by or prior to that point.
    • added
  • It's unnecessary to repeat her gender and species both in the bio and P+T; should pick one to keep and remove the other.
    • removed from P+T
  • I believe the image could be moved up a paragraph so that it doesn't impact the P+T/BtS text.
    • donzo
  • I'm seeing varying missing links and over-used commas, please do a run through and check.
  • My copy-edit - for the future, it's good to be mindful for the capitalization in sector headings such as the P+T.—spookywillowwtalk 09:51, 25 April 2022 (UTC)
Ecks
  • Image captions that constitute full sentences should get a full stop (period).
    • added
  • Just checking: is it intentional that you reference this entire part to the date reference? If you were only intending to source the date, then you should move the Mission to Disaster reference to just after "recruits". "According to Nihil Scientist Doctor Zadina Mkampa, Yeet had a tragic history of losing recruits. Sometime in 230 BBY,"
    • fixed
  • You have consecutive references to Mission to Disaster in the Personality and traits section. If the entire paragraph can be sourced to the same source, a reference at the very end will suffice. 1358 (Talk) 13:43, 22 May 2022 (UTC)
  • I think it'd be good to establish in the intro why the children were kidnapped. Right now it just comes out of the blue.
    • added
  • "On Dalna, Yeet and the other strikes began claiming children for their respective strikes" Not sure I understand this. Strikes are claiming children for their respective strikes? Does "strike" have another meaning or what is this supposed to say? Same issue seems to exist in the body as well. 1358 (Talk) 20:22, 27 May 2022 (UTC)
    • okay this is tricky. a strike is a person (the lowest rank in tje nihil) and also a group (the lowest ranking unit in the Nihil). there really isnt an easy way to diffrenciate in context, so i removed one mention of the strike (individual), if that works BloodOfIrizi (talk) 05:40, 28 May 2022 (UTC)
      • Is there an article for these strikes (units)? I feel like having one and linking to it would be beneficial for clearing up the confusion. 1358 (Talk) 09:02, 1 June 2022 (UTC)
        • created and added BloodOfIrizi (talk) 15:50, 1 June 2022 (UTC)
          • Just checking: in your article creation, you capitalize "Strike" as in both the unit and the rank, but in this article, you don't. Which is correct? 1358 (Talk) 08:24, 7 June 2022 (UTC)
            • a few things - 1) there is no such thing as a strike (unit), so those links and context have been removed. 2). Strike (individual) is capitalized, and that has been fixed. BloodOfIrizi (talk) 01:00, 8 June 2022 (UTC)
UberSoldat
  • Please provide context in the quote attributions, since the lines are being addressed to someone else directly.
  • I don't see the relevance of documenting the fact that a character unrelated to Yeet informs another unrelated character about what Yeet did. You never mention Yeet taking Petri on the strike run prior to that, when the article is about Yeet. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 07:14, 22 June 2022 (UTC)
  • Please mention Star Wars: The High Republic in the BTS. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 07:47, 23 June 2022 (UTC)
SE
  • Can this sentence please be broken up? "Sometime around 230 BBY,[2] after arriving on the planet Dalna—the temporary stronghold of Kara Xoo's Tempest—the strike Squib entered the cargo hold of the Poisoned Barb, Xoo's flagship, and pointed a blaster at a group of children who had been kidnapped to become recruits for the Nihil, ordering them to follow Yeet off the ship."
    • done
  • "and later took the boy on a strike run." What is a strike run? Supreme Emperor Holocomm 17:07, 4 July 2022 (UTC)
    • the book doesnt give context but its inferred to be a mission/job, i reworded it, lmk if that works BloodOfIrizi (talk) 00:06, 5 July 2022 (UTC)
Macaroni
  • Two things about the P+T quote: 1) Is there really no space after the ellipsis? 2) I'd recommend moving it the bio instead, which is a more important section that currently has no quote.
    • no space, surprisingly. and moved
  • The bit about Mkampa in the P+T doesn't seem to say anything about her personality - it's just repeating info that you already noted in the bio.
    • id argue that it shows carelessness or harshness - but as neither are stated in the book, removed.
  • You only ever refer to Yeet by her name - since we know her gender, can you throw in a couple of pronouns for variation? JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 20:17, 25 July 2022 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 20:10, 28 July 2022 (UTC)