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Wex "TIE-Die" Dafid

  • Nominated by: Green Tentacle (Talk) 00:00, 23 December 2008 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: You can get shot just as dead when there's a moron at the helm as when there's a genius.

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. ACvote His name intrigued me. Chack Jadson (Talk) 23:21, 23 December 2008 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 23:41, 23 December 2008 (UTC)
  3. SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is a lie) 08:11, 25 December 2008 (UTC)
  4. Grunny 12:37, 25 December 2008 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote --Eyrezer 04:28, 28 December 2008 (UTC)

Object

  1. From the Moffship of Grand Moff Tranner:
    • "During his time as a pilot, Dafid gained a three-inch scar on his cheek and a mechanical hand, along with an understanding of tactical flying." - "Gained [...] a mechanical hand" sounds weird to me. Perhaps you rephrase this sentence something along the lines of "During his time as a pilot, Dafid received a three-inch scar on his cheek and lost a hand, which he replaced with a mechanical hand," and then merge "Dafid gained an understanding of tactical flying" into the next sentence.
    • What did Farlander (or any other of his students, for that matter) do after training? I think a mention would be appropriate, even if it is only one or two lines. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 23:31, 23 December 2008 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 04:28, 28 December 2008 (UTC)