Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Virgillia system/Legends

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Virgillia system/Legends

  • Nominated by: Dropbearemma (talk) 13:45, 26 February 2022 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: I thought updating this article would take half an hour tops. I was so wrong. It used to contain exactly 6 words, and now contains almost 900.
  • WookieeProject (optional): WP:AST

(4 ACs/2 Users/6 Total)

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Support

  1. ACvote Kudos to Dropbearemma, a newcomer to the status article nomination process, for her hard work and patience! Imperators II(Talk) 13:48, 26 February 2022 (UTC)
  2. Starting out solid. Welcome to the GAN! Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 14:13, 26 February 2022 (UTC)
  3. Outstanding work! I hope to see many more from you! LucaRoR Sigil of House Serenno (Talk) 17:40, 28 February 2022 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Welcome welcome welcome! JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 18:10, 28 February 2022 (UTC)
  5. ACvote An excellent beginning. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 11:14, 2 March 2022 (UTC)
  6. ACvote OOM 224 17:49, 3 March 2022 (UTC)

Object

OOM
  • Good work. My edit here. Just a few things:
  • Two dangling participles in the intro:
    • "the site of a civil war between the Aristocracy and the Virgillian Free Alignment, which began […]"
    • "The conflict eventually became a proxy war between the Empire and the Rebel Alliance, which the Alliance-backed Free Alignment ultimately won"
  • WP:MOS: "A subject should be linked once upon its first mention in the article's infobox, once upon its first mention in the article's intro, and once upon its first mention in the article's main body." — there is a duplicate link for Galactic Republic/Legends. Similarly, HoloNet News/Legends doesn't need to be linked twice in the quotes.
  • It would be nice to vary the use of language and space out repeated words; the last several paragraphs all use the word "after," but the synonym "subsequently" only appears once. OOM 224 21:52, 2 March 2022 (UTC)
    • How's this? I also swapped the quotes because I think it reads better that way, if that's alright. Dropbearemma (talk) 06:31, 3 March 2022 (UTC)
      • Looks good. After speaking with Imp, I've changed the first dangling participle sentence back to how it was, since it reads fine given the context, so apologies for any trouble there. OOM 224 17:49, 3 March 2022 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 21:35, 5 March 2022 (UTC)