- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Unidentified stormtrooper (Endor landing station)
- Nominated by: Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 05:07, December 14, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: First nom of anything for a while.
(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)
Support
- There's so many unidentified stormtroopers. Commander Code-8 To say hi, press 42 21:12, December 17, 2012 (UTC)
- Solid writing. Winterz (talk) 01:09, December 20, 2012 (UTC)
IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 03:04, January 3, 2013 (UTC)- Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 20:07, January 4, 2013 (UTC)
Green Tentacle (Talk) 23:22, January 4, 2013 (UTC)
Object
CC-8
In the Bts you should probably say that this stormtrooper appears in a lot of ROTJ related stuff, since a fair few are listed in the Bts. Also the LEGO game appearances are probably worth mentioning as well.The rest of the article's good though. Commander Code-8 To say hi, press 42 09:24, December 16, 2012 (UTC)- From my experience with articles I've worked on, as well as other users' articles, we don't usually mention all the adaptations, unless those adaptations provided either significant new info, or presented contradictory info. This character's adaptation/other source appearances, as well as the LEGO games, just involves the same scene with no new info. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 18:05, December 16, 2012 (UTC)
- Actually I've indeed decided to add LEGO game stuff to the BTS. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 18:14, December 16, 2012 (UTC)
- I wasn't saying you have to mention every single adaption, I was thinking you could make a broad statement and say he appeared in a lot of ROTJ adaptions. Commander Code-8 To say hi, press 42 06:14, December 17, 2012 (UTC)
- Added. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 18:12, December 17, 2012 (UTC)
- I wasn't saying you have to mention every single adaption, I was thinking you could make a broad statement and say he appeared in a lot of ROTJ adaptions. Commander Code-8 To say hi, press 42 06:14, December 17, 2012 (UTC)
- Actually I've indeed decided to add LEGO game stuff to the BTS. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 18:14, December 16, 2012 (UTC)
- From my experience with articles I've worked on, as well as other users' articles, we don't usually mention all the adaptations, unless those adaptations provided either significant new info, or presented contradictory info. This character's adaptation/other source appearances, as well as the LEGO games, just involves the same scene with no new info. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 18:05, December 16, 2012 (UTC)
Toprawa
"Stormtrooper Corps" is listed in the infobox but nowhere in the article body, which it should. This can be rectified by rewording the opening sentence of the Bio a little bit. One suggestion: "A Human served in the Galactic Empire's Stormtrooper Corps during the Galactic Civil War..." and then change "trooper" in the following sentence to "stormtrooper."- Done.
Would it not be correct to say that this stormtrooper was a part of Tempest Force? I'm to understand the entire "legion" on Endor of which the Emperor speaks is Tempest Force, which would naturally encompass this individual, I should think.\- To be honest, I think so too, but in the past JangFett actually questioned if any source explicitly stated that, and without finding such a source, I've left it out to be safe. I think this merits further discussion though.
This mention of the skirmish between the Rebel strike team and the scout troopers doesn't really provide any critical information for this article. I would suggest removing this portion: "and a brief skirmish against Imperial scout troopers patrolling the surrounding forests." Instead, you could briefly mention that the strike team arrived to destroy the shield generator to explain their significance.- Done.
I disagree with the accuracy of this wording: "this stormtrooper and another trooper, Sergeant Wallen, were present in a landing station when Dark Lord of the Sith Darth Vader arrived from a Lambda-class T-4a shuttle." It makes it sound like they were just standing around the station and happened to be there when Vader arrived. It would be more correct to say that they met Vader as he arrived to deliver the captured Skywalker to him.- Taken care of. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 16:26, January 4, 2013 (UTC)
- Since the last two objections will basically require an entire rewriting of this second Bio paragraph, I'd prefer to resolve these first with you before continuing my review. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 01:35, January 4, 2013 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 23:52, January 4, 2013 (UTC)
- For WP:AMB. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 05:07, December 14, 2012 (UTC)
- On vacation from the 24th-31st. If any objections are given in that time period, I will respond after getting back. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 01:02, December 24, 2012 (UTC)