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Unidentified Senate Guard (mind trick)
- Nominated by: Commander Code-8 Hello There! 03:47, 11 April 2022 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Fun little passage but it certainly wouldn't have suited the film's tone at that point. Abridged audiobook has been checked
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(talk) 05:28, 27 April 2022 (UTC)- LucaRoR
(Talk) 14:52, 3 May 2022 (UTC) - Fan26 (Talk) 21:49, 5 May 2022 (UTC)
"the guard agreed that it was a good idea as Kenobi seemed like a reasonable person" This is gold. OOM 224 10:06, 12 May 2022 (UTC)- Imperators II(Talk) 12:12, 17 May 2022 (UTC)
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Luca
Is there a reason why you are using {{Youmay}} rather than linking to the disambiguation page?- Forgot I had even made that. Done
I would specify that it was the "Senate of the Galactic Republic" or the "Galactic Senate" in the intro.- Done
In the intro, what about something like: "Senator Bail Organa and his two Jedi companions, Obi-Wan Kenobi and Yoda, […]" and then "However, Kenobi, mind tricked the Senate Guard […]" ?- Done
The second biography paragraph could use a break, which will likely make more space for another image.- Done
"and could not believe his luck" IMO, this sentence isn't really written in an encyclopedic tone. Is there a way to reword it?- Done
Please, make sure to be ok with my copy-edit.LucaRoR (Talk) 06:00, 22 April 2022 (UTC)
- Mostly good, but I undid the "stayed->have stayed" part since that changes the meaning too much Commander Code-8 Hello There! 07:13, 25 April 2022 (UTC)
Imp
Are we absolutely certain that Senate Guards were a part of the Republic Military? IIRC the latter was dissolved during the Ruusan Reformation in 1000 BBY.In P&T, I'm not convinced that "suitable" is a very appropriate (no pun intended) choice of word. AFAIK "suitable" is used in the form "suitable for X".Imperators II(Talk) 17:11, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
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Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 12:12, 17 May 2022 (UTC)