Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Tripion

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Tripion

• Nominated by: Trip391 (talk) 02:52, February 20, 2014 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: For the Novels and Creatures Barn-Burner

(4 ACs/2 Users/6 Total)

Support

1. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 11:58, March 9, 2014 (UTC)
2. JangFett ^(Talk) 17:05, March 17, 2014 (UTC)
3. Cade Calrayn 22:59, April 6, 2014 (UTC)
4. Thunderforge (talk) 04:31, April 11, 2014 (UTC)
5. Sir Cavalier of One^{(Squadron channel)} 19:40, April 16, 2014 (UTC)
6. Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 18:57, April 20, 2014 (UTC)

Object

• Could you give context for Boba Fett and Jabba the Hutt? Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 21:10, March 6, 2014 (UTC)
  • Done Trip391 (talk) 07:06, March 7, 2014 (UTC)
• Are Nnaksta and Sitnalta pupils? Could you give context?
  • Reworded it a bit
• You need a "1st appearance" template.
  • Done
• Maybe mention their subspecies in the intro.
  • Done Trip391 (talk) 22:08, March 8, 2014 (UTC)
• That should be all. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 12:55, March 7, 2014 (UTC)

Cav

• Seeing as how the two Tripion images are radically different, I think a little more physical description is needed.
  • The source material only mentions those three traits from the infobox, so I think they may be traits typical for the many different subspecies.
    • That's fine, but the images are different and should be described, etc: number of legs, pincers, etc.
      • Didn't see this. Added in descriptions of the subspecies in both pictures. Trip391 (talk) 21:39, March 30, 2014 (UTC)
• The history section quote - you could probably shift this to the header quote. It doesn't look right having a quote in the body, but not at the head. - Sir Cavalier of One^{(Squadron channel)} 20:43, March 8, 2014 (UTC)
  • Done

Dave Filoni

• "Tripions had three venomous stinger-tipped tails they used during combat." Didn't you already mention this in the first sentence of the intro? It seems like redundant information to mention the three stingers again. JangFett ^(Talk) 00:11, March 11, 2014 (UTC)
  • It's mentioned in the intro as it is one of the defining characteristics of a tripion, and is also important to expand on it in the biology and appearance and behavior sections, since having three venomous stinger-tipped tails is a description of a tripion's appearance, as well as how it hunts/defends itself. I have, however reworded it a bit to make it less redundant. Trip391 (talk) 09:38, March 11, 2014 (UTC)
    • I'm referring to the intro—I suggest that you remove this part "with three venomous tail stingers " because you go on to repeat the same information later on. JangFett ^(Talk) 13:53, March 11, 2014 (UTC)
      • Oh, it was in the intro twice. Yea, that shouldn't have been there. Trip391 (talk) 20:37, March 11, 2014 (UTC)
• Be sure to mention the release dates or years for the Galaxy Guides and could you give context for the Alliance Intelligence Reports? JangFett ^(Talk) 14:30, March 13, 2014 (UTC)
  • Added release years, but there were conflicting sources for the exact release dates. Mentioned that AIR was a SWRPG supplement. Trip391 (talk) 22:38, March 13, 2014 (UTC)
    • "It was later in the Star Wars Roleplaying Game supplement Alliance Intelligence Reports, which was released in 1995." Fragment. What do you mean by "It was later in"? JangFett ^(Talk) 16:08, March 14, 2014 (UTC)
      • It was later mentioned in Trip391 (talk) 21:16, March 14, 2014 (UTC)
        • For tense consistency, I changed a few "are" to "were". JangFett ^(Talk) 17:05, March 17, 2014 (UTC)

Cadeth

• I'm fairly sure that the first edition of the Galaxy Guide doesn't need the "First Edition" part, as it was just released as "Galaxy Guide 2: Yavin and Bespin."
  • The wording between the two editions was slightly different
    • Oh, that's not what I meant. You format the two differently—when citing it, don't include the words First Edition (since it wasn't released as "First Edition") but do include the Second Edition part. Cade Calrayn 20:14, March 20, 2014 (UTC)
• Also, the proper way of formatting stuff like that is Galaxy Guide 2: Yavin and Bespin and Galaxy Guide 2: Yavin and Bespin, Second Edition.
  • Thanks for fixing
• It would seem to me that Alliance Intelligence Reports needs a {{1stp}}; am I right?
  • Added
• Can you beef up the intro? Maybe a sentence about their diet.
  • Added
• Are they confirmed to be native to either Yavin 13 or Gall? If not explicitly confirmed, they need to be removed from the homeworld field, and the category removed as well.
  • On closer inspection the Galaxy Guides (for Yavin 13) do only say "ideally suited for" while the previous species is referred to as "one of the natural hazards", so I'll remove 13. With Gall they're referred to as "Gallian(on) tripions", but the EGtPaM does only say they lurked in the shadows, not native, so I'll remove that too.
• You should mention that they are crustaceans in the biology section, not the behavior.
  • Changed
• I think it'd also be good to mention the number of legs and pincers, unless those are variable.
  • They vary by subspecies
    • Hmmm. Then I think it'd be good to give the number of legs & pincers as an example for one of the subspecies.
      • Stated the number of legs and pincers of the subspecies in the more detailed image (tripion attacking Twilight Class) from Alliance Intelligence Reports
• "the prey was larger" - than the tripion? Also, that sentence switches between plural and singular in reference to the tripion ("They" vs. "its"). Please pick one.
  • Changed to "the prey", but used "larger than the attacking tripion" in reference to that
• Context for Tatooine.
  • Added Trip391 (talk) 00:16, March 18, 2014 (UTC)
• Not bad. Just some formatting and some exclusive information. Cade Calrayn 18:07, March 17, 2014 (UTC)

Exiled Jedi

• Is crustaceous used by one of the original sources? If it is not, I believe you should change it to crustacean, because I don't think crustaceous is a real word.
  • It's classified as a "desert crustacean", and crustaceous is real, I don't know why it's being underlined red as a misspelling
• There seems to be some inconsistency about the creature's diet. It is mentioned that the creatures eat small lizards and insects, but then you mention prey that is larger than the tripion.
  • Reworded it as the text simply says "only if the prey is large", but not specifically what exactly the large prey was
• Can 22 BBY be sourced to Boba Fett: Hunted?
  • The Essential Readers Companion dates it as 22 BBY, should I source 22 BBY to that instead, or keep that section sourced to Hunted?
    • Yes, please use The Essential Reader's Companion.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 02:32, April 7, 2014 (UTC)
      • Done Trip391 (talk) 02:48, April 7, 2014 (UTC)
• The history section seems like it should be a Tripions in the galaxy section. The history section would be more appropriate for talking about where the species lived by what date and other information about the history of the species in general. Specific incidents belong in the "Tripions in the galaxy" section.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 19:03, March 22, 2014 (UTC)
  • Changed Trip391 (talk) 18:53, March 26, 2014 (UTC)
• In the biology and appearance section and infobox you seem to indicate that all tripion have three tails, then mention a subspecies with only one.
  • That's how the Galaxy Guides and Alliance Intelligence Report refer to them (hence the name I guess), but the image from the Essential Guide to Planets and Moons shows a tripion from Gall with only one tail, and Boba Fett: Hunted describes the species from Gall only having one tail as well. I added a mention of this to the bts.
• Could you mention that the subspecies in the infobox had two antennae?--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 06:32, April 9, 2014 (UTC)
  • Done Trip391 (talk) 21:47, April 13, 2014 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 18:57, April 20, 2014 (UTC)

• The two pictures are different, but are both from the sources, and makes sense considering there are over 600 different subspecies. Trip391 (talk) 02:53, February 20, 2014 (UTC)
• Hey Trip, just fwi, please be sure to put all letters outside pipelinks within the two closing double brackets. As an example: [[Planet/Legends|world]]s needs to be [[Planet/Legends|worlds]]. JangFett ^(Talk) 00:11, March 11, 2014 (UTC)
• Trip, since you're using the non/semi sentient layout, shouldn't you mention either one somewhere in the article, assuming a source book mentioned either one? JangFett ^(Talk) 17:08, March 17, 2014 (UTC)