Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/The Tale of the Aiwha Pod (second nomination)

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The Tale of the Aiwha Pod

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Support

  1. Welcome back! JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 23:01, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
  2. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 09:43, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
  3. ACvote UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 13:21, 4 October 2021 (UTC)
  4. ACvote MasterFredCommerce Guild(talk) 23:26, 25 October 2021 (UTC)
  5. ACvote OOM 224 16:56, 27 October 2021 (UTC)

Object

UberSoldat
  • Please implement {{Shortstory}} for the citation. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 13:52, 20 August 2021 (UTC)
    • Well that's new! Added! Manoof (talk) 10:29, 21 August 2021 (UTC)
      • Appearances as well. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 11:00, 21 August 2021 (UTC)
        • Oops, forgot that! All done and I went through using whatlinkshere to update elsewhere! Manoof (talk) 08:48, 22 August 2021 (UTC)
  • The intro jumps from Protas stopping the aiwha pod to a request from him with no correlation. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 09:25, 4 October 2021 (UTC)
    • Had to read it a few times to see it, hows's that? Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 12:51, 4 October 2021 (UTC)
Macaroni
  • Intro could use a paragraph break.
  • The intro still uses present tense.
  • Synopsis could use some subsectioning.
    • Not sure it was needed given it consisted of only 4 paragraphs, however i did split it into two sections of two paragraphs each. Manoof (talk) 10:29, 21 August 2021 (UTC)
      • Welcome to Wook 2021, Manoof :P
  • Per precedent, the bts should mention the game guide publisher. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 20:10, 20 August 2021 (UTC)
  • No quotes for "Description" or "The arrogance and fall of Protas"?
    • Added some quotes Manoof (talk) 09:28, 22 August 2021 (UTC)
  • Mythology is infobox-exclusive.
  • The intro doesn't make it clear what his claim was.
    • clarified Manoof (talk) 09:28, 22 August 2021 (UTC)
  • We try to avoid using the words "this" and "these" for IU articles.
  • Room for another image.
    • Shifted the existing one and added a second. Manoof (talk) 11:07, 22 August 2021 (UTC)
  • (Review note) Short stories get quotes rather than italics, so I've removed those in your citations. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 04:32, 22 August 2021 (UTC)
CC-8
  • The youmay template looks very cumbersome, I don't think any details beyond the stories being in or out of universe are necessary. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 03:26, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
    • Copied the format of the IU one but yeah, I agree. Cleaned it up and jumped on the other one. Manoof (talk) 11:14, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
  • Is the main quote the only info we have about the translation? If so that doesn't seem like confirmation that it was translated into basic
    • My understanding was written english = basic. So the written article as an IU souce would be considered to be written in Basic. This was accepted and not challenged on the related articles that already reached status which made this mention. Happy to update if the above is incorrect. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 12:51, 1 September 2021 (UTC)
  • "The protagonist of the story was a god-beast named Protas, considered the most powerful and ruler of the oceans." Most powerful what?
    • Most powerful in the oceans I believe but will check. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 12:51, 1 September 2021 (UTC)
      • Ok so the wording says "Protas was strong, stronger than any living beast, and mystical. He had powers beyond comprehension." and later "There were many who sought to take his place, to claim the title and honors of being the most powerful beast of the open seas". The wording is supposed to convey he is both the most powerful and ruler of the oceans, wrote it a while back I think. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 11:50, 2 September 2021 (UTC)
        • So you should say he was the most powerful of all beasts or something similar. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 04:13, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
          • How's that? Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 11:05, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
  • It's not actual policy but I don't think pushing quotes out of alignment with images looks good Commander Code-8 Hello There! 12:57, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
    • I actually thought it looked better, as I had the images under the quotes initially! Especially since the quote gets pushed by the infobox at the beginning of articles? *shrug* happy to move if you insist though! Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 12:51, 1 September 2021 (UTC)
      • I will have to insist, every other status article has them below quotes. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 04:13, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
        • Ah gotcha, consistency is definitely what we want. I've shifted them but the size of the first paragraph and image means it does cut over the second paragraph header/quote. The only other spot that could be better may be under the infobox opposite the contents but I'm not sure if it's possible to have it there. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 11:05, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
OOM
  • My copy-edit. Just one thing: are there no full stops/periods for those quotes? OOM 224 20:42, 26 October 2021 (UTC)
    • Thanks OOM, had to double check (thank the maker we got a book case so I could take all my books out of the boxes!). Opening quote doesn't the rest do, fixed the one that was missing. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 10:39, 27 October 2021 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 16:56, 27 October 2021 (UTC)