Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/The Tale of the Aiwha Pod

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"The Tale of the Aiwha Pod"

  • Nominated by: Manoof (talk) 12:39, May 13, 2016 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: It's been a while...

(2 ACs/2 Users/4 Total)

Support

  1. Cwedin(talk) 16:52, May 18, 2016 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 22:33, June 4, 2016 (UTC)
  3. Interesting article. I like it. Geek'ari Talk 12:27, June 9, 2016 (UTC)
  4. ACvote IFYLOFD (Talk) 00:51, July 12, 2016 (UTC)

Object

Cwedin
  • Could the intro paragraph be expanded to include bits of the synopsis? - Cwedin(talk) 21:59, May 17, 2016 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • I'm troubled by the Synopsis's use of present tense. I understand why you've opted to use it here, but it reads more like an out-of-universe article than an in-universe one, and technically, it's violating our policy on past tense. Can that section not be just as effective written in past tense? As a secondary point to this objection, I would recommend starting out that section from a more past-tense narrative perspective. For example, "The story told of how the oceans of Kamino had been ruled by the mystical being Protas since before the dawn of the second sun." Then from that point, you could more easily transition into past tense: "Melkorr, a massive titan from the deep, challenged Protas' claim as the most powerful in the seas." Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:15, July 19, 2016 (UTC)

Comments

  • I changed the italics to quotations based on the status article for kikla. - Cwedin(talk) 21:59, May 17, 2016 (UTC)
    • I looked at your edits, they're great! There is one though, we don't know if it was written in Kaminoan. It could have been a folklore story passed down verbally, all we know is it was translated. Or is that stretching it? Since the translated story is written, is that enough to say the original was too? Manoof (talk) 10:05, May 18, 2016 (UTC)
      • Good point. I'll correct that. - Cwedin(talk) 16:52, May 18, 2016 (UTC)
        • Beautiful! Thanks for the look over! Manoof (talk) 07:22, May 19, 2016 (UTC)

Vote to remove nomination (AC only)

  1. ACvote Idle objection over two weeks old. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 15:31, August 5, 2016 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Exiled Jedi (talk) 19:47, August 6, 2016 (UTC)
  3. ACvote 1358 (Talk) 22:05, August 6, 2016 (UTC)