Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Telerath

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Telerath

• Nominated by: Zed42 (talk) 21:36, April 9, 2020 (UTC)
• Nomination comments:

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

1. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 10:06, April 12, 2020 (UTC)
2. Fan26 (Talk) 18:29, April 20, 2020 (UTC)
3. Neat. UberSoldat93 (talk) 18:21, April 22, 2020 (UTC)
4. Tommy Macaroni 11:35, April 27, 2020 (UTC)
5. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 14:07, April 27, 2020 (UTC)
6. Imperators II^(Talk) 21:07, April 30, 2020 (UTC)

Object

TK-462

• "Sometime before 22 BBY, the bounty hunter Jango Fett, along with his son Boba, hired the bounty hunters Neelda, Rinn, and Tiver to assist with a mission on the Mid Rim planet Ord Mantell, meeting them in a cantina on Telerath. Shortly afterward, both groups of bounty hunters left the cantina, departing Telerath in their respective starships." Could you possibly 1) rework the first sentence as, it's quite long and could probably be split into two, and 2) did anything happen of note while the bounty hunters were in the cantina? Depending on how much source material you have, I think you should attempt to complete the section, as it ends a bit abruptly right now. Not a big deal, but I think it'll give you some good content on the page for the reader. --TK-462 (talk) 02:34, April 10, 2020 (UTC)
  • I've split the sentence and added a bit more detail, but not much happens on Telerath, aside from the bounty hunters meeting one another. Zed42 (talk) 03:56, April 10, 2020 (UTC)
    • Looks good, I don't see anything else, other than that really nitpicky thing. --16:38, April 10, 2020 (UTC)

Ben

• How could you say for sure that Telerath is in the Telerath System when the two are only mentioned in Separate sources and not confirmed to be connected. I had an edit reversed for me for saying that Tangenine was in the Tangenine sector. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 08:57, April 12, 2020 (UTC)
  • Sorry to interject here, but I think it's safe to assume so for both of the mentioned cases. I don't think we should be assuming that the Core Worlds Tangenine is located outside the Core Worlds Tangenine sector. Same goes for Telerath. Imperators II^(Talk) 09:58, April 12, 2020 (UTC)
    • Ok thanks. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 10:06, April 12, 2020 (UTC)

Tommy

• With the use of RPGseed, the BTS needs some note of what the article is assuming. Please see precedent with Oppressor and Bursoll II.
  • Done. Zed42 (talk) 15:35, April 26, 2020 (UTC)
• For me, both on my Wiki modified look and Oasis, the image caption is colliding with the RPGseed template. Please relocate the image.
  • Is it better if I place it below the template? Zed42 (talk) 15:35, April 26, 2020 (UTC)
    • That works. Tommy Macaroni 16:26, April 26, 2020 (UTC)
• I think you can describe more from the main image. Red sky, at least. Tommy Macaroni 11:55, April 26, 2020 (UTC)
  • Added information to both Description and Locations sections. Zed42 (talk) 15:35, April 26, 2020 (UTC)
• Manala states "It was home to the planet's most infamous judge, Mazzum Onas." Is that correct?
  • I've specified this fact. Zed42 (talk) 21:33, April 26, 2020 (UTC)
    • I've just added the fact Onas resided there in inhabitants, as I think that is notable. Please make sure this works with what Knights of Fate says. Tommy Macaroni 11:35, April 27, 2020 (UTC)
      • That works, I've just moved it around to break up the previous sentence. Thanks for the review! Zed42 (talk) 11:42, April 27, 2020 (UTC)
• Judging from the history quote, Neelda is introducing himself and Tiver and Rinn, so I think the wording needs to be changed in that section and its quote caption. If Jango hired them, can we call those three associates (as they seem to know each other), and Jango their boss or contractor or something, for clarity?
  • Reworded. Zed42 (talk) 21:33, April 26, 2020 (UTC)
• Does nothing else happen on Telerath between Neelda introducing his lot and them all leaving?
  • Expanded a little, I wasn't sure how in-depth a planet article should be. The comic does show Fett carrying out a mission while Neelda and associates wait, but there's no explicit confirmation that it's on Telerath, though there's a city that looks somewhat similar. Zed42 (talk) 21:33, April 26, 2020 (UTC)
    • Okay, I've looked at the comic and I see what you mean. I think what you have looks good. Tommy Macaroni 11:35, April 27, 2020 (UTC)
• Does Age of Republic - Jango Fett 1 state it comes before AotC? Tommy Macaroni 16:26, April 26, 2020 (UTC)
  • Clarified the reference note. Zed42 (talk) 21:33, April 26, 2020 (UTC)

Imp

• I'd rather you use this instead of the Dark Horse citation. Imperators II^(Talk) 19:46, April 30, 2020 (UTC)
  • Done. Zed42 (talk) 21:00, April 30, 2020 (UTC)
• Category:Nouane sector planets, where you at? Imperators II^(Talk) 19:46, April 30, 2020 (UTC)
  • Created. Zed42 (talk) 21:00, April 30, 2020 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 21:07, April 30, 2020 (UTC)