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Taozin
- Nominated by: Ayrehead02 (talk) 17:41, July 13, 2020 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: A film and GE nom, two birds with one stone
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Support
- Fan26 (Talk) 17:25, July 20, 2020 (UTC)
OOM 224 ༼༽{talk}༼༽ 11:12, July 26, 2020 (UTC)
Master
Fredcerique 01:07, August 1, 2020 (UTC)
Imperators II(Talk) 12:04, August 30, 2020 (UTC)- Tommy-Macaroni 13:58, August 30, 2020 (UTC)
Object
OOM
Inconsistency between the usage of "the Taozin," "Taozin," and "a Taozin."- Should no be consistent. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:07, July 15, 2020 (UTC)
"Taozin were originally created for the Star Wars Legends continuity, where they first appeared in the 2001 novel Darth Maul: Shadow Hunter, which was written by Michael Reaves." The flow of the sentence could be improved with a little rewording. - - - OOM 224 ༼༽{talk}༼༽ 06:10, July 15, 2020 (UTC)- This sentence seems fine to me, how would you suggest rewording it? Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:07, July 15, 2020 (UTC)
- Not sure what the best way of expressing this is, but I think my problem is with the double extension of a sentence; "…, where…, which…." Anyway, I would reword it to this, but feel free to change it: "The Taozin were originally created for the Star Wars Legends continuity, where they first appeared in Michael Reaves' 2001 novel Darth Maul: Shadow Hunter." - - - OOM 224 ༼༽{talk}༼༽ 11:24, July 15, 2020 (UTC)
- Sure, done. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:29, July 15, 2020 (UTC)
- Not sure what the best way of expressing this is, but I think my problem is with the double extension of a sentence; "…, where…, which…." Anyway, I would reword it to this, but feel free to change it: "The Taozin were originally created for the Star Wars Legends continuity, where they first appeared in Michael Reaves' 2001 novel Darth Maul: Shadow Hunter." - - -
- This sentence seems fine to me, how would you suggest rewording it? Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:07, July 15, 2020 (UTC)
Fan
I'm not too familiar with material relating to GE, but the Mission to Batuu article characterizes it as partially the First Order's occupation of the planet (regarding the First Order's reason for being there), so unless that article is inaccurate I would say "Mission to Batuu" should be linked to when the First Order's occupation is mentioned.Fan26 (Talk) 01:20, July 19, 2020 (UTC)- Done. Ayrehead02 (talk) 16:22, July 20, 2020 (UTC)
Zed
Quotes from the Traveler's Guide should be formatted like they are on this page, with the in-universe author mentioned.Zed42 (talk) 11:27, July 19, 2020 (UTC)- Done. Ayrehead02 (talk) 13:17, July 19, 2020 (UTC)
UberSoldat
"The Taozin was kept in brine that it infused with certain qualities, which some species then considered a delicacy that increased their mental fortitude." Reads a little confusing here. Who's infusing what? You also have a dangling participle here.- Reworded. Ayrehead02 (talk) 13:17, July 19, 2020 (UTC)
Have you checked all of Solo's adaptations for possible appearances, such as the graphic novel?UberSoldat93 (talk) 12:06, July 19, 2020 (UTC)
- Yup. Ayrehead02 (talk) 13:17, July 19, 2020 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 13:58, August 30, 2020 (UTC)