Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Sunspot

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Sunspot

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. Good job. Commander Code-8 To say hi, press 42 09:16, December 16, 2012 (UTC)
  2. ACvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 01:36, December 26, 2012 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 21:56, January 2, 2013 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 15:23, January 3, 2013 (UTC)
  5. Winterz (talk) 14:17, January 4, 2013 (UTC)
  6. Stake black msg 14:59, January 4, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Toprawa
  • As a preliminary objection, I feel like the intro is way too long in relation to the body of the article (the Description and History sections). The intro is 161 words, and the body is 201. That's a pretty solid indicator that either the intro is too long, or the body is too short. Remember, especially for an article this limited in its content, the intro shouldn't necessarily make an effort to explain and detail everything, just a few basic points of information that encourages the reader to read further into the rest of the article. See if you can't condense everything there into a single paragraph about the size of the first intro paragraph that's there now. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 23:14, December 29, 2012 (UTC)
  • There seems to be a certain discrepancy between the intro, which describes Sunspot as a "planetoid," and the Description, which immediately refers to it as a "planet." Strictly speaking, a planetoid is not necessarily synonymous with a planet. Can we make this uniform according to whatever is most accurate?
  • Just a reviewing note. I'm assuming the Holonet, in its original form, also mentioned Sunspot by name while first picturing it. If so, the {{1stm}} tag would trump {{1stp}}, given that a name for the subject was provided. {{1stp}}, in terms of first publication item, would be appropriate only if the subject was pictured but never mentioned by name. (Sorry if that's confusing)
    • Actually, Sunspot's name was not provided by the Holonet. And that is kind of implied by the {{1stID}} tag in the entry immediately below the Holonet in the Sources section... Imperators II(Talk) 12:12, January 2, 2013 (UTC)
  • Also, a recommendation for use with cite web. I've found it helpful to utilize the "quote" field in instances like this, to provide the reader a quick look at what you're intending to reference in the external link without necessarily making them go find it themselves. For example, you might stick this into the quote field: "It [the story] starts with the gathering of the Force sensitive sentients on Tython in 36,453 BBY." Or whatever else you think best illustrates what you're referencing. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:01, January 1, 2013 (UTC)
Hold Still
  • I believe the intro can be reduced, especially when its nearly as big as the body, like in this case.
    • I've already managed to cut the intro in half (from 161 words to 83 words) while responding to Toprawa's objection above. Do you think it still should be shortened?
      • Well honestly, I think you should get rid of that orbital sentence in the intro. That should suffice ;). Winterz (talk) 17:06, January 3, 2013 (UTC)
  • Again a Dawn of the Jedi nom, Imperator. Grrrrrr :p Winterz (talk) 23:19, January 1, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 17:21, January 4, 2013 (UTC)