Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Sorro

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Sorro

Nominated by: Samonic ^(Talk) 18:08, 20 November 2022 (UTC)
Nomination comments: Tildnis? Outbound Flight? I only see a tragic Human. Around 700 words.
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Support

Loqiical (talk) 09:37, 25 November 2022 (UTC)
Objections handled via Discord AxMech (talk) 14:01, 14 December 2022 (UTC)
JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 23:08, 23 December 2022 (UTC)
—spookywilloww^talk 16:49, 23 January 2023 (UTC)
UberSoldat93 (talk) 16:29, 24 January 2023 (UTC)

Object

Macaroni

~~Two consecutive paragraphs begin with shortly after, let's see some variation.~~
- Done. Samonic ^(Talk) 09:03, 23 December 2022 (UTC)
Review note: for quotes like the ones you're using, ellipses shouldn't be used. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 05:43, 23 December 2022 (UTC)
- Thank you for the note. All of my novels articles (even status articles) use ellipses, I'll fix them. Samonic ^(Talk) 09:03, 23 December 2022 (UTC)
~~"Warship" appears to be infobox-exclusive and it's not entirely clear which ship it's referring to anyway.~~ JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 19:21, 23 December 2022 (UTC)
- I assume you meant to say "introduction-exclusive"? The introduction has been reworded for clarity, and the link to warship is no longer necessary there. It has been added to the body, though. Samonic ^(Talk) 19:35, 23 December 2022 (UTC)
  - Indeed I did, yeah. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 22:10, 23 December 2022 (UTC)
~~Do we know that he was from Wroona, as the infobox implies?~~
- We know he resided on Wroona. We don't know if he came from Wroona. I've seen articles using the "homeworld=" field to mention the planet a character resided on. Do you want me to remove Wroona from the infobox parameter? Samonic ^(Talk) 22:33, 23 December 2022 (UTC)
  - Yeah it should be removed, those articles are using the parameter incorrectly. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 23:05, 23 December 2022 (UTC)
    - Removed. Samonic ^(Talk) 23:07, 23 December 2022 (UTC)
~~I don't think ordered is the right word here seeing as he doesn't outrank Pellaeon: "...but Sorro ordered him away."~~JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 22:17, 23 December 2022 (UTC)
- True. Fixed. Samonic ^(Talk) 22:33, 23 December 2022 (UTC)

Spookly

I see that the P+T mentions Sorro is old outright. I think it'd be good to include some context for it, such as that he was old by the time he worked on the freighter for example, or considered old by whenever in the novel it's mentioned and perhaps by who.—spookywilloww^talk 04:43, 23 January 2023 (UTC)
- Corrected. Samonic ^(Talk) 08:22, 23 January 2023 (UTC)

Uber

~~Refs 1 and 4 can be combined.~~
- I don't think ref 4 was really necessary, so I've removed it. Samonic ^(Talk) 15:21, 24 January 2023 (UTC)
~~If the novel takes place in 0 ABY, and the family was kidnapped during the novel's events, then saying the kidnapping took place by that year is inaccurate.~~
- Removed. Samonic ^(Talk) 15:21, 24 January 2023 (UTC)
~~"...the Salaban's Hope rendezvoused with the Imperial II-class Star Destroyer Chimaera of the Galactic Empire, which was assigned to act as Esva's transport..'" Dangling participle here.~~ UberSoldat93 (talk) 14:13, 24 January 2023 (UTC)
- Corrected. Samonic ^(Talk) 15:21, 24 January 2023 (UTC)

Comments

Note for everyone reveiwing any of these two: This "Lord Odo" shouldn't have an article, as it's just what people knew Esva as. The warlord pose as a non-existent Lord Odo, basically. Samonic ^(Talk) 18:29, 20 November 2022 (UTC)
As the pronouns CT has passed, I thought I should establish that Choices of One confirms Sorro is a male. Samonic ^(Talk) 20:02, 20 January 2023 (UTC)

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 16:29, 24 January 2023 (UTC)