Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Rrrn

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Rrrn

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. UberSoldat93 (talk) 18:01, December 19, 2019 (UTC)
  2. --Lewisr (talk) 22:20, December 23, 2019 (UTC)
  3. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 06:34, December 27, 2019 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 23:04, December 30, 2019 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 20:06, January 10, 2020 (UTC)
  6. ACvote Imperators II(Talk) 10:00, January 11, 2020 (UTC)

Object

UberSoldat
  • I would suggest splitting the main body of text into two paragraphs for easier reading. The image's caption should either be changed to ".....Darth Vader" or ".....the Sith Lord" (it's currently "..........the Darth Vader"). UberSoldat93 (talk) 17:31, December 19, 2019 (UTC)
    • Sorted both. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 17:51, December 19, 2019 (UTC)
      • Nice, I made a some changes to the page as well. There were a lot of unnecessary repetitions of words near each other as well as other grammatical errors. UberSoldat93 (talk) 18:01, December 19, 2019 (UTC)
QGJ
  • Imperial Era is intro-exclusive.
    • Do you want me to keep it exclusive to the intro? Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 07:59, December 20, 2019 (UTC)
      • There isn't supposed to be any exclusive information in the intro, so it needs to be mentioned somewhere in the main body. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 11:44, December 20, 2019 (UTC)
        • Sorted. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 22:46, December 20, 2019 (UTC)
          • I was asking to mention that term in the bio; there was no reason to remove it from the intro. I'd rather prefer that you kept it there as well. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 10:30, December 24, 2019 (UTC)
  • There's a redirect link in the bio.
    • Which link? Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 07:59, December 20, 2019 (UTC)
      • The link (which I've now fixed) was "Lava." I strongly advise you to go to your Preferences -> Gadgets -> Enable this checkbox "Highlight all redirects orange". QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 11:44, December 20, 2019 (UTC)
  • If the individual's gender was never identified, then all gender-specific pronouns should be removed.
    • Done. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 07:59, December 20, 2019 (UTC)
      • You still refer to the character as a "he" in the "Equipment" section and the Bts. You also refer to Bbbl as a "he," whose gender wasn't identified either. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 10:30, December 24, 2019 (UTC)
  • This sentence does not work grammar-wise. This sounds like Vader deflected the Mustafarians themselves. The Mustafarians then shot at Vader, but he used his lightsaber to deflect them
  • Does the comic explicitly say that it was the Mustafarians' traditional clothing? If not, then a more specific source is needed. Following the tradition of Mustafarians, Rrrn wore armor and a breath mask QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 07:28, December 20, 2019 (UTC)
  • Referring to a person of unknown gender with the plural pronoun is acceptable in everyday speech, but should be avoided in encyclopedic writing. Bbbl then spotted a dark figure through their binoculars
  • Same sentence. Are those electrobinoculars or macrobinoculars? Or are they just regular binoculars? If it's the latter, then a canon version of the article needs to be created. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 10:30, December 24, 2019 (UTC)
    • (For both of these objections) I've changed the sentence so that the pronoun for Bbbl specifically is not needed. The binoculars is therefore not mentioned. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 10:46, December 24, 2019 (UTC)
Lewis
  • Now there is a date established for when the Fortress was built and the final arc, I think you should include it --Lewisr (talk) 03:03, December 23, 2019 (UTC)
    • Done. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 07:10, December 23, 2019 (UTC)
      • I would remove the rogue Inquisitor chase mention and replace it with the 12 BBY mention, since where you put it seems kind of random. Also, as the book uses Before Starkiller Incident (BSI) you'll need to put a note to how you get 12 BBY --Lewisr (talk) 14:53, December 23, 2019 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • I'm rather confused about the Biography quote. After looking at the comic myself, is Rrrn not saying both of those lines? The way you have the quote formatted suggests it's two different characters.
    • It was done like that when Brules expanded the article before I worked on it. I assumed it was to represent the time between the two lines. I've fixed it now. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 08:08, December 30, 2019 (UTC)
  • This is kind of minor, but I feel like you should use issue 24 to source his name upon first mention in the Bio.
  • The date ref is definitely on the right track, but I think it needs a little bit more to clearly state what you're assuming the reader understands. Namely, that the confrontation between Vader and the Mustafarians happens in whatever comic, which shows that Fortress Vader was already constructed.
  • Unless I've missed it, where in the comic is the term "clanholds" used? Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 23:42, December 29, 2019 (UTC)
Imp
  • I believe you should mention the comic issue's colorist, as well. Imperators II(Talk) 21:11, January 10, 2020 (UTC)
  • Technically, the fact that Kkkt was successful in his efforts to unite the clans is intro-exclusive. Imperators II(Talk) 21:11, January 10, 2020 (UTC)
  • Please create a more specific category for Southern Mustafarians. (I'm assuming there's more than one known.) Imperators II(Talk) 21:11, January 10, 2020 (UTC)
  • Is there an article for the skirmish between Vader and Rrrn's party? What about the larger conflict between the Mustafarians and Vader's forces? If not, do you judge that article for one or both of them should be created? Imperators II(Talk) 21:11, January 10, 2020 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 10:00, January 11, 2020 (UTC)