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Ringo

(4 ACs/1 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. Legoclones (Communication Systems) 22:18, November 19, 2011 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir 07:11, December 15, 2011 (UTC)
  3. ACvote CC7567 (talk) 16:02, December 16, 2011 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 21:48, December 17, 2011 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 18:03, December 18, 2011 (UTC)

Object

Ecks Dee
  • There's a mistake related to quotation marks in the Bts. You should know better than this by now. 1358 (Talk) 11:34, November 18, 2011 (UTC)
    • Oh yes. Clone Commander Lee Talk 11:42, November 18, 2011 (UTC)
      • Note, I said the Bts. :P Good catch on the quote, though. 1358 (Talk) 11:44, November 18, 2011 (UTC)
        • Just typical. If I want to fix an error, I fix another not noticed and don't realize the other error. Clone Commander Lee Talk 11:48, November 18, 2011 (UTC)
          • You caught yet another error I wasn't referring to. :P I fixed it. 1358 (Talk) 11:55, November 18, 2011 (UTC)
            • Does it really belong behind the comma? Strange and thanks. Time for a full review? Clone Commander Lee Talk 11:58, November 18, 2011 (UTC)
              • Yes, as per WP:MOS#Quotation: "Per standards of American English, double quotation marks (" ") should be used and the period (full stop), comma, question and exclamation marks should be within the quotation." 1358 (Talk) 12:15, November 18, 2011 (UTC)
  • I feel this could be worded better: "Around 21 BBY, Ringo served in the 501st Legion during the invasion of the planet Umbara." Two time indicators ("around 21 BBY", "during the invasion") makes this sound awkward. Maybe you could say something like "Ringo served in the 501st Legion during the invasion of the planet Umbara around 21 BBY."
  • "Making their way to the Umbaran capital city, Ringo and the 501st Legion used a mined road. Ringo, together with fellow trooper Oz, stepped on a mine and was killed in the following explosion." This also could use rewording. Maybe the sentences could be merged somehow.
  • "After finding the road to the city…" Was there only one road to the city? I haven't seen the episode... yet.
  • That sentence, "After finding the road to the city, Ringo and his comrades were ordered to take that way." also sounds awkward and could be worded better. Especially the second clause 1358 (Talk) 20:24, November 20, 2011 (UTC)
    • Please try it now. Clone Commander Lee Talk 14:23, November 21, 2011 (UTC)
      • "After finding the main road to the city, Ringo and his comrades were ordered to proceed on the road, as it was the fastest way to the capital." still sounds clunky and could be worded better. See what you can do about it.
        • Adressed. Clone Commander Lee Talk 15:42, December 2, 2011 (UTC)7
          • Please double check what you added. Also, who found the road? 1358 (Talk) 15:56, December 2, 2011 (UTC)
            • Please try it now. Clone Commander Lee Talk 16:13, December 2, 2011 (UTC)
              • Reworded that a bit. Just to make sure, is the "a main road" correct, or should it be "the main road"? I think we touched this subject in an earlier objection, wherein you said there was only one road. 1358 (Talk) 17:08, December 2, 2011 (UTC)
  • Please vary your word choice in the intro. "Served" is used twice in close succession. 1358 (Talk) 15:39, December 2, 2011 (UTC)
  • I made a small tweak in the intro. See if it's okay. 1358 (Talk) 15:56, December 2, 2011 (UTC)
  • One final objection: Can we actually assume Ringo participated in the initial skirmish for the landing zone? I haven't got around to watching the episode yet. 1358 (Talk) 17:08, December 2, 2011 (UTC)
    • Yes, because the clones did not recieve any reinforcements since them. Clone Commander Lee Talk 18:12, December 2, 2011 (UTC)
  • I'll take another look soon. 1358 (Talk) 19:53, December 13, 2011 (UTC)
Attack of the Clone
  • The article really would benefit from the addition of an image. I would suggest the one of the trooper checking his corpse, unless it's absolutely too poor quality, in which case another image from the episode should suffice. Please find one. CC7567 (talk) 03:05, December 16, 2011 (UTC)
    • The picture with the trooper checking him would have a bad quality. I placed a "general" picture and the article and send JMAS a request to upload a picture from the Dutch wikia which shows his dead body. Clone Commander Lee Talk 12:57, December 16, 2011 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 18:03, December 18, 2011 (UTC)