Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Rilo Tang (second nomination)

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Rilo Tang

  • Nominated by: OtterSurf (talk) 17:57, July 1, 2019 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Let's do this!

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Fan26 (Talk) 16:38, July 9, 2019 (UTC)
  2. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 23:21, August 3, 2019 (UTC)
  3. С уважением, Starit (обс) 17:55, August 16, 2019 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 18:09, August 16, 2019 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 18:35, August 16, 2019 (UTC)
  6. ACvote TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 19:14, August 16, 2019 (UTC)

Object

Imp
  • "Human" should be consistently de-capitalized in Canon articles.
  • Any mention in the audiobook? Imperators II(Talk) 18:07, July 1, 2019 (UTC)
    • Yep. I'll add it to Appearances. OtterSurf (talk) 18:42, July 1, 2019 (UTC)
  • The date ref doesn't support what it's used to source. The ref note doesn't even mention 5 ABY. Please revise. Imperators II(Talk) 14:44, July 15, 2019 (UTC)
Fan
  • In the first sentence of the bio you need to switch the positioning of human and male. Fan26 (Talk) 18:42, July 1, 2019 (UTC)
  • I think in the first sentence of the Personality and Traits section you should specify it as being according to Sijnir, as that's Rath Velus' personal opinion. Fan26 (Talk) 18:42, July 1, 2019 (UTC)
  • You need to link to "Private" in the Bio. Fan26 (Talk) 18:52, July 1, 2019 (UTC)
  • I think you should mention in the bio that Rath Velus later told the story of Tang during his time on Akiva. Fan26 (Talk) 19:17, July 1, 2019 (UTC)
    • Added. OtterSurf (talk) 19:33, July 1, 2019 (UTC)
      • The events of the first Aftermath can be dated to 4 ABY like this. Fan26 (Talk) 20:12, July 1, 2019 (UTC)
      • I'd like to see the specific context, not just that he told Norra the story. Fan26 (Talk) 20:12, July 1, 2019 (UTC)
        • Done. OtterSurf (talk) 20:26, July 1, 2019 (UTC)
          • What was the specific situation? Why was he telling the story to her? Fan26 (Talk) 20:30, July 1, 2019 (UTC)
            • Norra and he are talking about his role as an interrogator; it springs from a discussion about betraying the Empire. I've clarified it as best I can. OtterSurf (talk) 20:49, July 1, 2019 (UTC)
              • That works. Thank you. Fan26 (Talk) 23:43, July 1, 2019 (UTC)
  • There's actually an article for Ring as well. Fan26 (Talk) 23:46, July 1, 2019 (UTC)
Spooky
  • Akiva needs context.
  • For the 4 ABY date in the bio's last paragraph - we don't know how many months other than "several" that Aftermath takes place in. Thus, I don't think it should directly say "In 4 ABY" but should rather be something like "months after the Battle of Endor in 4 ABY" or "some point between 4 ABY and 5 ABY". —spookywillowwtalk
Anil
  • You should avoid breaking up compound subjects into multiple links (i.e. just link as [[Battle of Endor]] instead of [[Battle of Endor|battle]] of [[Endor]]). Please take a look at the rest of the article, and change similar links accordingly.
  • Isn't the information about Tang from the novel enough to create a proper Skills and abilities section? TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 01:43, July 3, 2019 (UTC)
  • I'd suggest lowercasing "rebel," which is how Canon has standardized that term, as opposed to Legends, which always capitalized it. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 21:41, July 3, 2019 (UTC)
  • (Reviewing note) Please be careful when formatting a quote. I've fixed them for you, but keep this in mind in the future. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 22:15, July 3, 2019 (UTC)
  • The article is full of clauses like "it was rumored." You should specify by whom it was rumored, or Rilo Tang was blah-blah according to whom. Please revise. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 01:21, July 4, 2019 (UTC)
    • Done. OtterSurf (talk) 08:36, July 4, 2019 (UTC)
      • There are still multiple such clauses in the article. "Tang apparently ended up working trash compactors," "it was rumored that his parents sent him to the Imperial academies," etc. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 14:51, July 4, 2019 (UTC)
  • Given the context of the book, and other canon materials that use the term, I'd say gunnery officer probably needs its own article. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 01:02, July 14, 2019 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • The Biography says that Rath Velus suspected that Tang's parents sent him to the academies to reform him, while the P/T states that his parents were said to have done this. Obviously, these aren't the same. Which is correct? Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 17:50, August 16, 2019 (UTC)
    • The first one. OtterSurf (talk) 18:00, August 16, 2019 (UTC)
      • The Bio also says his parents sent him to the academies, while the P/T says the Imperial Academy. Which is correct? For that matter, does the source ever say he went to the academies? Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 18:03, August 16, 2019 (UTC)
        • "Academies" is given as plural. I'll correct that. OtterSurf (talk) 18:05, August 16, 2019 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 19:20, August 16, 2019 (UTC)