Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/PM-6986

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PM-6986

• Nominated by: Erebus Chronus ^(Talk) 21:53, 18 July 2021 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: The other planetoid in the Anaxes asteroid belt

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Support

1. UberSoldat93 (talk) 11:17, 5 August 2021 (UTC)
2. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 11:31, 5 August 2021 (UTC)
3. Imperators II^(Talk) 21:28, 5 August 2021 (UTC)
4. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 01:08, 6 August 2021 (UTC)
5. Tommy-Macaroni 09:33, 6 August 2021 (UTC)

Object

Floyd

• For as short an article as this is, I think the intro could be condensed a little bit.
  • Is that good?
• In the History section, you should establish more at the outset that the planetoid was a Separatist stronghold. When you start mentioning Admiral Trench and his attacks, it's not immediately clear whose side he's on. IFYLOFD ^(Talk) 23:51, 18 July 2021 (UTC)
  • Is that fine, or would you like me to move the bit about it serving as the place of the stronghold during the war to the first paragraph? Erebus Chronus ^(Talk) 03:29, 19 July 2021 (UTC)
    • I think what you have now is fine with me. IFYLOFD ^(Talk) 23:13, 19 July 2021 (UTC)

UberSoldat

• Refs 2 and 3 needs to be specify what location is being used as the basis for PM-6986 being in the Azure system and having one sun, respectively. See Rafa XI to understand what I'm looking for.
  • How is that?
• Body could use an image of Anaxes. UberSoldat93 (talk) 12:54, 19 July 2021 (UTC)
  • Added. Erebus Chronus ^(Talk) 14:03, 19 July 2021 (UTC)

LucaRoR

• I think that you could add some content for the Clone Wars, maybe just saying something like: "a war between the Galactic Republic and the CIS". LucaRoR (Talk) 16:25, 19 July 2021 (UTC)
  • Done. Erebus Chronus ^(Talk) 19:39, 19 July 2021 (UTC)

BE-1234

• "which resulted in the creation of an asteroid belt that housed the planetoid PM-6986 and thousands of others." Thousands of other planetoids? Asteroids? Please specify. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 19:08, 31 July 2021 (UTC)
  • Consists of both. Fixed. Erebus Chronus ^(Talk) 19:15, 31 July 2021 (UTC)

Imp

• Building on Floyd's objection above, I still feel like the intro (two paragraphs) is longer than it should be with respect to the body (four paragraphs). There's quite a lot of detail in intro that should only really be in the body, like most of the astrographical stuff, and stuff that could and should be condensed and/or worded more succinctly, like context for Anaxes' destruction and JF-86's activities on PM-6986. Imperators II^(Talk) 20:30, 5 August 2021 (UTC)
  • Is that a little more condensed? Erebus Chronus ^(Talk) 20:51, 5 August 2021 (UTC)
    • Helped you get it to an even better place. Imperators II^(Talk) 21:28, 5 August 2021 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 09:33, 6 August 2021 (UTC)