Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Ord Pardron sector defense outpost

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Ord Pardron sector defense outpost

• Nominated by: Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 14:03, December 18, 2009 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Thrawny goodness.

(5 ACs/2 Users/7 Total)

Support

1. Very good. IFYLOFD ^{(You will pay the price for your lack of vision!)} 21:56, December 18, 2009 (UTC)
2. Well done. Grand Moff Tranner ^(Comlink) 20:40, December 20, 2009 (UTC)
3. Jonjedigrandmaster ^{(Jedi Beacon)} 22:38, December 22, 2009 (UTC)
4. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is the truth)} 10:43, December 23, 2009 (UTC)
5. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 18:46, December 23, 2009 (UTC)
6. LtNOWIS 20:41, December 23, 2009 (UTC)
7. CC7567 ^(talk) 20:40, December 24, 2009 (UTC)

Object

1. From the Chron-O-John of Green Tentacle:
   • You appear to give two different dates for the Empire abandoning it. Intro and description say 0 BBY, history says 1 BBY.
     • Changed to 1 BBY. Leftover from an earlier revision that I mixed dates up in. Nice catch.
   • "the Ukio system—a major agricultural world in the Abrion sector" A system can't be a world. Can you rephrase that? Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 14:49, December 23, 2009 (UTC)
     • Changed to the "planet Ukio". - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 18:03, December 23, 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 20:40, December 24, 2009 (UTC)

• Could you cut down the intro a bit? It's quite long if you compare it to the body. --Xd1358 ^Talk 08:25, December 19, 2009 (UTC)
  • I tried cutting it down, but I believe that removing anything would cause the intro to lose cohesion, which in turn may lead to further objections down the line. I agree that it is a little large, but its not fluff; if you think you can spot a line or two that can be trimmed out without harming the intro, let me know. - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 18:03, December 23, 2009 (UTC)