- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Norgor
- Nominated by: IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 02:29, September 4, 2010 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Great name.
(5 ACs/1 Users/6 Total)
Support
Chack Jadson (Talk) 19:02, September 13, 2010 (UTC)- Grand Moff Tranner
(Comlink) 19:51, September 14, 2010 (UTC) 
—Tommy 9281 02:14, September 15, 2010 (UTC)- -- 1358 (Talk) 13:29, September 15, 2010 (UTC)
- OLIOSTER (talk) 13:34, September 15, 2010 (UTC)
- --Eyrezer 13:42, September 15, 2010 (UTC)
Object
"I'm not a gentle man, I'm a method man…"
Why are Aleema and Satal shown as Norgor's masters in the infobox?- Well, Norgor is seen obeying both Aleema and Satal; also, Aleema refers to him as Satal's "slave", hence, master. —Unsigned comment by Ifindyourlackoffaithdisturbing (talk • contribs)
The very first sentence of the intro contradicts that line of thought, as you refer to him as a "henchman." Also, we don't count Watto as one of Anakin's masters, do we?- Well, I guess you got me there. Removed from the infobox.
- Well, Norgor is seen obeying both Aleema and Satal; also, Aleema refers to him as Satal's "slave", hence, master. —Unsigned comment by Ifindyourlackoffaithdisturbing (talk • contribs)
At a cursory glance, the prose is a tad choppy and could benefit from a thorough copy edit.- Hopefully addressed. —Unsigned comment by Ifindyourlackoffaithdisturbing (talk • contribs)
- More to soon follow.—Tommy 9281 02:46, September 4, 2010 (UTC)
Linking issues throughout.- Addressed.
You say that Norgor and Aleema were forced to bring Ulic to the bedroom. Forced by whom?- I worded that poorly; addressed.
"Later, after Satal found a transmission to some fellow Jedi professing he was there to break the Krath's power, the Krath leader ordered Norgor to assassinate the Jedi Knight." The first part of this sentence makes it sound as though Satal created the transmission he found. As a result, the second part of the sentence makes it seem like the Krath leader and the Jedi Knight are one in the same.- Addressed.
"However, Norgor was cut down by Qel-Droma's lightsaber." This makes it sound like Qel-Droma's lightsaber cut Norgor down by itself.- Addressed.
"Norgor was a top henchman of Satal and Aleema Keto…" Does the source specificially identify him as a "top" henchman?- No, but CSWE does. Addressed.
"Krath headquarters, the Iron Citadel. Satal was mistrustful of Qel-Droma, who claimed he wanted to join the Krath, and injected him with a Sith poison despite Aleema's objections. The poison sapped the strength and consciousness out of Qel-Droma, nearly killing him…" The poison didn't sap his strength, nor did it take his consdciousness.- Actually, it kinda does. Look at the comic; Ulic is in a stupor, then he wakes up and goes on a little mini-rampage. The next panel shows Ulic unconscious on the floor, with the caption "But the poison acts quickly!" From that, it seems like the poison did indeed do the damage.
- Overall, the writing of this article is not the best, and could have benefited from a bit more tlc prior to its nomination. I strongly suggest you heed the advice you've been given in the past and solicit second and third eyes to review your work before you decide to submit it for review.—Tommy 9281 21:06, September 14, 2010 (UTC)
- I apologize; I will be sure to do that in the future. And as always, thanks for the review. IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 00:39, September 15, 2010 (UTC)
- No worries, friend, it happens to the best of us.—Tommy 9281 01:06, September 15, 2010 (UTC)
- I apologize; I will be sure to do that in the future. And as always, thanks for the review. IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 00:39, September 15, 2010 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 13:42, September 15, 2010 (UTC)