Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Milosh Muhrlein

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Milosh Muhrlein

  • Nominated by: Ayrehead02 (talk) 21:50, February 21, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Generic corrupt Imperial

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 02:25, February 22, 2014 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 22:12, March 16, 2014 (UTC)
  3. Clone Commander Lee Talk 15:36, March 20, 2014 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 19:38, March 27, 2014 (UTC)
  5. Thunderforge (talk) 04:33, March 31, 2014 (UTC)
  6. ACvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 02:51, April 2, 2014 (UTC)

Object

Exiled Jedi
  • "Muhrlein's shady dealings were eventually discovered by Imperial Intelligence agent Jahan Cross, who Muhrlein unsuccessfully attempted to bribe and then kill, dying himself in the attempt." The end of this sentence seems kind of tacked on. Could you split it off into another sentence?
  • "Muhrlein's family and friends in Imperial Court caused a great fuss after his death" You should use something more formal than "great fuss" to describe their reaction.
    • Changed to complained. Does that work better? Ayrehead02 (talk) 18:17, February 26, 2014 (UTC)
  • You don't really need to restate that he was a male Human in the P&T.
  • "By the time of his death, he had become accustomed to a luxurious lifestyle and was willing to betray the Empire to maintain it, having the foresight to install various defenses in case he was discovered." The last part of this sentence doesn't really go well at the end here. Please add another sentence that links his defenses to his betrayal.
  • "and considered Agent Cross a fool for not taking them due to having principles." This kind of confusing since it could be taken to mean that Muhrlein was the one with principles. Please reword.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 16:09, February 26, 2014 (UTC)
  • Per the Image Policy page, the infobox image should have text in the speech bubble. Would it be possible to get a good profile picture without the speech bubble?--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 23:30, March 8, 2014 (UTC)
  • Just checking, but can the comic be used to source the 3 BBY date?--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 20:23, March 17, 2014 (UTC)
    • Yup although rereading it should be approx. Ayrehead02 (talk) 15:24, March 20, 2014 (UTC)
Cav
  • The second paragraph is very play by play - he did this, Cross did that, etc. You should look to condense the action down a little. - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 21:18, March 8, 2014 (UTC)
Lee's charge
  • Do we know if he wasn't already a colonel at the time the Republic was transferred to the Empire?
    • Nope thats a fair point. Changed. Ayrehead02 (talk) 15:24, March 20, 2014 (UTC)
  • Can we source Wayland as Mid Rim planet and the date of the events to the comic?
    • Yup theres a location and date box at the front of the first issue. Ayrehead02 (talk) 15:24, March 20, 2014 (UTC)
  • Red Eclipse links to an Old Republic starship. Is that correct?
    • Nope, should be Iron eclipse not sure how I put red :S Ayrehead02 (talk) 15:24, March 20, 2014 (UTC)
  • Could mention who illustrated him in the comic?
  • Good stuff. Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:47, March 20, 2014 (UTC)
Cadeth
  • You list him in the Republic Army officer category, but there's no mention of the army in the article. How exactly was he a Republic officer? Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 22:06, March 21, 2014 (UTC)
  • Does the comic specify that Wayland's in the Mid Rim?
  • The body does not specify that Muhrlein was selling the station's tech.
  • Skin color in the infobox? Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 17:21, March 26, 2014 (UTC)
El Jefe

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