Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Mak Luunim (second nomination)

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Mak Luunim

  • Nominated by: ToRsO bOy (talk) 07:54, 29 July 2021 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:
  • WookieeProject (optional): WP:NOVELS

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Support

  1. ACvote Ayrehead02 (talk) 13:51, 14 August 2021 (UTC)
  2. Looks good to me. -- YakovChaimTzvi ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol (talk) 21:25, 27 August 2021 (UTC)
  3. Dentface (talk) 00:20, 29 August 2021 (UTC)
  4. ACvote 1358 (Talk) 14:20, 11 September 2021 (UTC)
  5. ACvote UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 15:11, 11 September 2021 (UTC)

Object

UberSoldat
  • Please fill in the redlink and fix the redirect and duplicate link. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 08:10, 29 July 2021 (UTC)
    • Redlink done. Only duplicate link I found is for the Death Star and it's been removed. Not sure what you mean by the redirect. ToRsO bOy (talk) 09:33, 29 July 2021 (UTC)
    • Fixed the redirect. ToRsO bOy (talk) 10:15, 29 July 2021 (UTC)
    • I'd recommend turning on the preferences setting to highlight redirects in orange if you haven't already. Ayrehead02 (talk) 08:15, 29 July 2021 (UTC)
      • Will check this out. ToRsO bOy (talk) 09:33, 29 July 2021 (UTC)
      • Oh that is a nifty trick. Thanks! ToRsO bOy (talk) 10:15, 29 July 2021 (UTC)
  • "They later learned from a local bartender that Luunim was in debt to a large number of individuals" This is the first time you mention this information aside from the lead quote, in the article that's supposed to be about Luunim. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 10:08, 8 September 2021 (UTC)
    • Sorry, do you mean I should add this bit of information on the intro? ToRsO bOy (talk) 14:19, 11 September 2021 (UTC)
      • To clarify, it should be introduced earlier in the body when discussing what Luunim was up to. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 14:21, 11 September 2021 (UTC)
        • Got it. I've inserted it in the first part of the bio. ToRsO bOy (talk) 15:05, 11 September 2021 (UTC)
Ayrehead
  • Quotes don't require linking. Ayrehead02 (talk) 08:15, 29 July 2021 (UTC)
  • The whole first sentence of the bio is currently referenced with the data ref instead of Rebel Force: Target. Ayrehead02 (talk) 08:15, 29 July 2021 (UTC)
  • Since the bio is four paragraphs long it can be subsections, allowing for another quote and probably another image. Ayrehead02 (talk) 08:15, 29 July 2021 (UTC)
    • Subsections added. Thinking if we can skip the 2nd image, given that it's a large group of Rebels looking for him? ToRsO bOy (talk) 09:33, 29 July 2021 (UTC)
      • I'd move the first image higher into the first subsection so that it doesn't overlap into the second. I think you could then add an image of Muunilinst to the second subsection. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:45, 31 July 2021 (UTC)
  • One of the quotes specifies that he hired Muunilist's finest artisans, which isn't stated in the body. Ayrehead02 (talk) 08:58, 2 August 2021 (UTC)
    • It's mentioned in the P&T, or does that not count in the body? ToRsO bOy (talk) 02:22, 4 August 2021 (UTC)
      • In both the bio and P&T you say he commissioned artisans, but you need to specify that he hired Muunilist's finest somewhere since that's more specific info that's missing from the article. Ayrehead02 (talk) 07:13, 4 August 2021 (UTC)
        • I get it now. Added the mention, used "greatest" instead of finest to set it apart from the quote. ToRsO bOy (talk) 09:08, 5 August 2021 (UTC)
Cade
  • Correct me if I'm wrong, but this article reads like Luunim died shortly before, or during, the events of the novel, and at very least it sounds like he died after the destruction of Alderaan, since Dodonna communicates with him in order to set up the meeting. Isn't that enough to say he died in 0 ABY?
    • I followed your reasoning and I suppose it does make sense. Alderaan's destruction was the catalyst for Dodonna to reach out to Luunim, so it's safe to assume he was still alive after the Battle of Yavin. Question though, do I remove the extra notes about it, or can I keep the and Luunim died prior to the events of the book.?
  • Personally, I'd use an image of the destruction of Alderaan, or Dodonna, instead of the Rebel logo. It seems more specific and relevant to the article. Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 20:37, 15 August 2021 (UTC)
    • Changed image to Dodonna. ToRsO bOy (talk) 04:04, 16 August 2021 (UTC)
Ecks Dee
  • The date ref needs to clarify that the events must occur in 0 ABY. Currently, it only says that events occurring after his death take place in 0 ABY per ERC, but that alone could mean the events take place before 0 ABY as well. Of course, we know that they take place in 0 ABY due to the Death Star, but the date ref needs to explain that. 1358 (Talk) 10:23, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
    • I had to reread this a couple of times before I understood it (I think). I edited the ref to say Luunim died within the year. Let me know if that's what you meant. Thanks! ToRsO bOy (talk) 14:20, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
      • Just made a minor rewording there, can you please make sure it's still accurate? 1358 (Talk) 21:45, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
        • Yes, it's still accurate. ToRsO bOy (talk) 14:19, 11 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments

Yakov
  • This would be good to include in WP:NOVELS -- YakovChaimTzvi ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol (talk) 21:25, 27 August 2021 (UTC)
    • I'm not certain on the rules and requirements on Wookieeprojects. If you think this can be included, then by all means. :) ToRsO bOy (talk) 14:22, 5 September 2021 (UTC)

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 15:11, 11 September 2021 (UTC)