Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Lin

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Lin

  • Nominated by: Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 21:51, September 21, 2012 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Incoming, Project Meteor!

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. It's great to see other people working on the Trooper class related-content. Winterz (talk) 23:09, September 21, 2012 (UTC)
  2. Fixed some grammar mistakes that could have been avoided, but otherwise well-written. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 16:40, September 30, 2012 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 11:18, October 9, 2012 (UTC)
  4. Is it just me or are all of the indivdual user TOR projects Republic side? Commander Code-8 To say hi, press 42 04:38, October 20, 2012 (UTC)
  5. ACvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 02:48, November 7, 2012 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Very Lin-teresting article. Menkooroo (talk) 23:37, November 12, 2012 (UTC)

Object

  • The first sentence of the intro seems really long-winded. Toss a comma or two in there or break the sentence up.
  • The first sentence of the second Bio paragraph also has this same problem.
  • "Around the year 3,643 BBY, Bellis was killed" By who?
  • Why was she so reluctant to give up the field box?
  • Nice job. IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 00:55, November 2, 2012 (UTC)
  • It took me a while to nail it down, too, but Wookieepedia:Manual_of_Style#Ranks_and_titles indicates that ranks should be capitalized when referring to the person rather than the title, using "He never liked telling jokes to the Admiral" as an example. So, any time this article says "the Sergeant," "Sergeant" should be capitalized. I fixed all instances in the intro; can you cover the rest of the article?
  • What's a field box? I can't really tell based on the information here. Is it unique enough to warrant its own article?
  • In the BTS: "The trooper could also have threatened Lin in order to obtain the field box..." Is this as opposed to something? That is, do you have to actually do anything to obtain it using the light side options? The article just says that Lin eventually shows you the field box, but I'm wondering if you actually have to do anything --- express condolences, convince her it's for the good of the Republic, etc, etc. If so, can you add it to the bio? And even if the alternative is just waiting, can you edit the BTS sentence I quoted to indicate what the alternative is to threatening? Menkooroo (talk) 06:54, November 10, 2012 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • I know post-approved objections suck, but I feel like this needs to be done.
  • First thing is the intro. The intro (208 words) is almost (47%) half as long as the Biography (442 words). That tells me, simply, that it's way too long. Try to go back over it and see where you can slim it down. Don't be afraid to cut out the fat. Remember, the intro is meant as a succinct summary. Leave unnecessary specific details for the article body.
  • Reference 4. Consensus track forums aren't reference material. Leave a manually-written reference note explaining why the article is presenting the information the way it is instead. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 02:38, November 19, 2012 (UTC)
  • One more, now that I notice it. There is no article currently under the title Lin. Unless there is another or multiple articles that would otherwise share the same title, using parentheses for an article title is unnecessary. Until another article exists that would also be titled "Lin," this article should be moved to that title.

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 17:17, November 19, 2012 (UTC)


  • It may not be as organized as Cade's Project Hero, but here is Project Meteor's beginning. (unless you count Jaynes)--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 21:51, September 21, 2012 (UTC)
  • I hereby dedicate this project to Cade Calrayn for all his hard work on Project Hero. Keep up the good work Cade!--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 21:51, September 21, 2012 (UTC)
    • Yes! Now, we need five other people! Cade Calrayn GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit 22:06, September 21, 2012 (UTC)
  • May I ask what this "Project Meteor" includes? If interested, you might wanna look at Talloran village article which already contains a lot of info, a GNOM shouldn't be hard. Winterz (talk) 23:09, September 21, 2012 (UTC)
    • Meteor is the Aegis callsign for the trooper. Cade Calrayn GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit 23:18, September 21, 2012 (UTC)
      • So does this mean that you'll be working on the Meteor too, @Exiledjedi? Winterz (talk) 18:26, September 23, 2012 (UTC)
        • Yep, just need to get some things organized first.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 20:21, September 23, 2012 (UTC)
          • Then I shall clear a path for you through the redlinks. Winterz (talk) 13:23, September 24, 2012 (UTC)