Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Kuna's Eye system/Legends

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Kuna's Eye system

• Nominated by: —TK-999 ^{(Rise of the Empire)} 12:42, June 29, 2011 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: As requested by Kilson and Imperators II.

(4 ACs/1 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. Kilson^{(Let's have a chat)} 20:33, July 4, 2011 (UTC)
2. Imperators II^(Talk) 20:35, July 4, 2011 (UTC)
3. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 02:03, July 9, 2011 (UTC)
4. Grand Moff Tranner ^(Comlink) 17:33, July 9, 2011 (UTC)
5. Menkooroo 02:14, July 11, 2011 (UTC)

Object

Kilson

• "The Kuna's Eye system was a star system in the thin disk, inside Outer Rim Territories' Zuma sector, within the Inner Zuma Region and the Moddell subsector, less than 1,000 light-years above the galactic plane." The phrasing of the this sentence is awkward. Maybe you should split this into two sentences to make it sounds better.
  • Sliced.—TK-999 ^{(Rise of the Empire)} 20:07, June 29, 2011 (UTC)
• "It contained the young blue giant Kuna's Eye and a protoplanetary disk, which contained minerals, metals and alloys." The repetition of "contained" is odd, change one of them to a synonym.
  • Rephrased.—TK-999 ^{(Rise of the Empire)} 20:07, June 29, 2011 (UTC)
• I just realized something. In the Description, "The system's primary star was Kuna's Eye, a blue giant which, along with the other Kuna worlds, formed part of the Kuna constellation visible from the planet Maya Kovel." Kuna's Eye is a star, yet you say it and the other Kuna worlds made up the constellation. Isn't it supposed to be, "it and the other Kuna stars"?
  • This objection was brought up by Bob during the star's nomination. Oddly, The Essential Atlas states on p. 192 that the Kuna worlds from the constellation.—TK-999 ^{(Rise of the Empire)} 20:07, June 29, 2011 (UTC)
• Doesn't the rest of the second paragraph of the Description section belong in the History section?
  • Moved.—TK-999 ^{(Rise of the Empire)} 20:07, June 29, 2011 (UTC)
• Otherwise, well done. Kilson^{(Let's have a chat)} 19:29, June 29, 2011 (UTC)
  • Thanks for the review!—TK-999 ^{(Rise of the Empire)} 20:07, June 29, 2011 (UTC)

Imperators II

• Second paragraph of the Description section is unsourced. Imperators II^(Talk) 21:28, June 29, 2011 (UTC)
  • Oops… left over from paragraph moving :P.—TK-999 ^{(Rise of the Empire)} 09:37, June 30, 2011 (UTC)

Ecks Dee

• "The system is also mentioned in[2][3] the Del Rey reference book[1] The Essential Atlas,[2][3] written by Fry and Wallace and released on August 18, 2009.[1]" Something relatively minor: I think the text here could be better ordered to reduce the amount of references. Something like "The system is also mentioned in The Essential Atlas,[2][3] a Del Rey reference book written by Fry and Wallace and released on August 18, 2009.[1]" 1358 ^(Talk) 22:48, June 30, 2011 (UTC)
  • Thanks for pointing this out. Done.—TK-999 ^{(Rise of the Empire)} 08:13, July 1, 2011 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 02:17, July 11, 2011 (UTC)