Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Jiroch-Kalok

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Jiroch-Kalok

• Nominated by: UberSoldat93 (talk) 15:08, 10 October 2022 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Presenting, a near-identical copy of Jiroch-Saloch. Is it cheating? Tell that to the writers who always mentioned Saloch and Kalok together.
• WookieeProject (optional): WP:AST

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Support

1. Immi Thrax (she/her) (talk) 12:04, 21 October 2022 (UTC)
2. Fan26 (Talk) 17:44, 26 October 2022 (UTC)
3. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 17:01, 27 October 2022 (UTC)
4. Imperators II^(Talk) 12:39, 30 November 2022 (UTC)
5. MasterFred(talk) (he/him) 06:57, 1 December 2022 (UTC)

Object

Fan

• " Following the massacre, .[3]" There's an orphaned fragment at the end of the history section. Fan26 (Talk) 18:01, 15 October 2022 (UTC)
  • No idea what happened there, thanks. UberSoldat93 (talk) 18:48, 15 October 2022 (UTC)

Immi Thrax

• After rereading the first paragraph of the history section a few times, I think a little rearranging for chronology and clarity would help. Right now, the Tunroth's homeworld isn't identified until after they're said to have left it and colonized other planets in the Jiroch system. I think the order of that should be swapped: first establish their homeworld and that it's in the Jiroch system, then they became part of the Galactic Republic, then they colonized other planets in the system. Immi Thrax (she/her) (talk) 16:54, 16 October 2022 (UTC)
  • Rearranged, although I should point out that Imp and the other reviewers did not object to the previous order of information on Jiroch-Saloch. If you want, I can reflect the changes on that article as well. UberSoldat93 (talk) 07:23, 21 October 2022 (UTC)
    • At your discretion! Immi Thrax (she/her) (talk) 12:03, 21 October 2022 (UTC)
• In the history section, a little bit of context for Duros, such as that they're a species. (If the Gamer article offers any details of how they influenced the architecture, please include those--but I know these articles sometimes just say "they did this" without explaining how!) Immi Thrax (she/her) (talk) 16:54, 16 October 2022 (UTC)
  • Context added. No elaboration from Gamer I'm afraid, otherwise it would've been included. UberSoldat93 (talk) 07:23, 21 October 2022 (UTC)
    • Dangit, Gamer, give us the deets! Immi Thrax (she/her) (talk) 12:03, 21 October 2022 (UTC)
• "The New Republic pilot Xarcce Huwla hailed from Jiroch-Saloch. [...] viewed by the New Republic's Rogue Squadron, Wedge Antilles, at the time of her recruitment into the unit." Please revise the order to establish that Huwla is a woman who was recruited to Rogue Squadron and that Antilles viewed her profile at that time; right now, the grammar could be mistaken Wedge Antilles being a woman who was recruited into the unit ;) Immi Thrax (she/her) (talk) 16:54, 16 October 2022 (UTC)
  • Guess who just realized she was viewing the wrong Jiroch- with that objection? OOPS. But hey if you want to revise the other article... Immi Thrax (she/her) (talk) 17:07, 16 October 2022 (UTC)
    • Revised, thanks. UberSoldat93 (talk) 07:23, 21 October 2022 (UTC)
      • You're welcome! Checked it and that's much better :) Immi Thrax (she/her) (talk) 12:03, 21 October 2022 (UTC)
• Please include the authors of The Essential Atlas. Immi Thrax (she/her) (talk) 16:54, 16 October 2022 (UTC)
  • For grid coordinates, we don't need to. UberSoldat93 (talk) 07:23, 21 October 2022 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 06:57, 1 December 2022 (UTC)