Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Frontier Justice

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Contents

  • 1 Frontier Justice
    • 1.1 (3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)
      • 1.1.1 Support
      • 1.1.2 Object
        • 1.1.2.1 Ecks Dee
        • 1.1.2.2 Cav
        • 1.1.2.3 Cadeth
      • 1.1.3 Comments

Frontier Justice

  • Nominated by: DarthRevan1173 Revan Headshot (Long live Lord Revan) 04:04, February 22, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:For Project Novels

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. ACvote Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 09:15, March 15, 2013 (UTC)
  2. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 19:09, March 15, 2013 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Cade Calrayn GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit 01:11, March 16, 2013 (UTC)
  4. Supreme Emperor (talk) 04:34, March 16, 2013 (UTC)
  5. ACvote 1358 (Talk) 21:23, March 21, 2013 (UTC)

Object

  • Establish that it was a ship in the article body. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 23:33, February 22, 2013 (UTC)
    • I threw it in under the role section. Do I need to add it to history also? DarthRevan1173 Revan Headshot (Long live Lord Revan) 02:34, February 23, 2013 (UTC)
      • I think it's all good. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 04:43, February 23, 2013 (UTC)
        • Cool. DarthRevan1173 Revan Headshot (Long live Lord Revan) 04:48, February 23, 2013 (UTC)
          • Will eventually give this a more full review. Also have to familiarize myself with other quality articles of ships. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 04:50, February 23, 2013 (UTC)
  • Really necessary to write the details of what Malcom and the Jedi Knight did on the ship in the intro? This article is about the Frontier Justice, not the article for Jace Malcom's trip on the Frontier Justice. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 15:08, March 15, 2013 (UTC)
    • Removed some of it. Keeping the part about the blockades since it was requested by XD. DarthRevan1173 Revan Headshot (Long live Lord Revan) 18:21, March 15, 2013 (UTC)
Ecks Dee
  • While it certainly is a short article, I think you could add just a little bit more to the intro, specifically something about it fighting through blockades and whatnot.
    • Taken care of.
      • That's a bit longer than I wanted. It was one sentence before my objections; two lines should be plenty for an article of this length.
        • Fixed.
  • Can we please reword the end of the first sentence in the body? It's a bit too familiar to that of the introduction, to be honest.
    • Specified that he was being recalled to be Supreme Commander. How's that look.
      • I'm talking about the fact that the three sentences beginning the intro, the history, and the C&C sections, respectively, are very similar. They all make use of the same pattern and partially identical wording. 1358 (Talk) 17:55, March 6, 2013 (UTC)
        • Should be fixed.
  • Same goes for the wording in the Commanders and Crew section. 1358 (Talk) 23:29, March 1, 2013 (UTC)
    • Taken care of. DarthRevan1173 Revan Headshot (Long live Lord Revan) 08:36, March 2, 2013 (UTC)
      • See above. 1358 (Talk) 17:55, March 6, 2013 (UTC)
        • Should be fixed. DarthRevan1173 Revan Headshot (Long live Lord Revan) 23:46, March 6, 2013 (UTC)
Cav
  • A description section is needed. There is at least a cockpit and personal guest quarters, as well as the fact it has a hyperdrive to add.
    • Didn't originally think that was enough to warrant a description section, however added. May need re-wording however, let me know if it does.
  • You mention damage to the engineering console, but no mention is made of it sustaining damage before this. - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 09:41, March 5, 2013 (UTC)
    • It's never explained how it was damaged, nor whether it was already damaged when he received the ship or from fighting through the half dozen blockades. Added a line it was damaged at some point. DarthRevan1173 Revan Headshot (Long live Lord Revan) 15:27, March 5, 2013 (UTC)
Cadeth
  • The first intro sentence is rather long; you should split it up, and you also need to give more context on the SGGW.
    • Broken up and added context.
  • The Second Great Galactic War is conjectural, you can't directly link it.
    • Pipelinked.
  • The second sentence of the intro should focus more on the ship itself; try "The Knight flew the Frontier Justice..."
    • Changed.
  • The History should also focus on the ship and not the pilot.
    • Re-worded. Removed a huge chunk that doesn't focus on the ship. Let me know how it looks.
  • I don't see the need for the Commanders and crew section, it's just a repeat of the rest of the bio, and it's not necessary in the Layout Guide. Cade Calrayn GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit 21:38, March 15, 2013 (UTC)
    • Removed. DarthRevan1173 Revan Headshot (Long live Lord Revan) 00:38, March 16, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 21:23, March 21, 2013 (UTC)