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Fondo
- Nominated by: VergenceScatter (talk) 16:31, 27 April 2021 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: CAN that went over the word limit
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Support
- Liverpool92
16:34, 27 April 2021 (UTC) - AmazinglyCool
(talk) 15:27, 9 May 2021 (UTC) 
Imperators II(Talk) 15:39, 1 June 2021 (UTC)
UberSoldat93 (talk) 16:06, 1 June 2021 (UTC)- MasterFred(talk) 20:17, 1 June 2021 (UTC)
Object
In Personality and traits there's an extra "]" next to Rodian--Liverpool92 16:33, 27 April 2021 (UTC)
Imp
Per my CAN objection, Fondo is only definitely present for the introductions between the parties (which you still haven't mentioned in the article) and the toasting. Fondo may or may not die during the toasting, so Fondo should not be automatically assumed to have been present during the Dance.Imperators II(Talk) 11:33, 12 May 2021 (UTC)- Removed the speculation. The introductions were already mentioned, in what is now the last line of the Biography section. VergenceScatter (talk) 22:44, 12 May 2021 (UTC)
- I see no reason why you should deviated from chronological order of events there. Imperators II(Talk) 09:50, 13 May 2021 (UTC)
- Done. VergenceScatter (talk) 21:58, 14 May 2021 (UTC)
- I'd like for you to go into more detail with this. Specifically, you should incorporate most of the second paragraph from the Wheeta Palace section, such as the location and the order of events (the PC group arrives last while the other two are already there). Same goes for the first three paragraphs of the Refreshments section, for example: the location, the number of drinks, and the fact that half of them (not just some of them) were poisoned. Imperators II(Talk) 10:15, 31 May 2021 (UTC)
- How's that? VergenceScatter (talk) 00:07, 1 June 2021 (UTC)
- I'd like for you to go into more detail with this. Specifically, you should incorporate most of the second paragraph from the Wheeta Palace section, such as the location and the order of events (the PC group arrives last while the other two are already there). Same goes for the first three paragraphs of the Refreshments section, for example: the location, the number of drinks, and the fact that half of them (not just some of them) were poisoned. Imperators II(Talk) 10:15, 31 May 2021 (UTC)
- Done. VergenceScatter (talk) 21:58, 14 May 2021 (UTC)
- I see no reason why you should deviated from chronological order of events there. Imperators II(Talk) 09:50, 13 May 2021 (UTC)
- Removed the speculation. The introductions were already mentioned, in what is now the last line of the Biography section. VergenceScatter (talk) 22:44, 12 May 2021 (UTC)
Also please more precise with the last sentence of the BTS. The source says that there is one massiff for every two characters present. So if there is an even number of other surviving characters, the survival of Fondo does not automatically lead to an increase in the number of the massiffs. Consider instead phrasing it along the lines of "the number of enemies depends on the number of the surviving characters" or even go fully explicit with what the source says.You're missing some equipment from the stat block.The fact that Kulda was based in Hutt Space is intro-exclusive.The body says the Granee Noopa was a deadly event, while the intro says it was only potentially deadly. Which one is it?Imperators II(Talk) 10:15, 31 May 2021 (UTC)- All addressed. VergenceScatter (talk) 00:07, 1 June 2021 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 20:17, 1 June 2021 (UTC)