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Duel at the Czerka mining facility

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. ACvote Assuming other objections are met. - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 09:47, March 10, 2014 (UTC)
  2. Clone Commander Lee Talk 16:03, March 11, 2014 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Reviewed on IRC. IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 04:27, March 18, 2014 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote JangFett (Talk) 00:18, March 27, 2014 (UTC)
  5. Thunderforge (talk) 04:42, March 31, 2014 (UTC)

Object

Lee's charge
  • Is there a reason why the location of the facility is not specified in the infobox?
    • Done.
  • Infobox: Maybe add something like "Kira Carsen's" past is revealed" to Outcome?
    • Done.
  • Intro: Why don't you mention the year 3643 BBY?
    • Done.
  • Intro: Is "Child" a proper abbreviation for Child of the Emperor? Otherwise it sounds a little bit confusing.
    • Yeah, it's used in-game.
  • Prelude: Maybe pipelink Ferav?
    • Done.
  • It may be that I did not understand it correctly, but was it stated that Valin personally posed as Hacklin? I'm not sure.
    • Yeah.
  • Is there something wrong with the "Duel" quote? The last line seems to be out of place.
    • Fixed.
  • Context for Kaedan please.
  • Good job. I remember this mission, it was the first time I had some trouble finishing it. Clone Commander Lee Talk 22:21, March 8, 2014 (UTC)
Jangeth
  • Intro- What kind of duel was it? If lightsaber duel, could you please link it? I am unfamiliar with the source material so I can't fix it myself so I'll leave it up to you.
    • Lightsaber. Linked.
  • Why do you need to give Carsen extended context in the first paragraph of the prelude? If you remove that entire paragraph, it would act as an actual prelude to the duel instead of a character biography. JangFett (Talk) 16:00, March 12, 2014 (UTC)
    • Because otherwise there's no reason for anyone to recognize her, and there's no reason given as to why the Emperor wants her or how she knows Valis. Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:41, March 12, 2014 (UTC)
      • However, look at the information regarding her birth. Do you really need to mention that? A lot of the information could be condensed. JangFett (Talk) 16:46, March 12, 2014 (UTC)
        • Cut the first sentence. Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:50, March 12, 2014 (UTC)
          • Still remains; that doesn't help the prelude section a whole lot. See what you could do to condense the character information. JangFett (Talk) 16:52, March 12, 2014 (UTC)
            • It's fairly relevant. It's treated as a big deal that she's from the Empire, not to mention the Imperial capital, and she's worked to keep it a secret. I've made that more clear in the article. Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 16:55, March 12, 2014 (UTC)
              • I'm not suggesting to remove it completely, but condense it. My point about removing the first paragraph before was to show you that it wouldn't read like a character biography anymore. JangFett (Talk) 16:59, March 12, 2014 (UTC)
                • I've removed a few more things, but that's really all I think is necessary. The rest is relevant. Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 23:37, March 12, 2014 (UTC)
                  • Again, I'm not disputing its relevance. Want you should do is condense the first paragraph of the prelude. JangFett (Talk) 14:16, March 13, 2014 (UTC)
                    • And as I've said, there's really nothing more to condense. Why exactly is it a problem that the article details part of Carsen's history? It's important to the subject matter. Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 18:24, March 13, 2014 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 16:11, March 31, 2014 (UTC)