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Bruu Jun-Fan

  • Nominated by: —Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 02:20, March 26, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: So much for his combat abilities… For WP:TCW.

(4 ACs/1 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 05:31, March 27, 2013 (UTC)
  2. ACvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 01:19, March 30, 2013 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 20:21, April 16, 2013 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 15:04, April 23, 2013 (UTC)
  5. ACvote CC7567 (talk) 23:02, April 23, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Floyd
  • Intro: Context on the Battle of Naboo. When was this? Seeing the same issue in the bio.
  • Intro: Context on Yellowblade's Landing. Where/what. Same with Pleem's Nexus - I assume they're planets, but that much should be stated.
  • Linking as a whole leaves something to be desired here.
  • "Jun-Fan, Koon, and Jedi Master Ko Solok confronted Maul" Koon? Who's this? No link/previous mention.
  • Context on Ko Solok and Grohto in the bio.
  • Could we get an article for the specific cantina on Yellowblade's Landing?
  • Same with the base in the caves?
  • Aaaaaand same with the skirmish there.
  • "I feel the Force around me…taking me… This is one mystery I will explore first, Master." Couldn't his interest in this "mystery" go in the P&T?
  • You never actually say anywhere what psychometry is.
  • IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 01:10, March 29, 2013 (UTC)
    • All taken care of, I think. Regarding the article for the skirmish, it exists as "Skirmish on Yellowblade's Landing."—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 01:46, March 29, 2013 (UTC)
Cav
  • After Maul and Opress escaped when Kenobi and Jedi Knight Anakin Skywalker, - when they what?
  • Article for the Jedi task force?
  • You note he was skilled in unarmed combat, but don't specify if he carried a lightsaber or not. - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 10:16, April 12, 2013 (UTC)
    • All taken care of. The lightsaber is actually mentioned in P&T.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 18:13, April 13, 2013 (UTC)
Cadeth
  • Since the article's as short as it is, I'm not sure the section break in the biography is necessary. Especially since you're repeating the quote from the intro.
    • Omitted section breaks.
  • Maybe you could make it clear that the leg had spikes? Because right now it seems that he just died from a kick to the stomach.
    • Well, that is exactly how he died, a kick to the stomach.
      • Yeah, but a normal kick wouldn't kill someone—Maul's "feet" are spiked. Isn't it just like the way Opress killed Adi Gallia with his horns?
        • No, in the comic, there was no blood. It was quite a forceful kick there, and Maul did position the "foot" in such a way where the blow would be rather forceful, catapulting Jun-Fan back a distance.
  • Good work. Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 14:58, April 16, 2013 (UTC)
Attack of the Clone
  • Rather minor, but Opress wasn't a Dark Acolyte any longer at the time of The Sith Hunters; he left that position when he left Dooku previously in "Witches of the Mist." This should be adjusted in the intro.
  • Any more images that can be added?
    • And done. I am unsure how to omit the text in the images, though.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 00:11, April 22, 2013 (UTC)
      • I've taken care of it to save time. CC7567 (talk) 23:02, April 23, 2013 (UTC)
  • "Jun-Fan, Koon, and Solok followed Maul and Opress to Pleem's Nexus, and confronted the brothers at a castle as they were attempting to load treasure that they were planning to use to establish a criminal empire on their starship." I think this can be split up or reworded slightly, as it's a bit long-winded. Currently, it also suggests that the brothers were planning to establish their criminal empire literally on their starship, and while I know that's not the case, it can be made clearer that it's not by rewording this sentence.
  • "Bruu Jun-Fan was light-skinned with brown hair and eyes that kept himself in good physical condition." I'm not quite sure what you mean here, with what's keeping "himself in good physical condition." Do you mean he kept himself in good physical condition? Or that his eyes kept him in good physical condition? Either way, it's not quite clear.
  • I think it can be made slightly clearer (or directly stated) in the Bio that Tatsu and the other injured members of the task force didn't continue on with Jun-Fan and the others to Pleem's Nexus. CC7567 (talk) 18:32, April 20, 2013 (UTC)
    • All but the second objection taken care of. Regarding that one, I asked Ayrehead02, since he uploaded the infobox image.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 23:08, April 21, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 23:02, April 23, 2013 (UTC)


  • I'll see if I can get some images from somewhere. Might be like Anise I'Zak.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 04:52, March 26, 2013 (UTC)
  • Is the intro quote a mistake? Are you sure it wasn't "your evil is at an end?" Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 15:08, March 26, 2013 (UTC)
    • Now, that is freaking embarrassing, fixed.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 16:00, March 26, 2013 (UTC)