Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Barel Ovair (second nomination)

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Barel Ovair

  • Nominated by: Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 18:33, 11 August 2021 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Thought I'd get this old-school WP:TOR article back to status.
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Support

  1. Fan26 (Talk) 23:05, 1 September 2021 (UTC)
  2. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 06:53, 2 September 2021 (UTC)
  3. ACvote UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 17:01, 8 September 2021 (UTC)
  4. ACvote 1358 (Talk) 16:46, 10 September 2021 (UTC)
  5. ACvote OOM 224 21:40, 11 September 2021 (UTC)

Object

CC-8
  • In line with current standards you should have two subsections in the biography
  • Images can all be bigger
  • Is there really no quote that can go in the P&T?
  • From what I can tell the date is only given in relation to the Treaty of Coruscant, which I think needs to be articulated in a reference note. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 03:23, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
Fan
  • " While Gynt's borrowed dark side abilities were formidable, the undercover Sith defeated and killed Gynt" Nitpicking here, but it feels redundant to use Gynt's name twice in a single sentence. Fan26 (Talk) 20:39, 1 September 2021 (UTC)
  • While it probably can't fit in the relevant section given that there's an image there already, the picture of Ovair and his padawan fighting the Massassi doesn't seem to belong in the section about the duel that took place years following their Yavin expedition. Fan26 (Talk) 20:53, 1 September 2021 (UTC)
    • Changed to the duel image. Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 20:57, 1 September 2021 (UTC)
UberSoldat
  • Intro says Gynt was already a Padawan when Ovair took him in, but the body doesn't.
  • Duplicate ref in first Biography paragraph.
  • Much of the content in "Personality and traits" is very clearly biographical information that is not really suited for that section. The first sentence in particular also looks more suitable in "Powers and abilities." For example, "The role was one he inherited from his father and his grandfather." does not tell me anything about this character's "personality," and this isn't mentioned in the Biography when it should be; it's part of the character's history.
  • Please confirm that my copy-edit still maintains the accuracy of the content. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 10:47, 8 September 2021 (UTC)
OOM
  • I don't see why his visit to the Valley of the Dark Lords should be omitted from the Biography
  • Context for Yavin 4
  • "Ovair was under orders to eliminate any remnant of Sadow's power, which the Sith Emperor viewed as a potential threat to his planned invasion." — Some clarification needed here
    • Under whose orders—the Jedi Order or the Emperor?
    • Also, invasion of what? Since there's two Sith leaders mentioned here, I'd also specify that the Sith Emperor led the reconstituted Sith Empire
  • Similarly, I'd clarify that the Massassi warriors served Naga Sadow OOM 224 12:19, 11 September 2021 (UTC)
    • All done except for the last one, which I changed to just "Massassi warriors native to the moon" Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 14:59, 11 September 2021 (UTC)
  • The Korriban links should be removed from the image captions since they're now included in the prose
  • The context for the Valley of the Dark Lords, Korriban, and Yavin 4 cannot be sourced to the timeline video OOM 224 20:43, 11 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 21:40, 11 September 2021 (UTC)