Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/"A" Squad

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"A" Squad

• Nominated by: DFaceG (talk) 12:16, 25 March 2022 (UTC)
• Nomination comments:
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Support

1. Nice work. Erebus Chronus ^(Talk) 17:45, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
2. Nicely done, DFaceG! — Samonic 20:02, 11 May 2022 (UTC)
3. Good work! —Tomotron^{Star Forge} 03:20, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
4. Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 08:06, 20 July 2022 (UTC)
5. UberSoldat93 (talk) 16:10, 16 August 2022 (UTC)
6. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 17:16, 29 August 2022 (UTC)

Object

Spooky

• I think the last sentence of the intro was meant to be finished with something; is partial.—spookywilloww^talk 17:30, 27 March 2022 (UTC)
  • Fixed. DFaceG (talk) 17:00, 28 March 2022 (UTC)

UberSoldat

• I want to see this article including sections matching pre-existing article precedent.
  • Reworked. DFaceG (talk) 05:53, 5 April 2022 (UTC)
    • Description as well please. UberSoldat93 (talk) 07:29, 8 April 2022 (UTC)
      • Added. DFaceG (talk) 17:37, 9 April 2022 (UTC)
• Please avoid spelling out "Unidentified" in the body, here's an example of how it should be done. UberSoldat93 (talk) 04:21, 5 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Fixed. DFaceG (talk) 05:53, 5 April 2022 (UTC)
• One-paragraph sections should be avoided generally, especially when the entire Biography only consists of those. My suggestion: Get rid of the second heading, and introduce a paragraph split in "Fateful climb." UberSoldat93 (talk) 03:18, 10 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Fixed. DFaceG (talk) 10:53, 10 April 2022 (UTC)
• Four instances of "during" in the intro, let's see some variation.
  • Tweaked. DFaceG (talk) 23:31, 8 August 2022 (UTC)
• Please add a mediacat. UberSoldat93 (talk) 13:44, 4 August 2022 (UTC)
  • Added. DFaceG (talk) 23:31, 8 August 2022 (UTC)

Erebus

• Context for Sarrish.
• Similarly to how star system and sector articles are written, you can remove the mention of it being a squad per its name. So it would become '"A" Squad served under...' or something similar.
• Infoboxes don't indent asterisks more than twice, so the affiliations should only say Galactic Republic and 212th Attack Battalion.
• You could probably say that the squad's phase II armor featured yellow markings.
• The BTS should include Dark Horse Comics as the comics' publisher. It also doesn't need to include "first," since it only appears in one source. Erebus Chronus ^(Talk) 06:04, 13 April 2022 (UTC)
  • All addressed. DFaceG (talk) 18:05, 13 April 2022 (UTC)
    • You should be using Template:DarkHorse as the cite template, unless there's a reason you're using Template:Cite web? Erebus Chronus ^(Talk) 17:29, 21 April 2022 (UTC)
      • The copy of the comic I used was from Star Wars Legends Epic Collection: The Clone Wars Vol. 3 and not the original comic itself, so I was only able to verify its release date using the website. DFaceG (talk) 06:14, 24 April 2022 (UTC)

CC-8

• "The clone forces were ordered to shatter the front lines of the opposing Separatist forces, and eliminate any remaining pockets of resistance by Jedi General Obi-Wan Kenobi" This would be clearer if the fact that Kenobi was giving the orders was mentioned earlier in the sentence. Also only his last name should be used, since he's already been mentioned in the description
  • Fixed. DFaceG (talk) 04:36, 4 June 2022 (UTC)
• Specify that ARC-170s are fighters
  • Specified. DFaceG (talk) 04:36, 4 June 2022 (UTC)
• Cody's clone designation should be mentioned in the body
  • Already mentioned in the Description section of the body.
    • You might be thinking of something else, its' definitely not there
      • Yes, I misunderstood. It is fixed now. DFaceG (talk) 07:54, 9 June 2022 (UTC)
• Marshal Commander is inconsistently capitalized throughout
  • Fixed. DFaceG (talk) 04:36, 4 June 2022 (UTC)
• Publication date should use {{DarkHorse}} Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 12:16, 3 June 2022 (UTC)
  • See the last objection from Erebus Chronus. DFaceG (talk) 04:36, 4 June 2022 (UTC)
    • I saw that and I don't understand the logic there. Since you're citing information from DarkHorse.com its far better to use our citation template for it instead of Cite web, regardless of the version of the comic you have access to. Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 12:54, 8 June 2022 (UTC)
      • Fixed. DFaceG (talk) 00:21, 9 June 2022 (UTC)
• The first sentence of the description kind of reads as though Cody and the lieutenant were the commanders of the whole Grand Army of the Republic
  • Rephrased. DFaceG (talk) 03:57, 15 June 2022 (UTC)
• The first sentence of the history section is all sourced to the date ref, which shouldn't be the case
  • Fixed. DFaceG (talk) 03:57, 15 June 2022 (UTC)
• "After giving Commander Cody and the rest of the 212th their objective, Kenobi departed." Is the location of this meeting shown in the comic? It should be clear where Kenobi is departing from
  • There is no specific known location other than the fact they're on Sarrish, which is already mentioned earlier in the same paragraph. DFaceG (talk) 03:57, 15 June 2022 (UTC)
    • Made a copy-edit just to make it clear that they were already on Sarrish when receiving those orders
• Missing body links, clone trooper, trooper
  • Former link was already in the body's Description section, though I see you added another so I've reorganized the links to be in the correct order. DFaceG (talk) 03:57, 15 June 2022 (UTC)
• "The crash landed the squad precisely where Kenobi had ordered them to avoid, and thinking quickly, the lieutenant leading the squad ordered the troops to prepare to attack. It should be restated where Kenobi had told them to avoid, and what the lieutenant ordered them to attack. Likewise for the "affix grapples" part of the next sentence, where are they affixing grapples to?
  • Fixed. DFaceG (talk) 03:57, 15 June 2022 (UTC)
• "Despite "A" Squad's small victory" needs to be sourced to the comic, not to the Clone Wars episode
  • Fixed. DFaceG (talk) 03:57, 15 June 2022 (UTC)
    • Got this in my copy-edit but in cases like that please make sure that you're not accidentally adding redundant referencing
• Please check my copy-edit, added missing links and tightened up some of the phrasing Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 07:48, 14 June 2022 (UTC)
  • Looks good. DFaceG (talk) 03:57, 15 June 2022 (UTC)
• I'd like to see the last couple of sentences in the intro be rewritten to have a more specific outline of the events of the comic. The part about the battle being a loss for the Republic can probably be removed
  • Fixed. DFaceG (talk) 06:29, 7 July 2022 (UTC)
• "were then ordered to affix grapples to their DC-15A blaster rifles and follow Cody" here you should specify were Cody was leading them and what their objective had become Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 12:36, 27 June 2022 (UTC)
  • Fixed. DFaceG (talk) 06:29, 7 July 2022 (UTC)
• There's some details in Battle of Sarrish/Legends, an old featured article, that would be relevant here, however I don't have access to the comic so please defer to that if there's any contradictions
  • "Separatists shot down the gunship carrying him and "A" Squad just thirty seconds away from the designated landing zone"
    • Fixed. DFaceG (talk) 23:10, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
  • "Using the fallen craft as cover from droid fire"
    • Fixed. DFaceG (talk) 23:10, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
  • "As Cody grappled with the battle droids guarding the gun's ammunition stockpiles" Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 02:58, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
    • Fixed. DFaceG (talk) 23:10, 13 July 2022 (UTC)

Macaroni

• The way you link clone lieutenant is inconsistent between the intro and body.
  • Fixed. DFaceG (talk) 06:08, 19 June 2022 (UTC)
• Correct me if I'm wrong, but isn't the Phase of Phase II armor supposed to be capitalized?
  • Fixed. DFaceG (talk) 06:08, 19 June 2022 (UTC)
• A lot of info is repeated between the Description and C+C sections. It seems that the precedent is to leave it to C+C for describing who's in the squad.
  • Fixed. DFaceG (talk) 01:48, 20 June 2022 (UTC)
• Also about that section, I don't think that the way Cody commanded the squad is actually relevant to describing who's in it--and that info is already covered in History anyway. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 00:23, 17 June 2022 (UTC)
  • Fixed. DFaceG (talk) 01:48, 20 June 2022 (UTC)
• The link/mention of "shuttle" is intro-exclusive. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 16:09, 23 August 2022 (UTC)
  • Fixed. DFaceG (talk) 06:00, 24 August 2022 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 17:16, 29 August 2022 (UTC)